Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect prepositions. For example, say when and what you enjoy seeing and why it matters to you.

예시: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by car or bus. For example, if we drive along the coast I enjoy watching the ocean because the view is calming and makes the journey feel shorter.

제안: Clarify your meaning and use correct pronouns and verbs. Give a simple negative or positive answer, then explain with one clear supporting detail. Mention what you do photograph and why you do or don’t take photos from the car.

예시: No, I usually don't take photos from a moving car because the pictures often come out blurry. Instead, I prefer to remember the scene or take photos when we stop so I can get a clear shot.

제안: Give a direct preference and a clear reason. Use simple, accurate vocabulary rather than unclear phrases. Provide one or two specific reasons or comparisons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I prefer the sea because I find the ocean more relaxing and I love walking along the beach. In contrast, the mountains feel too isolated for me, so I usually choose coastal trips.

× Definitely yes. I usually look out the window to enjoy the scenery, especially if we are around with more oceans with the journey more relaxing but interesting.

✓ Definitely yes. I usually look out the window to enjoy the scenery, especially when we are near the ocean because the journey is more relaxing and interesting.

The original sentence has several present tense and sentence structure problems: 'if we are around with more oceans' is ungrammatical and mixes prepositions; use 'when we are near the ocean' for a present-time condition. Also 'with the journey more relaxing but interesting' is incorrect phrase structure; use 'because the journey is more relaxing and interesting.' Suggestion: simplify clauses, use 'when' for condition, 'near the ocean' for location, and include a linking verb 'is' for the descriptive phrase. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× He's not yet. I usually capture the ceilings because I I'm able to remember the cat, the scenes.

✓ Not yet. I usually take photos of the scenery because I'm able to remember the scenes.

'He's not yet' incorrectly uses contracted 'he is' for a general statement about the speaker; use 'Not yet.' 'Capture the ceilings' is wrong word choice likely intended 'take photos of the scenery.' 'I I'm' is a typo and 'remember the cat, the scenes' is confusing; remove 'cat' unless intended. Use present simple 'I usually take' for habitual action. Suggestion: use clear verbs ('take photos') and correct contractions and typos. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Oh, I would prefer the ocean. Because because I hate the insurance that the motors have a white range of them so I prefer.

✓ Oh, I prefer the ocean because I dislike how some boats have white hulls, so I prefer it.

The sentence has tense/modal redundancy: 'I would prefer' can be simplified to present 'I prefer' for stated preference. Starting a sentence with 'Because because' is repetitive; remove duplicate. 'I hate the insurance' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'I dislike' or 'I don't like.' 'The motors have a white range of them' is ungrammatical and unclear; if referring to boats or ships, use 'boats have white hulls.' Also repeat 'so I prefer' is redundant; keep one clause. Suggestion: state preference directly and replace incorrect vocabulary with clear nouns and verbs. Grammar problem type ID: 26