Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Use correct quantifiers and avoid repetition. For example, say ‘‘Not really; there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. Most skyscrapers are in the city centre, which is quite far from my neighbourhood and are well-known across the state.’’

예시: Not really. There aren’t many tall buildings near my home because most skyscrapers are in the city centre, which is quite far from my neighbourhood. Those buildings are well-known across the state.

제안: Answer directly, avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Correct wrong verbs and use linking words for clarity. For example, ‘‘Yes, I do. When I visit big cities such as Ahmedabad or Vadodara, I like to go to the top floors of tall buildings and take photos of the view on my phone.’’

예시: Yes, I do. When I visit big cities like Ahmedabad or Vadodara, I often go to the upper floors of tall buildings and take photos of the city view on my phone.

제안: Be precise and avoid inaccurate facts. Use one clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason. For example: ‘‘Yes — I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in the UAE because it is the tallest building in the world and offers panoramic city views.’’

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in the United Arab Emirates. It is famous for being extremely tall, and I want to see the panoramic views from its observation deck.

제안: Keep it natural and correct word choice; avoid repeated ideas. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two clear reasons with linking words. For example: ‘‘Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the rooftop views of sunsets and sunrises are relaxing, and I could enjoy them with my family.’’

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the rooftop views of sunrise and sunset are very relaxing. I could sit with my mother and siblings, enjoy tea, and make lasting memories.

× Not pretty much, there are little amount of skyscrapers in my hometown which are far from my society because I live in other area of the hometown.

✓ Not really; there are few skyscrapers in my hometown, and they are far from my neighborhood because I live in a different part of the town.

The student used 'little amount' incorrectly with countable noun 'skyscrapers'. Use 'few' for countable plural nouns. 'Pretty much' is informal and wrong here; 'not really' fits better. 'Society' is likely intended as 'neighborhood' and 'other area of the hometown' should be 'a different part of the town'. Maintain present simple to describe general facts. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× But in the center of the my city there are certain certain tall buildings where they are famous around the whole state.

✓ But in the center of my city there are some tall buildings that are famous across the whole state.

The phrase 'the my city' incorrectly uses both definite article and possessive; use 'my city'. 'Certain certain' is redundant; use 'some'. 'Where they are famous' is incorrect clause usage; use 'that are famous across' to describe the buildings. Keep present simple for general statements. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× Whenever I defeat mega cities like Ahmedabad and Vadodara, at that time, I, I usually want to uh, want to experience some tall building, uh, tall building views from the top of the floors at the time.

✓ Whenever I visit big cities like Ahmedabad and Vadodara, I usually want to experience views from the top floors of tall buildings.

'Defeat' is incorrect verb; 'visit' is appropriate. Remove redundant phrases 'at that time' and filler words. Use 'top floors' not 'top of the floors'. Maintain present simple for habitual action. 'Mega cities' is better phrased as 'big cities'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I usually take the whole scenario in my to capture in my mobile phones.

✓ I usually capture the whole scene on my mobile phone.

Phrase 'take the whole scenario in my to capture in my mobile phones' is ungrammatical. Use 'capture' with 'on my mobile phone'. 'Scene' is the correct noun. Use singular 'phone' if referring to one device. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Certainly there is a a famous building which is situated in the United Arab Emirates, namely Burj Khalifa.

✓ Certainly, there is a famous building in the United Arab Emirates, namely the Burj Khalifa.

Double 'a a' is a typing error. Use definite article 'the' before 'Burj Khalifa' because it is a unique landmark. Keep present simple when stating existence. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× This building is so fascinating like there are about 200 of 200 of rooms as well as floors in it.

✓ This building is very fascinating; it has about 200 floors and many rooms.

Phrase 'about 200 of 200 of rooms as well as floors' is incorrect and confusing. Use 'it has about 200 floors and many rooms'. 'So ... like' is informal and ungrammatical here; use 'very' or restructure the sentence. Maintain present simple factual description. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× And it is a very famous all over the world.

✓ And it is very famous all over the world.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'very famous'; remove it. Use present simple for general reputation. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× So I mostly visit to there.

✓ So I would like to visit there mostly.

'Visit to there' is incorrect; use 'visit there' or 'go there'. 'Mostly visit to there' is awkward; 'I would like to visit there' fits the question asking about a building they would like to visit. Adjust modal to 'would like' to express desire. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Obviously, yes, I want to live in a skyscraper because the view from the top rooftop is very metaphorizing.

✓ Obviously, yes, I want to live in a skyscraper because the view from the rooftop is very impressive.

'Top rooftop' is redundant; 'rooftop' suffices. 'Metaphorizing' is not a correct adjective; use 'impressive' or 'breathtaking'. Maintain present simple for preference. Modal is fine but corrected vocabulary is needed. Grammar problem type ID: 4

× Also the eye-catching sunset and sunrise it may.

✓ Also, the eye-catching sunsets and sunrises might be wonderful to see.

Original phrase is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'Sunset and sunrise it may' must be rephrased to indicate possibility: 'might be wonderful to see'. Use plural 'sunsets and sunrises' for general statements. Keep modal 'might' for possibility. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× It would make me relax whenever I sit with a cup of coffee, Coffee with my mother or with my siblings.

✓ It would make me relaxed whenever I sit with a cup of coffee with my mother or my siblings.

Use 'make me relaxed' or better 'help me relax'. Capitalization error 'Coffee'. Combine prepositional phrases: 'with a cup of coffee with my mother' is acceptable though can be 'while having a cup of coffee with my mother'. Maintain conditional modal 'would' for hypothetical preference. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× It would be a great memory. It would be make me a great memory with them.

✓ It would be a great memory with them.

Second sentence is ungrammatical: 'It would be make me a great memory with them' mixes structures. Combine into a single correct sentence 'It would be a great memory with them' or 'It would create great memories with them.' Use plural 'memories' for repeated experiences. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]}}