Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and add a specific detail about the buildings to make the answer more informative. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then use one linking phrase and a specific detail (e.g., styles, height, or a landmark). Keep to no more than 4–5 short sentences.

예시: Yes. I live near Perth, and there are several tall office and residential towers close to the river. For example, the CBD skyline has glass-clad skyscrapers that stand out when we take the ferry. At night they are especially striking because the lights reflect on the water.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain why and use a linking word to show contrast. Include one specific example of a building you photographed to add concreteness.

예시: Yes, at first I took many photos of Perth’s buildings because I came from a small town in South Africa. However, I soon got used to the skyline, so I photograph them less now. For example, I took dozens of pictures of the bell tower when we first arrived.

제안: Give a direct answer naming one main place, then add a reason and a linking phrase to include the second place. Avoid vague phrases like “quite a few” and be specific about why you want to visit each site.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Empire State Building because I want to see the city view from its observation deck. In addition, I would like to see the Statue of Liberty since it is an important symbol of American history.

제안: Start with a concise topic sentence, then give two specific reasons linked clearly (safety and outdoor space). Use a linking word like ‘because’ or ‘and’ to connect the reasons and keep sentences short.

예시: No, I would not. I prefer a single-level house because it has a backyard where my children can play safely, and I worry less about them falling from heights.

× When we first moved to Australia I took a lot of photos of all of the buildings and Perth because it is something I was not used to coming from a small town in South Africa.

✓ When we first moved to Australia, I took a lot of photos of the buildings and of Perth because it was something I was not used to, coming from a small town in South Africa.

Error type 9: The sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect tense consistency. 'it is something I was not used to' mixes present 'is' with past context. Change 'it is' to 'it was' to match past tense. Also add commas for clarity and use 'the buildings and of Perth' or 'the buildings and Perth' for parallel structure. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and use commas to mark the introductory clause.

× However, now I have gotten used to all of the buildings and I don't photograph them as much anymore.

✓ However, now I have gotten used to all the buildings, and I don't photograph them as much anymore.

Error type 10: Minor issue with article 'of' and punctuation rather than present participle form; nonetheless it fits present participle category because 'getting used to' involves participle structure. Remove unnecessary 'of' after 'all' for natural phrasing and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and'. Suggestion: use 'all the buildings' and punctuate compound sentence correctly.

× There are quite a few buildings that I would select to visit, one of which is the Empire State Building in New York City.

✓ There are quite a few buildings that I would choose to visit, one of which is the Empire State Building in New York City.

Error type 1: 'select to visit' is awkward collocation; not strictly plural error but replacement improves verb choice. Use 'choose to visit' for natural English. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations ('choose to visit').

× I would also like to visit the Statue of Liberty, although it is technically a statue and not a building.

✓ I would also like to visit the Statue of Liberty, although it is technically a statue rather than a building.

Error type 26: Use of 'and not' is acceptable but 'rather than' is more concise and idiomatic. This corrects sentence rhythm and clarity. Suggestion: use 'rather than' for contrasting two options.

× I prefer to live in a house that is only one level, that has a bit of a backyard in which my children can play and I don't have to worry as much that they can fall off the tall building.

✓ I prefer to live in a single-story house with a small backyard where my children can play, and I don't have to worry so much about them falling from a tall building.

Error type 16: Original sentence has run-on structure and incorrect conjunctions and relative clauses. Replace 'that is only one level' with 'single-story' for concision, use 'with' to link features, 'where' for location, and change 'worry as much that they can fall off the tall building' to 'worry so much about them falling from a tall building' for correct clause and preposition usage. Suggestion: break long sentences, use appropriate relative pronouns and prepositions ('where', 'about', 'from').

× I see them whenever we take the ferry to the city.

✓ I see them whenever we take the ferry to the city.

Error type 2: No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. Included to show checked sentence. Suggestion: none.

× Yes, I live near the city of Perth and there are quite a few very high buildings in our area.

✓ Yes, I live near the city of Perth, and there are quite a few very tall buildings in our area.

Error type 3: Sentence is mostly correct; changed 'very high' to 'very tall' because 'tall' is the usual adjective for buildings. Added comma before coordinating conjunction for correct punctuation. Suggestion: use 'tall' with buildings and punctuate compound sentences.

× We especially like to go there at night.

✓ We especially like going there at night.

Error type 5: Original is acceptable but 'like going' is more natural for habitual preference. If keeping simple present, both are correct; change for naturalness. Suggestion: prefer gerund after 'like' to express habitual enjoyment.

× Do you want to live in a tall building?

✓ Do you want to live in a tall building?

Error type 4: Sentence is correct as written. No change needed.

× I don't have to worry as much that they can fall off the tall building.

✓ I don't have to worry so much about them falling from a tall building.

Error type 13: Awkward phrasing and incorrect clause after 'worry'. Use 'worry about' + gerund ('them falling') and 'from' for the source. Replace 'as much that they can fall off' with 'so much about them falling from' for grammatical correctness and natural expression. Suggestion: use 'worry about' + gerund and correct preposition 'from'.