Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: state directly that there are no tall buildings, give one specific example (e.g. the tallest building is 5 stories), and avoid repetition. Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with correct grammar and number usage.

예시: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small provincial town, and the tallest building nearby is only about five stories high, so the skyline is mostly low-rise houses and small shops.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific supporting details and link them logically. Avoid repeating words like 'places' and use precise phrases (e.g. 'post them on social media' rather than 'post it in my social media account').

예시: Yes, I often photograph interesting buildings when I travel. For example, I usually take a picture of the tallest or most unique building and post the photos on Instagram so my family and friends can see and maybe visit too.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and correct factual or vocabulary errors ('Sahara' is in Africa, Dubai has deserts nearby but not the Sahara). Use linking words like 'also' or 'besides' and avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it's the tallest building in the world. Besides seeing the observatory, I also want to explore nearby desert landscapes and try a camel ride.

제안: Give a clear direct answer (Yes or No) with one specific reason and a brief supporting example. Avoid unclear phrases like 'province type UMM' and grammar errors (use 'I prefer' not 'I rather').

예시: No, I don't want to live in a tall building. I prefer living in the province because I value a quieter, more peaceful lifestyle—when I tried living in a city condo I didn't feel as relaxed.

× I currently live in a province right now so there are no tall buildings near my home.

✓ I currently live in a province, so there are no tall buildings near my home.

Redundant words: 'currently' and 'right now' both indicate present time. This is not strictly a 'there be' grammatical error, but the sentence contains the correct 'there are' structure. Remove one time marker for clarity and add a comma before the conjunction for correct sentence flow.

× It's just a small town with a small quantity of people around.

✓ It's just a small town with a small population.

'Quantity of people' is unnatural in this context. Use 'population' or 'a small number of people'. 'Population' is concise and idiomatic for describing the number of residents in a town.

× Maybe the tallest building in our home is around 5 to 10 story.

✓ Maybe the tallest building in our town is around 5 to 10 stories.

Two issues: 'home' is incorrect contextually; 'town' fits. 'Story' must be plural after a range (5 to 10 stories). Use plural form when referring to multiple units.

× Yes, when I go to a new place or places, I take photos of the tallest building and I post it in my social media account.

✓ Yes, when I go to a new place, I take photos of the tallest buildings and post them on my social media account.

Use plural 'buildings' and plural pronoun 'them' to agree with 'photos' of multiple structures. 'Post on' is the correct preposition for social media. Remove redundant 'places' and the second 'I' for smoother flow.

× I also tell my family and friends about it so sometimes they can visit it.

✓ I also tell my family and friends about them so sometimes they can visit those places.

Pronoun agreement and preposition choice: 'it' refers to buildings/photos; use 'them' for plural. 'Visit those places' clarifies what is being visited. 'Visit it' is awkward for plural locations.

× Someday I want to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai.

✓ Someday I want to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present simple to express a future desire; no change needed.

× It's the tallest building in the world and aside from the that building, there are many tourist spots there like the Sahara desert that I want to go and see the camel.

✓ It's the tallest building in the world, and aside from that building, there are many tourist spots there, like the Sahara Desert, where I want to see camels.

Remove extra 'the' before 'that'. Capitalize 'Sahara Desert'. Use 'see camels' (plural) instead of 'see the camel' when speaking generally. Use relative clause 'where I want to see camels' for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× Do you want to live in a tall building?

✓ Do you want to live in a tall building?

Question is correct; no grammatical change required.

× In my opinion, I rather stay or live in a province type UMM.

✓ In my opinion, I would rather live in the province, umm.

Use 'would rather' to express preference. 'Live' is more natural than 'stay or live'. 'Province type' is awkward; use 'the province'. 'UMM' should be 'umm' as a filler; keep it lowercase and separated by commas.

× During my stay in the cities and tried living in a condo, I've really prepared a certain peaceful life in the province.

✓ During my stay in the city when I tried living in a condo, I realized I preferred the peaceful life in the province.

Original mixes tenses and has fragmented structure. Use past tense 'tried' with 'when' to connect clauses. 'I've really prepared a certain peaceful life' is unnatural; 'I realized I preferred' clearly expresses the speaker's conclusion. 'Cities' to 'city' and clarifying phrasing fixes subject-verb and sentence structure issues.