Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接で簡潔ですが、文法や論理の流れに改善の余地があります。トピック文は明確ですが、“We are located in my hometown” は不自然で意味が曖昧です。また詳細は具体性に欠け、冗長な表現（“There are a lot of housing”）が見られます。具体的な例や位置関係を述べ、文法を正しく整えてください。例：場所（市中心部か郊外か）、どれくらい高いか、いつそれらを見かけるか等を付け加えると効果的です。

예시: Yes, there are several tall apartment buildings near my home. They’re mainly clustered along the main road about a five-minute walk from my house, and most of them are around ten to fifteen stories high.

제안: 回答は率直ですが、文法誤りと意味不明な表現（“I surrounded me”）があります。希望を述べるなら理由や具体的な状況を付け加えてください。リンク語（however, because, so）を使い、なぜ撮らないのか、いつ撮りたいのか、どのような建物を撮りたいのかを説明しましょう。

예시: To be honest, I don’t usually take photos of buildings, because I rarely carry a camera. However, I would like to take pictures of historic or unusual buildings when I travel, especially old temples or modern skyscrapers with interesting designs.

제안: 答えは意図は通じますが、多くの文法ミスと不明瞭な語句（“our car” は誤り）があります。具体的に訪れたい建物の名前と理由を述べ、場所や特徴を説明してください。つなぎ言葉（for example, because, also）を使って流れを良くしましょう。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Himeji Castle, which is one of the most famous castles in my country. It is located in Hyogo Prefecture and is known for its white exterior and well-preserved architecture, so I want to see the structure and history in person.

제안: 理由はシンプルでわかりやすいですが、根拠が曖昧で冗長な表現（“Maybe. Bugs don't fly.”）があります。より説得力を持たせるには、他の利点（眺め、安全性、利便性など）を挙げて具体的に説明し、短く整った文にまとめましょう。

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because apartments on higher floors usually have fewer insects and better views. Also, tall buildings often have good security and convenient facilities like elevators and nearby shops.

× Yes, there are tall buildings near my home, for instance several apartments.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my home; for instance, several apartment buildings.

The phrase 'several apartments' is grammatically plural but sounds odd as an example of 'tall buildings'. Use 'several apartment buildings' to indicate plural buildings. Also add a semicolon or conjunction for clearer sentence structure. Suggestion: use noun phrase that matches the head noun (buildings) and include necessary punctuation.

× We are located in my hometown.

✓ I live in my hometown.

'We are located in my hometown' is awkward and mismatches the subject 'we' with 'my hometown'. The intended meaning is personal residence, so 'I live in my hometown' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'I live in' for stating where you reside.

× There are a lot of housing.

✓ There is a lot of housing.

'Housing' is an uncountable noun treated as singular; therefore use 'There is a lot of housing' not 'There are'. Suggestion: Use 'There is' with uncountable nouns, or use 'a lot of houses' if you mean countable units.

× To be honest, I don't take photos of buildings, but I want to take photos.

✓ To be honest, I don't usually take photos of buildings, but I want to take some.

The original is understandable but unnatural: 'want to take photos' is fine, but adding 'usually' clarifies habitual action, and 'some' is a natural indefinite object. Suggestion: Use adverbs like 'usually' for habits and 'some' for unspecified plural objects.

× I surrounded me.

✓ I was surrounded (by them) or I looked around me.

'I surrounded me' is ungrammatical because 'surround' is a transitive verb requiring an external agent, or use a reflexive structure differently. If meaning you looked around yourself, say 'I looked around me'. If meaning people surrounded you, say 'I was surrounded'. Suggestion: Choose passive 'was surrounded' or active 'looked around' with appropriate agents.

× Yes, there is a building I would like to visit.

✓ Yes, there is a building I would like to visit.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It correctly uses singular 'a building' to match 'is'. Suggestion: None.

× For instance, umm, there are many castle in our car, our country.

✓ For instance, there are many castles in our country.

'Castle' should be plural 'castles' to match 'many'. 'Car' is incorrect; use 'country'. Remove filler 'umm' in formal answer. Suggestion: Use plural noun after 'many' and correct the word to 'country'.

× East Castle is in its prefecture.

✓ East Castle is in that prefecture.

'Its prefecture' is unclear because the referent is not specified; 'that prefecture' or name of prefecture is clearer. In English, using 'its' requires a clear antecedent. Suggestion: Use a clear demonstrative or name for the prefecture.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building.

This sentence is correct as written; the article and agreement are appropriate. Suggestion: None.

× This is because there are not bugs in tall buildings.

✓ This is because there are no bugs in tall buildings.

Use 'no' with plural countable nouns in negative general statements: 'there are no bugs' is correct, whereas 'there are not bugs' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'there are no' for negative existence of plural nouns.

× Bugs don't fly.

✓ Bugs don't fly (in tall buildings).

As a general present-tense statement it's grammatical, but context implies 'in tall buildings' so adding that clarifies meaning. If intending a general fact, the sentence is fine. Suggestion: Add context 'in tall buildings' to make the connection clear.