Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and mostly natural, but there are some grammar and coherence issues and slight redundancy. Aim for a clear topic sentence, correct article/noun forms, and one supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within four sentences.

예시: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. It is mainly a commercial area with low-rise shops and houses, and many houses have been converted into cafes and restaurants. As a result, the skyline is quite low and feels more intimate than in a city centre.

제안: Good content and specific example, but there are errors (e.g. 'at the desk' likely 'at dusk') and some tense/grammar slips. Use one clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary, and link supporting details (time, reason, result). Avoid repeating 'pictures' and 'photos'.

예시: Yes, I often photograph buildings when I travel. For example, during a trip to Bangkok I took many shots of the high-rise skyline at dusk because the lights and reflections made the views very photogenic, so I shared my favourite images online.

제안: The idea is clear but pronunciation spelling errors ('billing' for 'building') and incomplete final sentence weaken the response. Structure your answer: state the building, give specific details and one reason. Use linking words and finish your thought.

예시: Yes, the building I'd love to visit again is the Skywalk in Bangkok. It features a glass skywalk on the 74th floor with panoramic city views, and many tourists go there to take photos, especially at sunset because the colours are stunning.

제안: Your position is clear but grammar and coherence problems reduce clarity. Use a direct topic sentence, then two concise supporting reasons linked by conjunctions. Avoid trailing or incomplete phrases.

예시: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. I prefer a house because it offers more space and privacy, and it feels quieter and more peaceful than apartment living.

× Where I live it's mainly a commercial area made-up of low rise buildings and houses.

✓ Where I live, it's mainly a commercial area made up of low-rise buildings and houses.

Use 'made up of' without a hyphen between 'made' and 'up'; 'made-up' as an adjective means 'fabricated' which is not intended. Also use a hyphen in 'low-rise'. Add a comma after the introductory clause 'Where I live'. Suggestions: add the comma after the introductory clause, write 'made up of' (two words) and hyphenate 'low-rise'.

× Many of the houses have been converted into a restaurant, cafes.

✓ Many of the houses have been converted into restaurants and cafes.

The original mixes singular and plural and uses incorrect conjunction. 'Many of the houses' requires plural nouns 'restaurants' and 'cafes'. Use 'and' to link the two types. Suggestion: match plurality and use appropriate conjunction.

× There aren't any tall buildings or skyscrapers nearby so the skyline is fairly low.

✓ There aren't any tall buildings or skyscrapers nearby, so the skyline is fairly low.

Missing comma before coordinating conjunction 'so' when connecting two independent clauses. Add the comma for correct sentence structure.

× Yes, when I visited Bangkok, Thailand, I took many pictures and photos of the high rise buildings, especially at the desk.

✓ Yes, when I visited Bangkok, Thailand, I took many pictures of the high-rise buildings, especially at dusk.

'High rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise'. 'Desk' is incorrect in context; the intended word is 'dusk' (time of evening). Also avoid redundancy 'pictures and photos'—use one term. Suggestion: use 'pictures' and correct 'dusk'.

× When the lights come on, the skyline becomes very photogenic.

✓ When the lights come on, the skyline becomes very photogenic.

Sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses present simple for habitual or general truth. No change needed.

× I enjoyed capturing the reflections at different angles and end up sharing my best shot online.

✓ I enjoyed capturing the reflections at different angles and ended up sharing my best shot online.

The first clause is past tense 'enjoyed', so the coordinated action should also be past: 'ended up' rather than 'end up'. Maintain consistent past tense. Suggestion: use past tense for both actions.

× Yes, the billing I would love to revisit is the Skywalker in Bangkok.

✓ Yes, the building I would love to revisit is the Skywalker in Bangkok.

'Billing' is a misspelling; the correct noun is 'building'. Suggestion: correct spelling to 'building'.

× It has a spectacular glass skywalk on the 74th floor which gives the panoramic city view and many tourists go there for to take pictures.

✓ It has a spectacular glass skywalk on the 74th floor, which gives a panoramic view of the city, and many tourists go there to take pictures.

Add comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which gives...'. Use 'a panoramic view of the city' rather than 'the panoramic city view'. Remove the extra 'for' before 'to take pictures'—correct phrase is 'go there to take pictures'. Suggestion: reorder 'view of the city' and remove redundant 'for'.

× I would want to go back because of the beautiful experience of the sunset and when the.

✓ I would want to go back because of the beautiful experience of the sunset and the views at that time.

Original sentence is incomplete ('and when the.'), missing an object and clear structure. Complete the sentence by specifying 'the views at that time' or 'the changing colors at sunset'. Suggestion: avoid trailing fragments and provide a clear noun phrase.

× No, I would never prefer a building than a house.

✓ No, I would never prefer living in a building to living in a house.

Use 'prefer A to B' structure, not 'prefer A than B'. Also make the elements parallel: 'living in a building' vs 'living in a house'. Suggestion: use 'prefer...to...' and keep parallel structure.

× I have always lived in a house from the very start.

✓ I have always lived in a house.

Combining present perfect 'have always lived' with 'from the very start' is redundant or awkward. Either 'I have always lived in a house' or 'I have lived in a house since the very beginning.' Suggestion: remove redundancy or use 'since' with a clear starting point.

× It gives me peace, space, privacy and no.

✓ It gives me peace, space, privacy, and so on.

The phrase 'and no' is incorrect and incomplete. Use 'and so on' or finish the list with a final item. Also add a comma before 'and' in a list. Suggestion: complete the list or use 'and so on'.