Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (articles, plural forms), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep to under five sentences.

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small village. Instead, the area has low, traditional houses surrounded by trees, which makes it very peaceful. For example, my street is lined with fruit trees and small gardens, so there’s little urban development.

제안: Start with a clear yes/no or frequency phrase, use correct verb forms and plural nouns, and give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

예시: Sometimes I take photos of buildings when I see something unusual or attractive because I enjoy architectural details. For example, I once photographed a small local tower with a unique patterned facade that caught my attention.

제안: Give one clear example and explain why you want to visit it. Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (articles, singular/plural, word choice). Use linking words (for example, because) and specific details about the building and its features.

예시: Yes. One building I would like to visit is a famous skyscraper on the Gold Coast in Australia because of its striking architecture and ocean views. I’ve seen photos online showing its glass facade and observation deck, and I’d like to experience the panorama of the coastline in person.

제안: Give a direct response (Yes/No) and then provide two clear, concise reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid addressing the examiner incorrectly and keep sentences short and specific.

예시: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because I prefer the quiet and space of village life. For example, village houses give me a garden and fresh air, whereas high-rise apartments often feel crowded and lack outdoor space.

× No, there are the note buildings near to my house because I live in a village village.

✓ No, there are no buildings near my house because I live in a village.

The original uses 'the note' incorrectly and repeats 'village'. Use 'no' with plural 'buildings' and correct word order: 'near my house' (remove unnecessary 'to'). Also remove extra article 'the' before 'note' and correct 'note' to 'no'. Suggestion: Say 'there are no buildings near my house' for clarity.

× There are the small houses and very peaceful environment, and the houses are all always surrounded by the trees.

✓ There are small houses and a very peaceful environment, and the houses are always surrounded by trees.

Do not use 'the' before general plural 'small houses' or 'trees'. Use the article 'a' with 'very peaceful environment' because 'environment' is singular and countable here. 'All always' is redundant; choose 'always'. Also drop 'the' before 'trees'. Suggestion: Use 'the' only for specific nouns already mentioned.

× I sometime take photos of building when I notice something unusual or attractive, for example an extractive idea of a small dollar skyscraper.

✓ I sometimes take photos of buildings when I notice something unusual or attractive, for example an interesting idea of a small local skyscraper.

Use plural 'sometimes' and plural 'buildings' for general statements. 'Sometime' is wrong form. 'Extractive idea' and 'small dollar skyscraper' are incorrect phrases — 'interesting' and 'local' fit better. Maintain adverb placement before main verb. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' and plural nouns for general habits.

× I usually don't know to take pictures of building in my city because there aren't many large or remarkable building here.

✓ I usually don't know how to take pictures of buildings in my city because there aren't many large or remarkable buildings here.

Missing 'how' after 'know' when referring to a skill. Use plural 'buildings' and 'here' placement after 'buildings'. Suggestion: Use 'know how to' for ability/skill and ensure noun number agreement.

× Yes, there are the many building I would like to visit, but I have I have been I have seen online.

✓ Yes, there are many buildings I would like to visit, but I have seen them online.

Use plural 'buildings' and remove unnecessary 'the'. The original repeats 'I have' and lacks an object after 'seen'; include 'them' to refer to the buildings. Also use simple perfect 'I have seen' for experiences. Suggestion: Keep subject-verb number agreement and avoid repetition.

× One of them is skyscraper on the Gold Coast in Australia.

✓ One of them is a skyscraper on the Gold Coast in Australia.

Add the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun 'skyscraper'. Suggestion: Use 'a' or 'an' with singular countable nouns when mentioning one of many.

× It is one of the largest building and there are the famous for striker architecture, intelligent hospitality and a beautiful ocean view which is one of the most important feature to visit over there.

✓ It is one of the largest buildings and is famous for striking architecture, excellent hospitality and a beautiful ocean view, which is one of the most important features that attract visitors.

Use plural 'buildings' after 'one of the largest'. Replace 'there are the famous for' with 'is famous for'. 'Striker' should be 'striking'; 'intelligent hospitality' is odd — use 'excellent hospitality'. 'Feature' should be plural 'features' and add 'that attract visitors' for clarity. Suggestion: Ensure noun number agreement after 'one of the...' and use correct adjective forms.

× No, I don't want you to live in the tall building.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building.

The original wrongly addresses the examiner ('you') instead of speaking about the speaker's preference. Also use 'a' before 'tall building' for a non-specific singular noun. Suggestion: Use the correct subject pronoun and appropriate article.

× I want prefer to live in the villages because it's very easy and convenient way to live in villages because we don't have if I talk about tall building, they are the so many stairs apartment that we can say we have to come.

✓ I prefer to live in a village because it is an easy and convenient way of life; tall buildings often have many stairs in apartments, which makes them less convenient.

Remove redundant 'I want prefer' and use 'prefer'. Use singular 'a village' for general preference. 'It's very easy and convenient way' needs 'an' before 'easy' and 'way of life' for clarity. The latter clause is confusing; rephrase to explain that tall buildings often have many stairs which is inconvenient. Suggestion: Use clear clauses, avoid repetition, and choose correct articles and prepositions.