Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct some factual/wording errors. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid inaccurate terms (e.g., 'hotel laws') and reduce redundancy. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

예시: No — there aren’t any tall buildings near my home in Zone 2. Because of strict planning rules that protect views of St Paul’s Cathedral, most buildings around here are low-rise, so the skyline feels much calmer than in Asian cities such as Tokyo or Seoul.

제안: Good structure and clear reasons. To improve, make language more concise and avoid repeating words (e.g., 'landmarks like'). Add a linking phrase to show contrast and one specific example of a recent time you took a photo.

예시: Not usually, because photographing people or private property can be considered rude in London. However, I sometimes take pictures of distinctive landmarks — for example, I recently photographed the Liberty department store because its Tudor-style facade is very striking.

제안: Good idea and personal motivation. Improve accuracy and fluency: correct pluralization ('cathedrals and churches'), avoid vague phrases ('ancient Latin America civilization'), and tighten the response to two or three sentences with linking words like 'since' or 'because'.

예시: Yes — I’d love to visit Machu Picchu in Peru because, although I’ve seen many European cathedrals and churches, I’ve never been to the Americas. Since I’m fascinated by pre-Columbian cultures, I want to see Inca ruins and original artifacts in person.

제안: Answer is clear but has grammatical errors and a slightly long anecdote. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly give one concise reason. Correct grammar ('the felt very stressful' → 'it felt very stressful') and link cause and effect with 'because' or 'so'.

예시: No — I wouldn’t like to live in a high-rise. When I lived on the 10th floor in Tokyo, the elevator was often overcrowded during rush hour, so it felt very stressful and inconvenient.

× I live in Zone 2 of London and there are no tall buildings near my home.

✓ I live in Zone 2 of London, and there are no tall buildings near my home.

Comma needed before coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses to form correct sentence structure (sentence structure/There be combination). Add comma to improve readability and match standard grammar; content 'there are' is correct for plural 'buildings'.

× The construction of buildings taller than Saint Paul cathedrals is strictly prohibited under hotel laws, which makes the atmosphere here very different from Asian cities like Tokyo and Seoul where we can see a lot of skyscrapers.

✓ The construction of buildings taller than St Paul’s Cathedral is strictly prohibited under planning laws, which makes the atmosphere here very different from Asian cities like Tokyo and Seoul, where we can see a lot of skyscrapers.

Use singular definite form 'St Paul’s Cathedral' for the specific cathedral; 'Saint Paul cathedrals' is incorrect. Also 'planning laws' or 'building regulations' fits better than 'hotel laws'. Added comma before 'where' clause. Use possessive form for cathedral name and correct article use.

× I don't often take photos of buildings in my daily life because photographing people or private property is considered rude in London.

✓ I don't often take photos of buildings in my daily life because photographing people or private property is considered rude in London.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no preposition error. No change required. (Included to follow rule: only correct mistakes that meet the list.)

× But when I find distinctive buildings such as landmarks like the Liberty department store or the British Museum, I sometimes snap them.

✓ But when I encounter distinctive landmarks such as the Liberty department store or the British Museum, I sometimes photograph them.

Avoid redundancy 'distinctive buildings such as landmarks like'; streamline to 'distinctive landmarks'. 'Snap' is informal; 'photograph' is more neutral. Also use 'encounter' or 'see' rather than 'find' for buildings in context.

× Yes, I would love to visit Machu Picchu in Peru in the future because I've visited many traditional European buildings such as cathedral and churches, but I've never been to the Western Hemisphere in my life, so I would like to see the artifacts of the ancient Latin America civilization with my own eyes.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit Machu Picchu in Peru in the future because I've visited many traditional European buildings such as cathedrals and churches, but I've never been to the Western Hemisphere, so I would like to see the artifacts of ancient Latin American civilizations with my own eyes.

Use plural 'cathedrals' to match 'many'. Remove redundant 'in my life' after 'never been' and comma. Use 'Latin American' (adjective) and plural 'civilizations' or 'civilization' consistently. Also 'ancient Latin American civilizations' is the correct adjective-noun order.

× No, I wouldn't like to live in a high building in the future because when I was around 28 I lived on the 10th floor of an apartment in Tokyo and the elevator was overcrowded when I had to go to work, so the felt very stressful to me.

✓ No, I wouldn't like to live in a high building in the future because when I was around 28 I lived on the 10th floor of an apartment in Tokyo and the elevator was overcrowded when I had to go to work, so it felt very stressful to me.

Typo 'the' should be 'it' as the subject referring to the situation; 'felt' correctly uses past tense to match 'was' and 'lived'. Fixing the pronoun resolves the sentence structure and clarity.