Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrasing (e.g., 'not like the cities have' -> 'unlike the city').

예시: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home. I live in Garden City, a suburban area of Brisbane, so it feels more like the countryside. As a result, I enjoy the open spaces and quieter atmosphere compared with the busy city centre.

제안: Correct grammar and give a clear, specific reason and an example. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unclear phrases (e.g., 'I fell in love with take a lot of pictures' -> 'I love taking photos'). Mention a concrete example of a building you photograph and why.

예시: Yes, I love taking photos, especially of interesting buildings. For example, I often photograph the modern facades in central Brisbane because their shapes and lighting look creative. Also, I have many photos on my phone, so I try to capture unique angles whenever I visit the city.

제안: Give a direct answer and one clear supporting detail. If you prefer natural places, say so and contrast with buildings. Use linking words to clarify your reason and provide a specific example of a place you would visit.

예시: Not really — I'm more attracted to natural places than buildings. For instance, if I had free time I would prefer visiting a national park or a forested area rather than a famous skyscraper, because I enjoy hiking and being in quiet, green surroundings.

제안: State your position clearly, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix grammatical errors (e.g., 'you're not leaving' unclear). Mention concrete conveniences such as shops and public transport.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it is very convenient. For example, there are usually supermarkets and shops on the ground floor, and public transport connections are nearby, so daily life and commuting become much easier.

× No, not really, because now I live in Brisbane and in Garden City this area is just like the countryside or the rural area, so there's not like the cities have a lot of high rise building, but I really enjoy it there.

✓ No, not really, because now I live in Brisbane, in the Garden City area, which is more like the countryside or a rural area, so there are not many high-rise buildings, but I really enjoy living there.

Errors: incorrect sentence structure, article use, singular/plural, and awkward clause linking. The phrase 'this area is just like the countryside or the rural area' is wordy and needs an article; 'there's not like the cities have a lot of high rise building' has subject-verb and plural errors. Suggestions: use 'the Garden City area' for clarity, 'which is more like the countryside or a rural area' to link ideas, use 'there are not many high-rise buildings' to correct plural and article usage, and 'living there' as natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yeah, sure. I fell in love with take a lot of pictures.

✓ Yeah, sure. I fell in love with taking a lot of pictures.

Error: incorrect verb form after 'fell in love with'. After a preposition like 'with' a gerund (-ing form) is required. Suggestion: use 'taking' to form 'fell in love with taking'. Grammar problem type ID: 9

× In fact in my phone there have 400 GB about the photos.

✓ In fact, my phone has about 400 GB of photos.

Errors: incorrect word order and verb choice. Use 'my phone has' (subject-verb) and 'about 400 GB of photos' for correct noun phrase. Suggestion: place subject before verb and use 'of' to indicate content. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× So I definitely take the picture for the building just it looks good such as in Brisbane city the star that's showing creative.

✓ So I definitely take pictures of buildings when they look good, such as in Brisbane city where the architecture looks creative.

Errors: article and noun number ('take the picture for the building' -> 'take pictures of buildings'), awkward conjunctions and wrong clause ('just it looks good'). 'the star that's showing creative' is unclear; likely means 'where the architecture looks creative'. Suggestion: use plural 'pictures', 'of' to indicate object, and a relative clause 'when they look good' or 'where the architecture looks creative'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Well, actually I didn't have the exactly of the building that I really want to visit about because I love natural.

✓ Well, actually I don't have an exact building that I really want to visit because I love nature.

Errors: tense mismatch ('didn't have' vs present desire), article and adjective order ('the exactly of the building' incorrect), and word choice ('love natural' should be 'love nature'). Suggestion: use present tense 'don't have' to match current preference, 'an exact building' for correct article and adjective, and 'nature' as the noun. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So if I have a free time or you want to say my dream place is definitely the safe side where the forest.

✓ So if I have free time, my dream place would definitely be somewhere safe near a forest.

Errors: article with 'free time' ('a free time' incorrect), awkward phrase 'you want to say', and incomplete clause 'where the forest'. Suggestion: use 'free time' without 'a', simplify to 'my dream place would be', and say 'near a forest' or 'by a forest' to complete the idea. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yeah, of course you're not leaving the tall building.

✓ Yeah, of course you are not living in a tall building.

Error: wrong verb 'leaving' used instead of 'living'. 'You're not leaving' means something different. Suggestion: use 'living' to match the question about residence. Grammar problem type ID: 4

× It's always mean a lot of things.

✓ It always means a lot of things.

Error: subject-verb agreement and verb form. 'It's always mean' should be 'it always means' or 'it's always meaningful'. Suggestion: use 'means' to agree with subject or rephrase to 'it's always meaningful'. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× That means you live in a really crowded area.

✓ That means you live in a really convenient, crowded area.

Issue: sentence is acceptable but lacks cohesion with previous ideas; adding 'convenient' clarifies intent about amenities. Suggestion: include 'convenient' to reflect proximity to services mentioned. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× That means when you walk down they have supermarket, the store, it's so convenient and also about the transportation and also in the high rise building there also have.

✓ That means when you walk down the street there are supermarkets and shops; it's very convenient, and transportation is easy. High-rise buildings often have additional facilities as well.

Errors: pronoun and subject-verb agreement ('they have supermarket'), missing articles, run-on sentence, and incomplete final clause. Suggestions: use 'there are supermarkets and shops', add articles, separate ideas into clear clauses, and finish the thought about facilities in high-rise buildings. Grammar problem type ID: 26