Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and fix errors (e.g., 'capitol' -> 'capital', subject-verb agreement). Add one specific detail about the distance or what you like about the countryside. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a rural area, and the nearest high-rises are in the capital, Budapest, about an hour away. I prefer the countryside because it is quiet and green, so I don’t miss the city skyline.

제안: Clarify and correct unclear phrases, reduce redundancy, and be specific. Replace awkward expressions ('I like the same', 'big band') and give one concrete example (which building in London?). Use linking words to order reasons.

예시: Yes, I often photograph buildings, especially when they look unusual or impressive. For example, on vacation with my family I photographed the Tower Bridge in London because I liked its design. Taking architectural photos makes me feel relaxed and helps me remember trips.

제안: Be specific about the building and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'a famous bank building' not 'bank' alone). Explain why you want to visit with concrete details about what interests you (architecture, banking operations). Use linking words and avoid vague phrases like 'competitive' without context.

예시: Yes. There is a famous bank building in Budapest that I would like to visit. Because I am interested in banking and sales, I want to see its interior design and historical architecture, and perhaps learn about how the bank operates today.

제안: Use a clear, natural opener and correct idioms ('not really fast about it' is incorrect). State preference directly, give one specific reason (noise, space, view), and use a linking word to contrast alternatives.

예시: Not really — I would prefer to keep living in the rural area where I am now. Although I don't mind tall buildings, I like the countryside because it is quieter and I have more outdoor space, so I feel more relaxed there.

× The closest tall buildings that I have is at the capitol, Budapest, but I don't mind it actually because I like this countryside.

✓ The closest tall buildings that I have are at the capital, Budapest, but I don't mind them actually because I like this countryside.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'buildings' is plural so the verb should be 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement error). Also the pronoun referring to 'buildings' should be plural 'them' not 'it'. Additionally 'capitol' is the building where a legislature meets; the correct word for the city as seat of government is 'capital'. Improve by matching verb and pronoun number to the plural noun and using the correct noun 'capital'.

× Actually no.

✓ Actually, no.

Punctuation/clarity: a comma is needed after 'Actually' to set off the interjection for natural written English. This is an article/punctuation type error affecting readability. Add the comma to reflect spoken pause.

× I live in a rural area, therefore I don't have any tall buildings near me.

✓ I live in a rural area; therefore, I don't have any tall buildings near me.

Sentence structure and linking adverb: 'therefore' should be set off with punctuation (semicolon before or period and comma after) when joining independent clauses. This improves grammatical correctness and clarity. Also tense is present and appropriate.

× Yes, I usually do if it looks extraordinary or I like the same.

✓ Yes, I usually do if it looks extraordinary or if I like it.

Pronoun and sentence structure: 'the same' is unnatural here; use 'it' to refer to 'the building/photo'. Also add 'if' before the second clause to parallel the conditional structure. This fixes incorrect pronoun use and improves sentence flow.

× I feel really at ease when I take pictures of beautiful or spectacular buildings.

✓ I feel really at ease when I take pictures of beautiful or spectacular buildings.

No grammatical correction needed. Sentence is correct; keeping it as-is for clarity.

× I usually take it when I'm on vacation and with my family.

✓ I usually take them when I'm on vacation and with my family.

Pronoun number/verb agreement: 'pictures' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it'. Change the pronoun to match the plural antecedent.

× My favorite one is the big band in London.

✓ My favorite one is the big bridge in London.

Word choice leading to semantic error: 'band' is likely incorrect in context of buildings/landmarks; 'bridge' (for example, 'the big bridge') fits better. If the student meant a specific structure (e.g., 'the band' is incorrect), choose the intended noun. This corrects an incorrect lexical choice to make the sentence meaningful.

× Yes, in Budapest there's a bank that's extraordinarily famous and I haven't been there.

✓ Yes, in Budapest there's a bank that's extraordinarily famous and I haven't been there yet.

Aspect/tense nuance: adding 'yet' is idiomatic with present perfect ('haven't been') to indicate up to now. The rest of the tense is correct.

× I'm interested in bank and sales, therefore I really want to visit it.

✓ I'm interested in banking and sales; therefore, I really want to visit it.

Incorrect use of noun form: use 'banking' (the activity/field) rather than 'bank'. Also punctuation around 'therefore' as noted earlier. 'It' correctly refers to the bank (singular), so keep 'it'.

× I've heard that it's really competitive and the inside is just beautifully made and built.

✓ I've heard that it's really impressive and the interior is beautifully designed and constructed.

Word choice and adjective/adverb use: 'competitive' is odd for a building; perhaps 'impressive' fits better. 'The inside' is better expressed as 'the interior'. 'Beautifully made and built' is redundant and awkward; 'beautifully designed and constructed' is clearer and uses appropriate adjective/adverb forms.

× I'm not really fast about it, however I would prefer to live in the rural area as I'm living in now.

✓ I'm not really fast about it; however, I would prefer to live in the rural area where I'm living now.

Incorrect idiom and sentence linking: 'not really fast about it' is incorrect idiomatically; likely meant 'not really sure about it' or 'not really keen on it'. Also use 'where I'm living now' for clarity. Punctuation around 'however' should separate clauses. Adjusting idiom fixes meaning and grammaticality.

× I don't have anything against tall buildings however it's just a preference of mine and I would like to keep it this way.

✓ I don't have anything against tall buildings; however, it's just a preference of mine and I would like to keep it that way.

Pronoun choice and punctuation: 'this way' is acceptable but 'that way' is more natural in this context. Add punctuation around 'however'. No major pronoun error but 'that' is preferred.

× Here I feel more at ease and more relaxed.

✓ Here I feel more at ease and more relaxed.

Sentence is correct in present tense and natural; no grammatical correction needed.