Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give a brief specific detail. Avoid unclear phrases like "mainly more than". Use linking words if adding details.

예시: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, mostly apartment towers and office blocks. For example, a 20-storey residential block is only five minutes away, and a modern office tower stands by the river.

제안: Make the reason clear and grammatically correct. Use a topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I find their architectural styles revealing. For example, I photograph old facades to study historical details and take pictures of modern structures to capture clean lines and materials.

제안: Fix grammar and be specific about the building. Use a clear topic sentence naming the building, then add one or two concrete reasons with linking words like "because" or "for example." Avoid vague adjectives like "fantastic."

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Sagrada Família in Barcelona because of its extraordinary blend of Gothic and modernist design. For example, I want to see Gaudí’s intricate facades and the colourful interior columns in person.

제안: Make sentences grammatically correct and combine short fragments into coherent sentences. Provide a clear reason and a brief example of what you enjoy about high-floor living, using linking words like "because" and "for example."

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the views from high floors are often spectacular and calming. For example, I imagine watching the sunset over the city from my balcony after a busy day.

× Yes, there are a few tall buildings not far from my home, mainly more than apartment towers and office blocks.

✓ Yes, there are a few tall buildings not far from my home, mainly apartment towers and office blocks.

The phrase 'mainly more than apartment towers and office blocks' is incorrect quantifier and structure. 'More than' is unnecessary and causes confusion. Use 'mainly' followed directly by the nouns 'apartment towers and office blocks' to indicate the types of buildings. Suggestion: remove 'more than' and keep parallel noun phrases.

× Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when I draw wall because architectural style a lot about place, history and culture.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when I draw walls, because architectural style says a lot about a place's history and culture.

Multiple errors match the present participle and sentence structure types. 'draw wall' needs plural 'walls' and proper verb-object relation; 'architectural style a lot about place' is missing the verb 'says' (present simple) and needs articles/possessive 'a place's'. Use 'says a lot about a place's history and culture' to express meaning clearly. Also add a comma before 'because'.

× Yes, there is a building I would worry might like to visit the Segada familiar in Barcelona.

✓ Yes, there is a building I would like to visit: the Sagrada Familia in Barcelona.

This sentence contains wrong pronouns and word order. 'I would worry might like to visit' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'I would like to visit'. 'Segada familiar' is a misspelling of 'Sagrada Familia'. Use a colon or 'which is' to introduce the building. Keep subject 'I' with correct modal 'would like'.

× I am fantastic by its unique play of the cottage and modernist architecture.

✓ I am fascinated by its unique blend of Gothic and modernist architecture.

'Fantastic by' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'fascinated' to express being impressed. 'Play of the cottage and modernist architecture' is awkward and likely intended as 'blend of Gothic and modernist architecture' (Sagrada Familia is Gothic/modernist). Use 'blend' and correct adjectives. This fixes adjective choice and word order.

× Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the old news from high floors are often. Spectacular and very relaxing. Relaxing after a busy day.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the views from high floors are often spectacular and very relaxing after a busy day.

The original has sentence fragments and incorrect nouns ('old news' should be 'views') and subject-verb agreement. Combine fragments into one coherent sentence, use the plural noun 'views' and the adjective 'spectacular', and place 'after a busy day' at the end. This corrects structure, word choice and flow.