Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct phrases (e.g., “near my home” not “nearby my control”), and give one or two specific details using linking words. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are several hotels and condominium blocks that rent apartments to visitors and tenants. Because the area is close to the city center, these buildings are quite common.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence then explain briefly with a clear reason and one specific detail. Use linking words like “because” and “so” to connect ideas, and avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., “see the reasons” → “see a reason”).

예시: No, I usually don’t. I don’t take photos of buildings because I see them so often during my commute, so they don’t feel special enough to photograph.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and then give specific details (location, what you like about it) using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “one time”→“sometime” or “one day”; “luxury”→“luxurious”).

예시: Yes. I would like to visit a tall, elegant building in Bangkok called the Siam Buildings because it is known for its luxurious design and panoramic views. If I have the opportunity, I would like to go there one day to see the architecture and enjoy the view from the top.

제안: Answer directly, then provide clear reasons with correct vocabulary. Replace unclear words (e.g., “fry”→“fire”; “safety pressures”→“safety guarantees”). Use linking words like “because” and give one or two specific concerns. Keep sentences natural and concise.

예시: No, I wouldn’t. I’m concerned about safety in emergencies because fires or earthquakes would be harder to escape from in a tall building, and during flooding lower facilities might be affected. Therefore I prefer a low-rise house where evacuation feels easier.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings nearby my control.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home.

The preposition 'nearby' is an adverb and 'my control' is incorrect choice of noun. Use the preposition 'near' with a noun phrase like 'my home' or use 'nearby' before a noun: 'many tall buildings nearby'. Also 'my control' is not natural for location; 'home' or 'house' fits the context. Suggestion: use 'near my home' or 'nearby my home' (better: 'near my home').

× Mostly there are some hotels or some personal condominiums for renting.

✓ Mostly there are hotels or private condominiums for rent.

Using 'some' twice is redundant. 'Personal condominiums' is unnatural; use 'private condominiums'. Use the phrase 'for rent' rather than 'for renting'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'some' and use idiomatic noun forms: 'hotels or private condominiums for rent.'

× No, I do not because I don't see the reasons why I should take the photo.

✓ No, I don't, because I don't see any reason to take photos.

Tense is mostly fine but phrase 'see the reasons why I should take the photo' is wordy and unidiomatic. Use present simple contraction 'don't' and 'any reason to take photos' is more natural. Also plural 'photos' matches general activity. Suggestion: use 'I don't see any reason to take photos.'

× Mostly when I commute I see the tall buildings up quite often.

✓ Mostly when I commute I see tall buildings quite often.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'tall buildings' when speaking generally. The adverb 'up' is incorrect here and should be removed. Suggestion: say 'I see tall buildings quite often.'

× Yes, in Thailand, in Bangkok that is 1 tall elegant building called Siam Buildings.

✓ Yes, in Thailand, in Bangkok there is one tall, elegant building called the Siam Building.

Sentence structure: 'that is 1 tall elegant building' is incorrect ordering and numeral usage. Use 'there is' to introduce existence and write 'one' as word. Use commas between adjectives 'tall, elegant'. 'Siam Buildings' likely singular so use 'the Siam Building'. Suggestion: 'there is one tall, elegant building called the Siam Building.'

× It was so wonderful and luxury building.

✓ It was a wonderful and luxurious building.

Wrong word form: 'luxury' is a noun or adjective in some contexts but 'luxurious' is the correct adjective to describe a building. Also add an article 'a' before 'wonderful'. Suggestion: use 'a wonderful and luxurious building.'

× I like to visit one time if I have opportunity.

✓ I would like to visit it once if I have the opportunity.

'Like to visit one time' is unnatural; use 'would like to visit it once' to express desire. Also include definite article 'the' before 'opportunity'. Use 'once' instead of 'one time'. Suggestion: 'I would like to visit it once if I have the opportunity.'

× Not at all. I think about emergency care such as fry or some flooding.

✓ Not at all. I worry about emergencies such as fire or flooding.

'Think about emergency care' is odd; 'worry about emergencies' is clearer. 'Fry' is a misspelling of 'fire'. 'Some flooding' is awkward; 'flooding' is fine without 'some'. Suggestion: 'I worry about emergencies such as fire or flooding.'

× I don't think tall building could offer some safety pressures that I can ensure about my life.

✓ I don't think tall buildings could offer the safety and protection I need to feel secure in my life.

Several errors: 'tall building' should be plural 'tall buildings' for general statement. Missing modal auxiliary form: 'could' is okay but needs plural subject. 'Some safety pressures' is incorrect phrase; use 'the safety and protection'. 'That I can ensure about my life' is ungrammatical—use 'I need to feel secure in my life.' Suggestion: 'I don't think tall buildings can offer the safety and protection I need to feel secure.'