Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct small grammatical slips (e.g., double words like "it it") and use singular/plural consistently.

예시: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I especially enjoy mountains and forests because their changing colours and textures are relaxing; for example, seeing mist over a valley makes the journey feel peaceful.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then explain clearly why you take photos with a specific reason and an example. Remove unclear phrases and awkward grammar; use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I like to capture memories of places I visit. For instance, I photograph unusual cloud formations or interesting rivers so I can remember how the landscape looked years later.

제안: Answer directly and give two clear, specific reasons. Use linking words (for example, "because" and "also") and avoid repetition. Mention concrete details to support your preference.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I grew up in a mountainous hometown and feel a strong connection to that landscape. Also, I enjoy hiking and the quiet rivers there, which makes mountain scenery more appealing to me than the sea.

× I love watching scenery out of the window while traveling by bus or car because it it is breathtaking views with umm, mountain, forest, rivers, river, going through the waves.

✓ I love watching the scenery outside the window when traveling by bus or car because it is breathtaking, with mountains, forests, and rivers.

The original sentence mixes structures and has redundant words ('it it', 'river, going through the waves') and incorrect phrasing that suggests passive or broken structure. Simplify to an active descriptive clause: use 'the scenery outside the window' and plural nouns for general descriptions ('mountains, forests, rivers'). Remove filler and redundant repetition to make the sentence grammatical and natural.

× Yeah, I do take photos of the scenery outside the cars window.

✓ Yes, I do take photos of the scenery outside the car's window.

The error is misuse of the plural possessive 'cars'. For a single vehicle use singular possessive 'car's'. Also 'yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is more appropriate in test context. Use 'the scenery' because it refers to specific scenery seen through the window.

× You one of The thing is I love great capturing memories for future and look after what I did at this age.

✓ One of the things is that I love capturing memories to look back on in the future and remember what I did at this age.

The original has broken structure ('You one of The thing is') and incorrect word order. Rephrase to a coherent clause: 'One of the things is that' introduces the point. Use the gerund 'capturing' after 'love'. Use the phrase 'to look back on in the future' or 'to remember' to express purpose. Avoid awkward verbs like 'look after' which do not mean 'remember'.

× So yeah.

✓ So yeah.

No grammatical change required; sentence is fine conversationally. Included here to show no plural/singular error present.

× I prefer mountain because my hometown is also covered with mountains and I, my father is grown up there and I also, I also went there and so many beautiful mountains, also river.

✓ I prefer the mountains because my hometown is also covered with mountains; my father grew up there, and I have been there too. There are so many beautiful mountains and rivers.

The original mixes singular 'mountain' with plural context. Use 'the mountains' or 'mountains' when speaking generally. 'My father is grown up there' is incorrect; use past simple 'grew up' or present perfect 'has grown up' depending on meaning. 'I also went there' should be 'I have been there' or 'I went there' for clarity. Separate ideas into sentences and use plural 'rivers' for general reference. Also fix word order and tense for natural expression.