Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and concise but could be improved by giving a clearer topic sentence and adding one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase. Avoid vague phrases like "relax my mind"; be more precise about how it helps you. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, watching passing towns and fields calms me and sometimes inspires ideas for photography or writing.

제안: Good content and clear meaning. Improve coherence by using linking words and combining the two sentences into a smoother response. Add a brief specific example of what you photograph and why, to show richer content and vocabulary.

예시: Yes, I often take photos or short videos of interesting scenery, especially dramatic landscapes or colourful sunsets. For instance, last month I filmed a dramatic cloud formation over rice terraces to remember the light and colours.

제안: Strong direct answer with reasons and personal detail. Improve by varying vocabulary (e.g. "tranquillity" instead of "peace") and by adding a linking word to connect reasons and an example of a specific mountain activity. Keep it within five sentences.

예시: I prefer the mountains because they offer tranquillity and fresh air. For example, I often go hiking with friends in the Cordilleras, where we enjoy panoramic views and challenging trails that help me unwind.

× Yes, of course, so I can relax my mind.

✓ Yes, of course, so I can relax my mind.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. (Included to show no change required.)

× Yes, I do take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially if I find the view scenic.

✓ Yes, I do take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially if I find the view scenic.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. The use of 'do take' is emphatic but acceptable, and the gerund 'taking photos' is implied and correct.

× And sometimes I also try to take a video of it so that I can keep a memory of the view.

✓ Sometimes I also try to take a video of it so that I can keep a memory of the view.

Main issue is stylistic: remove leading 'And' for formality. Grammatically the sentence is correct: 'try to take' is valid and matches the structure. To improve clarity, consider 'record a video' or 'make a video' instead of 'take a video.'

× I prefer the mountains over the sea because mountains give me peace.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because mountains give me peace.

Use 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X over Y' in formal English when comparing preferences. Both are used informally, but 'prefer...to' is the standard grammatical structure.

× I usually go hiking with my friends and I'd like to explore different kind of mountains here in the Philippines.

✓ I usually go hiking with my friends and I'd like to explore different kinds of of mountains here in the Philippines.

Two issues: 'different kind of' should be pluralized to 'different kinds of' because 'different' implies multiple kinds (Grammar Problem Type 1: singular/plural and Type 14: quantifiers). Also remove contraction ambiguity; 'I'd' is fine. Suggestion: 'different kinds of mountains' or 'different types of mountains.'