Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small grammar and phrasing issues (e.g., "scroll through my social media" not "into").

예시: Sometimes I do, but it depends on my mood. For example, if I'm tired I usually take a nap or scroll through my social media, while when I'm relaxed I enjoy watching the scenery outside.

제안: Avoid repetition and use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Give one specific example of a recent time you took a photo and explain briefly why it mattered, linking ideas with words like "because" or "so that."

예시: Yes, I often take photos of beautiful views because they create lasting memories. For instance, last month I photographed a sunset over the river so that I could look at it later when I felt lonely.

제안: Lead with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words and correct grammar (e.g., "it depends on my mood," "in the mountains"). Be specific about reasons for each preference and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I like both, but it depends on the season. For example, in summer I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach, whereas in autumn I choose the mountains for hiking and panoramic views from the summit.

× Sometimes when I'm tired I just want to take a nap and and scroll into my social media account.

✓ Sometimes when I'm tired I just want to take a nap and scroll through my social media account.

Use of verb + -ing after 'and' is correct but the preposition 'into' is wrong; 'scroll through' is the correct phrasal verb. Also remove the repeated 'and'. Suggestion: use 'scroll through' for browsing content and avoid repeated words.

× Yes, when I saw a beautiful view, a scenic view, I take a picture of it because it gives me a memory, a memorable memory, so I can look back on it when I felt sad or lonely.

✓ Yes, when I see a beautiful view, a scenic view, I take a picture of it because it gives me a memory, so I can look back on it when I feel sad or lonely.

Mixed past and present tenses cause inconsistency. The question asks about habitual action, so use present simple: 'see' and 'feel'. Also 'a memorable memory' is redundant; 'a memory' is sufficient. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habits and avoid redundancy.

× I think both because it depends on my mood. If it's summer I think I want to go on the sea and if it it's in autumn I want to explore and be adventurous in mountain to see a scenic view on the top of the mountain.

✓ I think both because it depends on my mood. If it's summer I think I want to go to the sea, and if it's autumn I want to explore and be adventurous in the mountains to see the scenic view from the top of a mountain.

Several present-tense and preposition problems: use 'go to the sea' not 'go on the sea', correct 'if it it's' to 'if it's', and use plural 'mountains' or 'a mountain' with article. 'On the top of the mountain' is better as 'from the top of a mountain' or 'from the top of the mountain' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use correct prepositions with places ('go to the sea'), fix contractions, and match singular/plural nouns with articles.