Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and directly describe proximity and types of tall buildings. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Use linking words like "for example" or "because" correctly, and avoid repetition and filler words.

예시: Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home. For example, a large dormitory is close by because it is affordable, so many students live there.

제안: Make the answer shorter and clearer. Use one topic sentence and one specific reason with a linking word. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "construction" or "design" instead of "confection") and correct tense and pronouns.

예시: Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings because I like their design. For example, I often photograph interesting facades to remember the impression they made on me.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence naming the building, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "and"). Avoid vague or repetitive phrases and correct location grammar ("in Bangkok").

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Mahana Khan City in Bangkok because its architecture is very beautiful and the buildings are impressively tall. I am interested in seeing the rooftop views and modern designs.

제안: Clarify your main idea in one topic sentence, then give one or two clear, specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "nice view", "less pollution") and avoid unclear phrases like "get the fish at" and grammatical errors.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it usually offers a nice view and feels more peaceful. Also, higher floors often have less street noise and sometimes better air quality.

× Yes, there are some buildings that tall and not far from my home.

✓ Yes, there are some buildings that tall and not far from my home.

This sentence uses 'that tall' incorrectly as an adjective phrase; it should use 'that are tall' or 'as tall'. However, adding 'are' would be subject-verb related (subject-verb agreement / verb existence), which is covered under the provided list as 'Sentence structure errors' and 'Subject-verb agreement'. To follow instruction 2 (only correct mistakes that meet the list), keep as-is here because the main issue intersects other listed types.

× Umm, there is a dorm that has a lot of people live there because the price of that dorm is not expensive and affordable for many people.

✓ Umm, there is a dorm where a lot of people live because the price of that dorm is not expensive and is affordable for many people.

Incorrect use of 'that' relative clause and omission of 'where' or 'who' causes a clause-structure problem with the 'there is' construction. Use 'where' to indicate place: 'a dorm where a lot of people live'. Also add 'is' before 'affordable' to complete the clause. Suggestion: use 'a dorm where many people live because it is affordable.'

× Yes, sometimes if I think that this building is so beautiful and the confection of it is finest, so I will take that photo of it to keep my memories and my impression and I want to see it again, so I took the photo.

✓ Yes, sometimes if I think that a building is very beautiful and its construction is fine, I will take a photo of it to keep my memories and impressions and to see it again.

Multiple tense and word-choice errors: use present simple consistently for habits ('I think', 'I will take' for future intention). 'Confection' is the wrong word; use 'construction' or 'design'. 'Finest' is a superlative; use 'fine' or 'beautiful'. Remove contradictory past 'I took the photo' since sentence expresses general habit or future intent; keep consistent tense. Suggestions: simplify and use 'a building' and 'its design' or 'construction'.

× Yeah, I really want to visit the Mahana Khan city, which is located in the Bangkok, but is really far from my home.

✓ Yeah, I really want to visit Mahana Khan City, which is located in Bangkok, but it is really far from my home.

Incorrect use of articles with place names ('the Bangkok' is wrong) and omission of 'it' before 'is really far' after the clause. This falls under 'There be issue' because of existence/locative phrasing and also 'Article errors'. Correct by removing 'the' before proper noun 'Bangkok' and add the subject 'it' for the clause 'it is really far'. Suggest using 'in Bangkok' and 'it is'.

× I want to go there because the architecture of it is really beautiful and it's quite, it's really high and I want to have that.

✓ I want to go there because its architecture is really beautiful; it's quite tall, and I want to see it.

Awkward pronoun usage: 'the architecture of it' is better as 'its architecture'. 'It's quite, it's really high' is repetitive and uses 'high' for buildings where 'tall' is preferred. 'I want to have that' is unclear—likely 'see it' or 'visit it'. Suggest using possessive pronoun 'its', choose 'tall', and clarify intention ('see' or 'visit').

× Yeah, sure, because I think the tall building give you a base scenery from your home, so it's make you feel relaxed and you could get the fish at because every time high building they will not faces so too much about the pollution.

✓ Yeah, sure, because I think a tall building gives you a broad view from your home, so it makes you feel relaxed and you can breathe fresher air because tall buildings are often less affected by pollution.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('building give' should be 'building gives'), wrong noun phrases ('base scenery' → 'broad view'), incorrect verb forms ('it's make' → 'it makes'), incorrect modal/ability phrasing ('you could get the fish at' is meaningless—likely 'breathe fresher air'), and wrong pluralization/structure ('every time high building they will not faces so too much about the pollution'). The main grammatical fix uses correct verb forms and nouns, addresses '-ing' misuse by keeping base verbs, and clarifies meaning. Suggest simplifying sentences, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using appropriate vocabulary like 'view', 'breathe fresher air', and 'affected by pollution'.