Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, mention exactly how close the building is or a feature you notice (height, appearance, owner) and link it logically.

예시: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, including one very tall apartment tower right in my block. For example, the tallest one is about 30 stories high and is owned by a private company, so it stands out because of its glass façade.

제안: Be direct and fluent: give a clear topic sentence, a concise reason, and a specific example. Use linking words (but, instead, for example) and avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I find them less interesting. Instead, I prefer taking pictures of the surroundings; for example, I often photograph balcony views and how the light falls into my apartment.

제안: Provide a clear, complete answer with a reason and a specific memory. Avoid hesitations and finish your sentence. Use linking words like because or since to explain why the building is important to you.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the local Community Center again because it holds many childhood memories. For instance, I used to play there with other children and attend art classes, so returning would remind me of those happy times.

제안: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct: state your preference, give a specific reason and an example of what you would enjoy. Use linking words like because and so to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building in the near future because it would give my family great views. For example, we could enjoy the city lights at night and watch the sunrise from our balcony.

× It is situated in my block and which the one of the most tallest building is surrounded by.

✓ It is situated in my block and is one of the tallest buildings surrounding it.

Original sentence misuses 'which' and 'the one of the most tallest' with incorrect article and superlative form. Use 'is one of the tallest buildings' to indicate membership in a group; omit 'the' and 'most' together with 'tallest'. Also use correct clause order: 'is one of the tallest buildings surrounding it.'

× Beautiful scenario and it is owned by a company.

✓ It creates a beautiful scene, and it is owned by a company.

Original lacks a subject and a proper verb for 'Beautiful scenario.' Convert to full clause 'It creates a beautiful scene' and connect with 'and' to form a complete sentence.

× No, I don't take photos of buildings because that is not so interesting thing that I found and it's uh, more likely.

✓ No, I don't take photos of buildings because I don't find them very interesting, and I'm more likely to take other kinds of photos.

Original has awkward structure and tense mismatch: 'that I found' (past) conflicts with present habit. Use present simple 'I don't find them' for habitual opinion. Clarify comparative phrase 'more likely' by adding the object 'to take other kinds of photos.'

× I do take pictures of surroundings, environment, like balconies, the light lighting fall into the apartment, this source of photo.

✓ I do take pictures of the surroundings and the environment, such as balconies and the way light falls into the apartment; these are my sources of photos.

Original uses incorrect forms: 'surroundings, environment' needs articles and conjunctions; 'the light lighting fall' is ungrammatical — use 'the way light falls.' 'This source of photo' should be plural and rephrased as 'these are my sources of photos.'

× Yes, there is a building which is called a Community Center.

✓ Yes, there is a building called the Community Center.

Use reduced relative clause 'called the Community Center' instead of 'which is called a Community Center.' Also use the definite article if referring to a specific named building: 'the Community Center.'

× I would love to revisit this because it's, uh, surrounded with so many memories of my childhood.

✓ I would love to revisit it because it is surrounded by so many memories of my childhood.

Use the pronoun 'it' (not 'this') to refer back to the building. Use correct preposition 'surrounded by' (not 'surrounded with').

× When I was a kid, I used to play with the children's of that community and I would love.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to play with the children of that community, and I would love to go back.

'children's' is possessive and incorrect; use plural 'children.' Sentence fragment 'and I would love' needs completion: 'I would love to go back.'

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building in near future where I can sit with my family and enjoying the surroundings where we can see the whole city lights both sunrise and sunset together.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building in the near future where I can sit with my family and enjoy the surroundings, where we can see the city's lights at sunrise and sunset.

Add the article 'the' in 'the near future.' Change 'enjoying' (incorrect form after 'can') to base verb 'enjoy.' Use possessive 'the city's lights' and prepositions 'at sunrise and sunset.' Remove 'both' and 'together' which are redundant.