Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler phrases, correct grammar (use present simple for habits), and keep it within 2–3 sentences. Use a linking word if you add one supporting detail.

예시: Yes, I always sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. For example, I like seeing different neighbourhoods and countryside views as we pass them.

제안: Give a direct answer, reduce filler words (um, uh), and use more precise vocabulary. Provide one specific reason and an example to support your answer. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a linking phrase if needed.

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the window because I enjoy capturing landscapes and local scenes. For instance, on my last trip I photographed rolling hills and small villages to remember the journey.

제안: Answer directly and avoid long, repetitive phrases. Use clearer sentence structure and a linking word to give a reason. Provide one specific detail or example to support your preference.

예시: I prefer the mountains because they are peaceful and full of natural scenery. For example, I enjoy hiking forest trails and breathing fresh air away from city noise.

× Honestly it is a big true, I always used to sit on window seats while traveling because I really love to enjoy the sceneries of different areas and city and this just double the this just make me over the moon.

✓ Honestly it is absolutely true; I always used to sit in window seats while traveling because I really enjoy the scenery of different areas and cities, and this just makes me over the moon.

The phrase 'a big true' is incorrect; use adverbs like 'absolutely' to modify 'true'. 'Used to' is acceptable for past habitual actions, but here the speaker refers to a habitual preference, so 'always used to' can be simplified to 'always' or kept as 'always used to' depending on intended time; I preserved 'always used to' meaning past habit but made sentence natural by using 'I always used to sit in window seats' or 'I always sit in window seats'. 'On window seats' is incorrect preposition; use 'in window seats'. 'Sceneries' is uncountable here; use 'scenery' and plural 'cities' instead of 'city'. 'This just double the this just make me' is ungrammatical: corrected to 'this just makes me over the moon' with correct subject-verb agreement and removed repetition. Suggestion: simplify phrases, use correct prepositions (in), choose correct countability (scenery), and ensure subject-verb agreement (this makes).

× Obviously, I take so many pictures whenever I'm traveling and the main purpose of sitting on window seat is that I wanna take more pictures and umm, I take pictures of different sceneries and landscape and countryside and uh, I am a photographer by nature.

✓ Obviously, I take so many pictures whenever I'm traveling, and the main purpose of sitting in a window seat is that I want to take more pictures; I take photos of different scenery, landscapes, and the countryside, and I am a photographer by nature.

'wanna' is informal and nonstandard in formal responses; replace with 'want to' (modal/intent). 'Window seat' needs an article: 'a window seat' or 'the window seat' and preposition 'in'. 'Sceneries' is incorrect countable form; use 'scenery' (uncountable) or 'scenes'; 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match list. 'Pictures' and 'photos' are interchangeable; I used both to vary vocabulary. Also added commas and semicolons to fix run-on sentence. Suggestion: avoid informal contractions like 'wanna', use correct articles and prepositions, ensure parallel lists ('scenery, landscapes, and the countryside').

× Honestly, I'm a mountain person, whenever I make any plan to travel or make any tour, the first thing popping up in my mind is just to run towards the mountains because they are full of sceneries, nature and they are more peaceful without any rush or pollution.

✓ Honestly, I'm a mountain person. Whenever I make a plan to travel or go on a tour, the first thing that pops into my mind is to head for the mountains because they are full of scenery and nature, and they are more peaceful without the rush or pollution.

Mixed verb forms and informal phrasing: 'popping up in my mind' is awkward; use 'that pops into my mind' with subject-verb agreement in present simple. 'Make any plan' is nonstandard; use 'make a plan' or 'plan'. 'Make any tour' should be 'go on a tour'. 'Sceneries' should be 'scenery' (uncountable). Added 'the' before 'rush' to indicate a specific concept. Suggestion: use consistent present simple for habits ('I'm', 'pops'), correct collocations ('go on a tour'), and proper countability ('scenery').