Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one clear supporting detail and an example. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “vertical homes.” Use linking words for coherence.

예시: No, there aren’t tall buildings near my home because I live in a village. Most buildings are detached houses with gardens, although the nearby city has several modern high-rises that I can see when I visit. For example, I can spot a 20-storey apartment block on the skyline about 15 minutes away.

제안: Make a clear, present-tense response and give a specific reason and example. Use linking words (but, so, however) and correct grammar: avoid awkward phrasing like “buildings who which are more.”

예시: Sometimes I do. I usually photograph buildings that have interesting designs because many local buildings look very similar, but occasionally I find one with unique features. For instance, last month I took photos of an old mosque with colourful tiles and intricate carvings.

제안: Start with a direct answer and give two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundant adjectives (most famous and highest tallest) and fix grammar. Be specific about what you want to see or do there.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is the tallest building in the world and offers spectacular views of the city. In particular, I want to go to the observation deck and visit the restaurants there to experience the architecture and panoramic skyline.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with two concise reasons using linking words (because, although). Correct word choice (spacious, experience once). Avoid repetition and improve fluency by combining sentences.

예시: Generally, no — I prefer to live in a spacious house because tall buildings often feel crowded and offer less outdoor space. However, I would like to try living in a high-rise for a short time because it can be convenient, with shops and gyms in the same building.

× Honestly not as I live in village so they are not all buildings.

✓ Honestly, not really, as I live in a village so there are no tall buildings.

The original sentence has missing words and incorrect structure. 'live in village' lacks the article 'a'. 'they are not all buildings' is ungrammatical; the intended meaning is that there are no tall buildings. Suggestion: add the article 'a' and rewrite the clause to 'there are no tall buildings' to convey the intended meaning.

× There are huge houses and nearby we have a city where we can see tall buildings but near my home there are vertical homes.

✓ There are huge houses nearby, and we have a city where we can see tall buildings, but near my home the houses are low-rise.

Problems: misplaced 'nearby' and awkward phrase 'vertical homes' which is not a common expression. 'Nearby' should modify 'houses' or be placed after a comma. 'Vertical homes' is unclear; 'low-rise' or 'short' houses fits the contrast with tall buildings. Also split into clearer clauses with commas.

× Sometimes I used to because I think most of the buildings are having same structure but the buildings who which are more.

✓ Sometimes I used to, because I think most of the buildings have the same structure, but some buildings are different.

Errors: 'are having' is incorrect here; stative verbs like 'have' should use simple present 'have'. 'Who which are more' is ungrammatical; use 'some buildings are different' or 'some buildings have more features'. Also add a comma after 'used to' for clarity.

× Beautiful and have a lot of stunning features.

✓ They are beautiful and have a lot of stunning features.

Sentence fragment missing a subject pronoun. Add 'They are' to form a complete sentence and agree with 'buildings'.

× I took photos of that Buildings only.

✓ I took photos of those buildings only.

Errors: incorrect article/capitalization and demonstrative. 'Buildings' should not be capitalized. Use 'those' to refer to plural distant items, not 'that'. Also place 'only' appropriately; 'those buildings only' is acceptable.

× Yes, the building I would love to visit is Burj Khalifa as it is most famous and the highest tallest building in the whole world.

✓ Yes, the building I would love to visit is the Burj Khalifa, as it is the most famous and the tallest building in the world.

Use the definite article 'the' with famous building names like 'the Burj Khalifa'. 'Most famous' needs 'the'. 'Highest tallest' is redundant; use 'the tallest'. 'in the whole world' is wordy; 'in the world' is natural.

× I would like to visit it my in my future because it has a lot of facilities and it is more it is amazing.

✓ I would like to visit it in the future because it has many facilities and it is amazing.

Errors: 'my in my future' is redundant and misordered; use 'in the future'. 'a lot of' can be 'many' for countable 'facilities'. Remove duplicated 'it is more it is'; unnecessary repetition. Keep simple future intention with 'would like to'.

× I do not like tall buildings because they are more congested.

✓ I do not like tall buildings because they are more crowded.

'Congested' usually describes traffic or places; for people in buildings, 'crowded' is more natural. Keep comparative 'more crowded' or use 'crowded' depending on context.

× But I would love to have once experience in tall buildings as it has many facilities under one roof only.

✓ But I would love to have an experience living in a tall building, as it has many facilities under one roof.

Errors: 'once experience' is incorrect; use 'an experience' or 'one-time experience', and match singular/plural 'a tall building' if speaking generally. 'under one roof only' is awkward; 'under one roof' is sufficient. Also ensure subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× So it would be pleasure for me for experience.

✓ So it would be a pleasure for me to have that experience.

Missing article 'a' before 'pleasure' and incorrect preposition 'for experience'. Use 'to have that experience' to form a correct infinitive phrase. Reorder words to sound natural.