Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct noun forms and simple linking words. Mention one or two specific examples and a brief comment. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, there are no skyscrapers near my home. The area mostly has low-rise houses, some apartment blocks and small commercial plazas, although I can see a few taller office buildings on my commute to work.

제안: Give a clear direct answer then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid redundancy and grammatical mistakes; use linking words ('because', 'so') and correct collocations ('lush greenery', 'take pictures'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I rarely photograph buildings because I prefer nature. For example, I usually take pictures of lush greenery and mountains when I travel by car, so I can share those memories with friends.

제안: Be precise and correct facts, and organize details with linking words. Start with a topic sentence naming the building, then give 2 specific reasons (view, restaurant) and one concise comment. Avoid hesitations and contradictory numbers.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the CN Tower in Toronto because it offers panoramic views from the top and has a famous revolving restaurant. I would love to have lunch in the sky lounge and enjoy the city view.

제안: Answer directly and give clear, specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear points (e.g., stairs in tall buildings are unusual). Provide a contrast with living in a house in one or two sentences.

예시: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I think it would be less convenient for daily life. For instance, elevators can be crowded and waiting times would slow my commute, whereas a small house near my workplace would save me time.

× There are mostly the houses and apartment and commercial plazas, but I can see the tall building when I go for work from my home.

✓ There are mostly houses, apartments, and commercial plazas, but I can see a tall building when I go to work from my home.

The original uses incorrect plural forms and articles: 'the houses and apartment' should be plural 'houses, apartments' and items in a list need commas. 'the tall building' is specific but context suggests any tall building visible, so use 'a tall building'. Also use 'go to work' rather than 'go for work'. Improve clarity by listing items correctly and adding commas. Grammar Problem Type ID: 1

× No, I don't like to take the photos of the buildings.

✓ No, I don't like to take photos of buildings.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' makes the phrase sound specific; general preference uses the zero article: 'take photos of buildings'. Also plural 'photos' is fine. Remove 'the' to make it general. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× I am a nature lover. I love to take the picture of the lush greeneries and mountains and whenever I travel either by car or bus.

✓ I am a nature lover. I love taking pictures of the lush greenery and mountains whenever I travel by car or bus.

Use the -ing form 'taking' after 'love' for habitual actions. 'Pictures' plural is natural. 'Greenery' is an uncountable noun, not 'greeneries'. Remove 'either' because two options without 'either...or' is fine. Also place 'whenever I travel' before the modes of transport or after, but keep phrase concise. Grammar Problem Type ID: 8

× And I love to preserve this memory whenever I play with my friends.

✓ And I love to preserve these memories when I share them with my friends.

'This memory' is singular but prior sentence refers to multiple 'pictures' so use 'these memories'. 'Whenever I play with my friends' is odd; 'when I share them with my friends' is clearer. Adjust pronoun agreement and verb collocation. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× Uh, yes, I want to visit the sea tower that is built in Toronto.

✓ Uh, yes, I want to visit the CN Tower in Toronto.

The phrase 'sea tower that is built in Toronto' is awkward and possibly incorrect naming. If referring to the famous tower, use its proper name 'CN Tower'. If keeping generic, 'a tower in Toronto' would be better. Also unnecessary passive 'that is built' can be omitted. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× I have heard that a person can take a look all over the front over the top of the building and ticket cost only 17 dollars $70 and there are also a restaurant too.

✓ I have heard that you can look out over the city from the top of the building; tickets cost about $17 to $70, and there is also a restaurant.

Original mixes phrases and has number confusion. Use 'you can look out over the city from the top' for clarity. 'Ticket cost only 17 dollars $70' is unclear; present a range 'about $17 to $70'. 'There are also a restaurant too' has subject-verb and article errors: use 'there is also a restaurant'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 4

× And I love to have a a lunch in the sky lounge.

✓ And I would love to have lunch in the sky lounge.

Double article 'a a' is an error. 'Have lunch' does not need an article. Use 'would love' for polite desire. Keep noun phrase 'the sky lounge' if referring to a specific lounge, otherwise 'a sky lounge'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× No, I definitely don't want to live in a tall building because living in a tall building will be a hectic for me because uh it will be very difficult for me to commute to the work daily because in the top building firstly I have to take the floor and stairs which will waste my 7 to 8 minutes easily.

✓ No, I definitely don't want to live in a tall building because it would be hectic for me; commuting to work would be difficult since from the top floors I would have to use elevators and stairs, which would easily waste seven to eight minutes.

Many issues: 'will be a hectic' is wrong; use 'would be hectic' or 'it would be hectic'. 'Commute to the work' should be 'commute to work'. 'In the top building' should be 'from the top floors'. 'Take the floor and stairs' is unclear; use 'use elevators and stairs'. Spell out numbers under ten or write 'seven to eight minutes'. Use conditional/modal 'would' for hypothetical preference. Improve sentence flow by splitting clauses. Grammar Problem Type ID: 4

× But in the house as compared.

✓ But living in a house is different; it would be easier.

Original is a fragment and incomplete comparison. Provide a complete clause: 'But living in a house is different; it would be easier.' This fixes sentence structure and completes the intended contrast. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26