Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural, articles), and avoid vague phrases like "and so on." Add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. My village is in the countryside, far from the city centre, so it mostly has wide grasslands and open skies rather than high-rise structures.

제안: Be more concise and natural. Use a clear topic sentence and give one specific reason with a linking word. Correct collocations ("take photos of friends and family").

예시: Not really. I find photographing buildings a bit dull, and I usually prefer taking photos of friends and family because people capture memories and emotions better than static architecture.

제안: Clarify the building name and finish your sentence. Use a linking word to explain why you want to visit and add a specific detail. Also correct factual phrasing ("Eiffel Tower", "in Paris", "told me it was tall/has great views").

예시: Yes. I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because a friend told me it is very tall and offers amazing views of the city, so I could see Paris from above.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar ("tall buildings," "have" -> "has"/"can pose"). Avoid overgeneralization and give a brief contrast (e.g., prefer a house).

예시: Not really. I prefer living in a house outside the city because tall buildings can pose risks like fires or flooding, and I value having more outdoor space and peace.

× Well, there are no tall buildings around my home because my home is located in countryside which is far away from the city center and besides that my hometown have the vast grassland, blue skies and so on.

✓ Well, there are no tall buildings near my home because my home is located in the countryside, which is far away from the city center, and besides that my hometown has vast grasslands, blue skies and so on.

Errors: 'in countryside' should be 'in the countryside' (missing definite article and correct preposition 'in' with article). 'around my home' is acceptable but 'near my home' sounds more natural. 'my hometown have' is wrong subject-verb agreement; 'hometown' is singular so use 'has' (Subject-verb agreement error mapped to preposition/structure). 'the vast grassland' - use plural 'vast grasslands' for general description. Suggestions: add 'the' before 'countryside', use 'has' for singular subject, pluralize 'grassland' or rephrase as 'areas of grassland'. Keep commas to separate clauses.

× To be honest, I dislike taking photos of buildings because I think it's very boring and uninteresting for us and I prefer to take the photos of friends and families.

✓ To be honest, I dislike taking photos of buildings because I think they're very boring and uninteresting, and I prefer to take photos of friends and family.

Errors: 'it's' refers to 'taking photos of buildings' (plural/gerund idea) better expressed as 'they're' or rephrase; more importantly 'friends and families' should be 'friends and family' (family as a collective noun or 'family members'). Also remove unnecessary 'the' before 'photos'. Suggestions: use plural pronoun 'they're' to match plural notion, use 'friends and family' for natural English, and omit 'the' before 'photos' when speaking generally.

× Definitely I would like to visit the Paris Tour in Paris because I heard from my friend who visited it and she mentioned it was the highest building in.

✓ Definitely I would like to visit the Tour Eiffel in Paris because I heard from a friend who visited it, and she said it was the tallest building in the city.

Errors: 'Paris Tour' is incorrect name; correct is 'Eiffel Tower' or 'Tour Eiffel'. 'heard from my friend who visited it and she mentioned' is wordy; 'heard from a friend who visited it, and she said' is simpler. 'the highest building in' is incomplete; specify 'in the city' and use 'tallest' (correct comparative form). Suggestions: use correct proper noun 'Eiffel Tower', simplify reporting verb to 'said', and complete the comparison with an object ('in the city').

× Not really because I think the top building have many potential risk such as fire and flooding and I prefer to stay in the house far away from the city center.

✓ Not really, because I think tall buildings have many potential risks such as fire and flooding, and I prefer to stay in a house far away from the city center.

Errors: 'the top building have' has subject-verb disagreement and article problems. Use 'tall buildings' (plural) with 'have' or keep singular: 'a tall building has'. 'many potential risk' should be 'many potential risks' (plural noun). 'the house' is too specific; use 'a house' for general preference. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree, pluralize 'risks' when using 'many', and use 'a house' for general statements.