Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and unfinished sentences. For example, say you feel nervous looking at your phone while travelling and therefore prefer to look outside, and give a short specific detail (e.g., it helps you relax or keeps you focused on the road).

예시: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I feel nervous using my phone while moving. For instance, watching the scenery helps me relax and distracts me from motion sickness, so I prefer to gaze outside rather than look down at my screen.

제안: Make your tense and word choice consistent and give a specific example. Begin with a clear statement about your habit, then add a reason and a brief example. Remove hesitations and check verb forms (take/took).

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window, especially when I travel abroad. I like to capture unfamiliar landscapes and landmarks — for example, I took dozens of pictures of coastal views during my trip to Vietnam last year.

제안: Answer directly, use correct comparative forms, and give a specific reason with one supporting detail. Use linking words (because, so) and correct prepositions (from northern Thailand). Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I come from northern Thailand, where there are many mountains. As a result, I visit mountains more often than the sea since I enjoy hiking and the cooler climate.

× Yes I do, I always look out the window at the scenery because I always feel nervous when I uh cross my eye or look on the mobile. So I will fix my.

✓ Yes, I do. I always look out the window at the scenery because I feel nervous when I look at my phone or cross my eyes. So I will fix my eyes on the view.

Errors: 'look on the mobile' and 'cross my eye' use incorrect prepositions and phrases. Use 'look at' with objects like 'my phone' and the idiomatic phrase is 'cross my eyes' (plural). The original also had sentence fragmentation 'So I will fix my.' Correction fixes prepositions, plural form of 'eye', and completes the final clause. Suggestion: Use 'look at' for directing gaze toward objects, use plural 'eyes' in 'cross my eyes', and finish sentences with a clear object (e.g. 'fix my eyes on the view').

× Yes, I do, especially when I, uh, when I travel abroad, I always took take a photos, a lot of photo because I view in for in abroad.

✓ Yes, I do. Especially when I travel abroad, I always take a lot of photos because I like the views abroad.

Errors: 'took take' mixes past and present forms; 'a photos, a lot of photo' has incorrect articles and pluralization; 'view in for in abroad' is ungrammatical. The question asks about a habitual action, so present simple 'take' is correct. Remove incorrect article 'a' before plural 'photos' and use 'views' or 'the views' instead of unclear phrasing. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and correct plural forms ('photos'), and keep word order simple: 'I always take a lot of photos when I travel abroad.'

× I prefer to see more than mountain because I come from northern of Thailand.

✓ I prefer the sea more than the mountains because I come from the north of Thailand.

Errors: 'prefer to see more than mountain' is awkward and missing articles; 'northern of Thailand' uses incorrect preposition/word form. Use 'prefer X more than Y' or 'prefer the sea to the mountains'. Use definite articles for general geographical references: 'the mountains', 'the north of Thailand'. Suggestion: Use comparative structure 'prefer the sea more than the mountains' or 'prefer the sea to the mountains', and 'the north of Thailand' for region names.

× So I went to mountain more than went to the sea.

✓ So I go to the mountains more often than I go to the sea.

Errors: 'went' is past tense but context describes habitual past and present; missing articles ('to mountain') and awkward repetition. Use present simple 'go' for habitual actions or 'used to go' for past habits. Also use plural 'mountains' and include 'more often than I go to the sea' for clear comparison. Suggestion: For habits, use present simple: 'I go to the mountains more often than to the sea.'