Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは理解できますが、文法や語順の誤り、言い淀み、冗長な表現が目立ちます。まず簡潔なトピック文を作り（例：No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home.）、その後で場所の説明を具体的に短く付け加えてください。接続表現（because, although, however）を正しく使い、不要な音（um, uh）を避けてください。また冠詞や前置詞（in the suburbs / outside the downtown）を正しく使う練習をしましょう。

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in the suburbs, so the area mostly has houses and low-rise apartments rather than skyscrapers.

제안: 良い内容ですが、表現をより自然で流暢にする余地があります。まず短いトピック文（Yes, I do.）で始め、その後具体例を時制や語順を整えて述べ、比較表現（they look very different by day and night）や感想を接続詞でつなげてください。冗長な語（what I remembered recently was）を避け、語彙（Tokyo Skytree）を正確に使いましょう。

예시: Yes, I do. Recently I visited the Tokyo Skytree and took many photos. They looked very different by day and night, so I enjoyed photographing them at both times.

제안: 趣旨は伝わりますが、語順と語選びを正確にしましょう（the malls in DC, Washington, D.C.）。“malls”より“areas”や“museums”を明確にし、なぜ行きたいかを短く具体的に述べてください。接続詞（because, so）を使って理由を明確にし、冗長な表現を減らす練習をしてください。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Washington, D.C. because there are many museums and historic buildings close to each other, so I could explore different sites over several days.

제안: 意図は分かりますが、繰り返しや語順の誤り、冠詞や前置詞の誤用が見られます。まず一文で答えを示し、その後経験と理由を明確に述べてください（I have never lived in a tall building, but when I visited a friend on the 17th floor, I liked the river view.）。数字の表現（the 17th floor）と語の重複を避ける練習をしましょう。

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building. Although I've never lived in one, I stayed at a friend's apartment on the 17th floor and enjoyed the river view, which made me prefer high-rise living.

× No they were not all buildings near my home because I live in outside of the sand umm downtown.

✓ No, there are not any tall buildings near my home because I live outside the downtown area.

The original sentence has incorrect verb and structure: 'were not all buildings' is ungrammatical and mixes past tense with present meaning. Use 'there are not any' or 'there aren't any' to indicate absence (There be issue and sentence structure). 'I live in outside of the sand umm downtown' is unclear; correct to 'I live outside the downtown area.' Keep tense consistent (present simple) for permanent facts.

× So unlike downtown has many skyscrapers but my areas is only houses and apartments so there are no tall buildings around me.

✓ Unlike downtown, which has many skyscrapers, my area has only houses and apartments, so there are no tall buildings near me.

Pronoun and noun agreement errors: 'my areas is' should be 'my area has' (singular subject and correct verb). 'Unlike downtown has many skyscrapers' is incorrect; use a clause 'Unlike downtown, which has many skyscrapers'. Also replace 'around me' with 'near me' for natural phrasing. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I take photos of buildings.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in present simple to describe a habitual action, so no tense change is needed. No correction required; included to show it's already correct.

× What I remembered recently was I went to Sky Trees in Tokyo.

✓ What I remember recently is that I went to the Skytree in Tokyo.

Mixing past and present tenses is confusing. Use present 'I remember' to introduce a recent memory, then past tense 'I went' for the event. Also the landmark name is 'Skytree' (or 'Tokyo Skytree') and use 'the' with it.

× I took many photos of them during the daytime and during the night they looked so different, so I enjoyed taking photos.

✓ I took many photos of it during the daytime and at night it looked very different, so I enjoyed taking photos.

Pronoun refers to a single building ('it' rather than 'them'). Use 'at night' not 'during the night' for natural phrasing and 'very different' instead of 'so different' for clarity. Maintain consistent references.

× Yes, I would like to visit the malls at DC in United States.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the malls in Washington, D.C., in the United States.

Use correct place name and prepositions: 'in Washington, D.C.' and 'in the United States.' 'at DC' is incorrect. Also include commas for clarity when mentioning city and country.

× I think there are many museums on the one street and we can go to the different buildings for a few days to enjoy.

✓ I think there are many museums on one street, and we could visit the different buildings over a few days to enjoy them.

'On the one street' is unnatural; use 'on one street' or 'on the same street' depending on meaning. Use 'visit' instead of 'go to' for museums/buildings and 'over a few days' is more natural than 'for a few days.' Also add object 'them' to clarify 'enjoy them.' Modal 'could' is more appropriate for a suggestion.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building.

This sentence is correct in present simple to express desire. No correction needed.

× However, I've never lived in a tall building in my life.

✓ However, I've never lived in a tall building.

Original is acceptable but 'in my life' is redundant when using present perfect 'I've never lived.' Removing redundancy makes it more natural.

× But when I visited my friend's apartment, she lived in the floor of 17 looking at the river in front of her house.

✓ But when I visited my friend, she lived on the 17th floor with a view of the river in front of her building.

Use 'on the 17th floor' not 'in the floor of 17.' Say 'my friend' rather than 'my friend's apartment' when referring to the person. Use 'view of the river' or 'overlooking the river' and 'building' rather than 'house' if referring to an apartment. Ordinal '17th' is required.

× So I I prefer to live in the high building.

✓ So I would prefer to live in a tall building.

Double 'I' is a mistake. Use 'would prefer' or 'prefer' depending on nuance; 'would prefer' is more natural when speaking hypothetically. Use 'tall building' rather than 'high building.'