Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more grammatically correct, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and preposition errors (e.g., “about a five-minute walk away,” “mostly used as hotels”). Avoid redundant phrases.

예시: Yes, there are several tall apartment blocks near my home. They are about a five-minute walk away, and many are used as hotels, so I can see them from my window. Because of their height and number, the area feels quite crowded.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and complete your example. Use correct verb forms and linking words to connect idea and example. Be specific about what attracts you (e.g., architecture, details, lighting) and keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: It depends on the building’s design. If I see interesting architecture or attractive surroundings, I take photos and save them on my phone. For example, there is a modern building near my home with a glass façade and landscaped gardens that I photographed recently.

제안: Clarify whether you mean you would like to visit or have already visited. Use one clear topic sentence and add specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, and). Correct articles and noun forms (“a shopping mall,” “good architecture and surroundings”).

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Balash Apartments because it houses a large shopping mall and several restaurants. I’ve heard the architecture is very attractive and the surrounding area is well landscaped, which makes it an interesting place to explore.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and finish your reasoning with a specific example. Use correct noun and verb forms and avoid repetition. Add a linking word to introduce the example (for example, because, since).

예시: No, I would not like to live in a skyscraper because evacuation could be difficult during an emergency. For example, in the event of an earthquake or fire, it would take much longer to reach safety from a high floor.

× There are about a 5 minute walk away and mostly using for a hotel so I can see them from my home window and they make the area feel more crowded.

✓ They are about a five-minute walk away and are mostly used as hotels, so I can see them from my home window and they make the area feel more crowded.

Incorrect use of 'There are' with a distance expression and missing passive/appropriate verb forms. Use 'They are' to refer to the apartment blocks, hyphenate 'five-minute' as a compound adjective, use 'used as' for function, and maintain parallel verb forms ('are mostly used' and 'make'). Suggestion: Replace 'There are' with a clear subject, use correct compound adjective punctuation, and use passive when describing typical use.

× It's depend on structure of the buildings.

✓ It depends on the structure of the buildings.

Subject-verb agreement and incorrect verb form: 'depend' should be 'depends' to match singular subject 'it'. Do not use '-ing' here. Suggestion: Use the third-person singular present form for 'it' (depends).

× If I found modern amenities and beautiful environment of the building, I click photos and store in my phone.

✓ If I find modern amenities and a beautiful environment in a building, I take photos and store them on my phone.

Conditional sentence should use present simple ('find') in the if-clause for a real present/future condition. 'Click photos' is informal and unidiomatic; use 'take photos'. 'Store in my phone' should be 'store them on my phone', and include the object 'them'. Suggestion: Use present simple in conditional, choose natural verbs and correct preposition 'on'.

× For example near my home I found a beautiful.

✓ For example, near my home I found a beautiful building.

Sentence is incomplete; missing the noun that 'beautiful' modifies. Also add a comma after 'For example' for clarity. Suggestion: Always complete the adjective with the noun it describes.

× Yes, definitely. I visited Balash Apartments which is located near my hometown.

✓ Yes, definitely. I visited Balash Apartments, which is located near my hometown.

Comma is needed before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which is located near my hometown'. Tense 'visited' is correct for a past action; ensure punctuation separates clauses. Suggestion: Use a comma before 'which' when adding nonessential information.

× It contains shopping mall and various restaurants.

✓ It contains a shopping mall and various restaurants.

Missing article 'a' before 'shopping mall'. Use 'a' to indicate one shopping mall. Suggestion: Include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns.

× And it has a good architecture and surrounding.

✓ And it has good architecture and pleasant surroundings.

'A good architecture' is unidiomatic; 'architecture' is usually uncountable and not used with 'a'. 'Surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings' and 'pleasant' better describes them. Suggestion: Use 'good architecture' and plural 'surroundings' with an adjective.

× No, I don't want to live in a skyscrapers because it consume more time to come out from it when any natural disaster occurred.

✓ No, I don't want to live in skyscrapers because they take more time to get out of them if any natural disaster occurs.

Multiple article and agreement errors: do not use 'a' before plural 'skyscrapers'. Pronouns must agree: use 'they' and 'them' for plural. 'Consume more time' is unnatural; use 'take more time'. 'Come out from it' should be 'get out of them'. Tense in the conditional phrase should be present for general situations ('occurs'). Suggestion: Remove incorrect article before plurals, match pronouns to plurality, use natural verbs and correct preposition 'out of'.

× For example if there was if there is a earthquake and.

✓ For example, if there is an earthquake, it would be difficult to get out quickly.

Original is fragmented and mixes tenses and clauses. Use 'an earthquake' (article before vowel sound), avoid repeating 'if there was if there is', and complete the thought. Suggestion: Choose a clear conditional structure and complete the sentence with the expected consequence.