Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 대답은 질문에 직접 답했고 이유도 제시했지만, 말하는 도중에 반복되는 ‘uh’와 불필요한 중복(‘many tall buildings’ → ‘many high apartments and office buildings’)이 있어 유창성과 응집력이 떨어집니다. 더 자연스럽게 들리게 하려면 불필요한 채우기 말(uh)을 줄이고, 하나의 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 연결어로 구체적 세부사항을 덧붙이세요. 또한 문장 수를 3문장 이내로 유지하세요.

예시: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a large city. For example, the area has numerous high-rise apartment blocks and modern office towers, which dominate the skyline.

제안: 응답은 직접적이고 논리적이며 구체적 이유를 제시했습니다. 다만 문장이 약간 반복되어 보이므로, 한두 개의 구체적 예시나 목적(예: 기록용, 블로그 등)을 추가해 더 풍부하게 만드세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장들을 자연스럽게 이어주면 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I often photograph buildings, especially when I travel. I like to capture interesting or beautiful façades for my travel blog, and I sometimes focus on architectural details like ornate windows or column designs.

제안: 답변 내용은 긍정적이지만 발화에서 많은 중복(‘a a’, ‘I I’), 마무리되지 않은 문장(‘really cool and.’)과 문법적 오류(‘a senior Opera House’가 모호)로 평가가 낮습니다. 명확한 주제문을 말한 뒤 이유와 구체적 설명(예: 어떤 요소가 흥미로운지, 언제 갈 계획인지 등)을 1–2문장으로 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 반복을 제거하고 단어 선택을 정확히 하세요.

예시: Yes. I would love to visit the city’s historic opera house because its architecture is stunning. I’m especially interested in the ornate façade and the grand auditorium, and I hope to see a performance there next winter.

제안: 응답은 명확하고 이유도 구체적이며 추가 세부사항(엘리베이터 혼잡 등)을 사용해 설득력 있게 설명했습니다. 더 자연스럽게 만들려면 연결어를 약간 다듬고 문장 수를 2–3문장으로 유지하세요. 감정 표현을 구체적인 상황과 연결하면 더 좋습니다.

예시: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because I’m uncomfortable with heights and feel anxious when looking down from high floors. In addition, crowded elevators during peak times would be very inconvenient for my daily routine.

× Yes, I would like to visit a a senior Opera House.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit a senior opera house.

There is an extra indefinite article 'a a' and 'Opera House' should be lowercased as it is a common noun here. Remove the duplicate article and use lowercase for a non‑proper name: 'a senior opera house'. Suggestion: say 'a senior opera house' or name the specific Opera House, e.g., 'the Sydney Opera House' if referring to a specific one.

× I think the architecture is really cool and.

✓ I think the architecture is really cool.

The sentence ends with a coordinating conjunction 'and' but no following clause, creating a sentence fragment. Remove the trailing 'and' or add the second clause. Suggestion: 'I think the architecture is really cool' or 'I think the architecture is really cool, and I want to see it up close.'

× I also never have been there so I'm I I would like to visit.

✓ I have never been there, so I would like to visit.

Word order is incorrect for present perfect: 'have never been' is correct; the original 'never have been' is awkward in this context and contains duplications ('I'm I I') and extra auxiliaries. Correct to 'I have never been there' and remove the extra 'I'm I I'. Suggestion: use 'I have never been there, so I would like to visit.'