Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence, correct grammar and vocabulary, avoid unclear words (e.g. 'bottom', 'heroes blocks'). Use one or two supporting details and a linking word for coherence. Aim for 2–3 sentences total.

예시: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home because I live on the outskirts of the city. The area mostly has low-rise houses and small shops, so you rarely see skyscrapers.

제안: Good structure and specific details. Improve word choice and clarity (e.g. use 'facades' not 'facets'), and vary linking phrases to sound more natural. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing buildings because many in my city have European-style facades with ornate 19th-century tiles. For example, I often photograph old townhouses and churches since their carved decorations and stained-glass windows look striking in photos.

제안: Answer is specific but contains small accuracy and grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two precise reasons using linking words (e.g. 'because' or 'as'). Avoid uncertain phrases like 'four or five' unless necessary.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit a small square in Lambatra city centre next to the Pierce Building of the National University of Mongolia because it has several wooden benches where I can sit and relax. I imagine watching students go by and enjoying the peaceful atmosphere.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and correct tense/grammar. Replace unclear phrases ('bridging situation') and fix sentence structure. Use one or two supporting points with linking words and finish concisely.

예시: Yes, I would. I lived in a high-rise apartment before and enjoyed the bright, warm rooms because sunlight streamed through the windows. For example, watching the sunrise from my balcony was peaceful and helped me start the day positively.

× No, there are not many tall buildings near all house because I live on the outskirts of the bottom.

✓ No, there are not many tall buildings near our houses because I live on the outskirts of town.

Plural/singular errors: 'all house' is incorrect; likely intended 'our houses' (plural). 'the bottom' is wrong contextually; 'town' fits. Use 'our' to indicate the area where the speaker lives. Also 'outskirts of town' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: Use 'our houses' or 'my house' consistently depending on intended meaning.

× The neighborhood mostly consists of low rise homes and small shops so you rarely see heroes blocks. Yeah.

✓ The neighborhood mostly consists of low-rise homes and small shops, so you rarely see high-rise blocks.

Sentence structure and word choice errors: 'low rise' should be hyphenated as 'low-rise' when used as a compound adjective. 'heroes blocks' is nonsensical; context suggests 'high-rise blocks'. A comma is needed before 'so' joining two clauses. Remove filler 'Yeah' in formal responses. Suggestion: Use clear adjectives and correct compounds; place a comma before coordinating conjunctions that join independent clauses.

× Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing buildings because I love the European style facets in my city, especially the ornate tiles from the 19th century.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing buildings because I love the European-style facades in my city, especially the ornate tiles from the 19th century.

Article/word choice and compound adjective issues: 'European style' should be hyphenated as 'European-style' when modifying 'facades'. 'facets' is the wrong word; 'facades' (building fronts) is correct. No article change needed but word correction improves meaning. Suggestion: Use precise architectural vocabulary ('facade') and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× For example, I often take pictures of old townhouses and churches because their decorations and windows look great in photos.

✓ For example, I often take pictures of old townhouses and churches because their decorations and windows look great in photos.

Pronoun usage is acceptable here; 'their' correctly refers to plural 'townhouses and churches'. No correction needed. Suggestion: Maintain clear antecedents for pronouns.

× Yes, I would like to visit a small square in Lambatra city center, situated next to Pierce building of the National University of Mongolia.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit a small square in Lambatra city center, situated next to the Pierce Building of the National University of Mongolia.

Article and capitalization: Use the definite article 'the' before a specific building name when it functions as a unique landmark. Capitalize proper names: 'Pierce Building'. Suggestion: Use 'the' before named buildings and capitalize official building names.

× I like it because it has four or five wooden benches where I can sit and relax while watching students and enjoying the quiet as much.

✓ I like it because it has four or five wooden benches where I can sit and relax while watching students and enjoying the quiet as well.

Preposition/phrase choice: 'as much' is awkward and unidiomatic here; 'as well' or 'too' is appropriate to add that enjoyment. 'Watching students and enjoying the quiet as well' reads naturally. Suggestion: Use 'as well' or 'too' for adding similar activities.

× Yes I would, I lived in a high rise apartment before and loved the bridging situation.

✓ Yes, I would. I lived in a high-rise apartment before and loved the bright situation.

Several errors: punctuation needed between clauses. 'High rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise'. 'Bridging situation' is incorrect word choice; context likely intended 'bright' (or 'breezy' or 'spacious'). I chose 'bright' to match following sentence about light. If 'breezy' or 'spacious' was intended, use that instead. Suggestion: Use hyphenation for compound adjectives and choose accurate adjectives; separate independent clauses with a period or semicolon.

× There's a light streaming through the windows made the rooms felt bright and warm.

✓ The light streaming through the windows made the rooms feel bright and warm.

Article and verb form errors: 'There's a light' is unnatural here; use 'The light' to refer to the sunlight previously mentioned. 'Made the rooms felt' mixes past participle and base form; after 'made' use base verb 'feel', not 'felt'. Suggestion: After 'made', use the base form of the verb; use 'the' to refer to a specific previously mentioned light.

× I especially enjoyed watching the sunrise from my balcony because it was so peaceful and relaxing and it helped me start.

✓ I especially enjoyed watching the sunrise from my balcony because it was so peaceful and relaxing and it helped me start my day.

Missing object: 'helped me start' is incomplete; add 'my day' to specify what was started. Grammar is otherwise fine; use a noun phrase to complete the verb 'start'. Suggestion: Complete transitive verbs with appropriate objects ('start my day').