Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct grammar, avoid redundancy, use one clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Be specific (e.g., describe exact types of buildings, distance or number) and correct phrases like “their white suites” to “their white facades” or “white buildings.” Limit to maximum 5 sentences.

예시: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home; most are medium-height or low-rise. For example, within a 10-minute walk you’ll mostly find two- or three-storey houses and small apartment blocks. As a result, the neighbourhood feels airy and spacious, with plenty of trees and small gardens.

제안: Fix vocabulary and grammar (e.g., ‘facile mosque’ unclear — use the mosque’s name; say ‘I took photos of the Faisal Mosque’). Use linking words for coherence, and add a specific reason or detail about what you photograph. Keep answers concise and avoid repetition.

예시: Usually I don’t photograph buildings, but I sometimes do when a building is especially eye-catching or historically important. For instance, I photographed the Faisal Mosque in Islamabad because of its striking contemporary design and impressive scale.

제안: Reduce hesitation and filler words (remove ‘uh’). Provide one clear example and add concise supporting details (why it interests you, what you expect to see). Correct names if needed (ensure the building’s correct name). Keep within 1–3 sentences.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the Wazir Khan Mosque in Lahore because it is historically significant and renowned for its colourful tilework and detailed frescoes, which I have only seen in photos.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘open-space home’, ‘full of greenery and birds’). Avoid sentence fragments and redundancy. Mention concrete features you prefer (garden size, privacy, view).

예시: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building because I prefer an open-plan house with a large sitting room and a private garden. For example, I enjoy having space for potted plants and a small lawn where birds visit, which makes the home feel tranquil.

× There are not many tall buildings near my home.

✓ There are not many tall buildings near my home.

This sentence is acceptable; no change needed. It correctly uses 'there are' with plural 'buildings'.

× The area feels quite airy and spacious because their white suites and a lot of greenery.

✓ The area feels quite airy and spacious because of its white suites and a lot of greenery.

The original uses 'their' which does not agree with the singular noun 'area' and omits the preposition 'because of'. Use 'because of' to indicate the reason and 'its' to refer to the area. Suggestion: use 'because of its...' for clear cause.

× So the buildings are mostly low density and well spaced out.

✓ So the buildings are mostly low-density and well spaced out.

Hyphenate the compound adjective 'low-density' when placed before a noun and keep 'well spaced out' as is. The issue is form of adjective phrase; hyphenation clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use hyphenated adjectives before nouns.

× Usually I don't take photos of buildings, but I sometimes do when our building is famous, very tall or particularly eye-catching.

✓ Usually I don't take photos of buildings, but I sometimes do when a building is famous, very tall, or particularly eye-catching.

Using 'our building' implies a specific building; context asks generally about buildings, so 'a building' fits better. Also add commas in a list. Tense is correct; change is about reference and punctuation. Suggestion: choose articles that match general statements.

× For example, I took pictures of facile mosque in Islamabad because it's an iconic landmark and has a striking design.

✓ For example, I took pictures of the Faisal Mosque in Islamabad because it's an iconic landmark and has a striking design.

'Facile' is incorrect here; the proper name is 'Faisal Mosque' and needs the definite article 'the'. Proper nouns and famous buildings often take 'the'. Suggestion: use correct proper names and include 'the' for named landmarks.

× So I love that type of buildings.

✓ So I love that type of building.

'That type of' should be followed by a singular noun ('building'), not a plural. Use singular after 'type of'. Suggestion: write 'that type of building' or 'those types of buildings'.

× Yes, of course there are a lot of buildings that I want to visit and uh, for example, the Menorah Pakistan in Lahore and uh uh, it was a very historical and famous place and I would like to go there in future.

✓ Yes, of course there are a lot of buildings that I want to visit. For example, the Minar-e-Pakistan in Lahore is a very historic and famous place, and I would like to go there in the future.

Original mixes sentences and has wrong landmark name 'Menorah Pakistan'; correct name is 'Minar-e-Pakistan'. Use 'is' for present description, 'historic' is preferred over 'historical' when describing significance, and include 'the' and 'in the future'. Also split into clearer sentences. Suggestion: check proper names and use 'in the future' for future time.

× No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I love the open space home with the grand sitting area and a garden like this.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I love an open-plan home with a large sitting area and a garden like this.

'Open space home' is awkward; 'open-plan home' or 'a home with open spaces' is clearer. Use 'a' before singular countable noun and 'large' instead of 'grand' for natural collocation. Suggestion: use natural adjective-noun combinations and include appropriate articles.

× So I like airy and spacious home with full of greenery and. Birds.

✓ So I like an airy and spacious home full of greenery and birds.

Need the article 'an' before 'airy and spacious home'. Remove 'with' before 'full of'; 'full of greenery and birds' is correct. Also merge sentence fragments. Suggestion: ensure articles before singular nouns and avoid sentence fragments.