Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers and fragmented phrases. For example, say where you live and give precise description of typical building heights and a reason or effect.

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in the countryside. Most houses here are only one or two storeys, so the area feels open and quiet.

제안: Give a direct answer and expand with a clear reason and a brief example using linking words. Replace vague phrases with specific vocabulary (e.g., 'historic churches', 'landmarks').

예시: Yes, I do, but usually only of interesting or historic buildings. For example, I often photograph old churches and unique landmarks because I appreciate their architecture and details.

제안: Provide a clearer, more fluent response: state the specific building type and add a reason and one detail about which country or cathedral you’d like to see. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I’d love to visit the cathedrals of Europe, especially St. Peter’s Basilica in Rome. I’m fascinated by their history and architecture, and I’d like to see the stained glass and sculptures in person.

제안: Answer directly and expand with a clear reason and a brief consequence. Use natural phrasing and avoid redundancy. Mention safety concerns and an alternative preference.

예시: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because earthquakes are common where I live, so escaping quickly could be difficult. I’d prefer a low-rise house where evacuation would be safer and easier.

× Not really. I live in the countryside. The house. The houses around my home are like, umm, maybe just one or two stories.

✓ Not really. I live in the countryside. The houses around my home are only one or two stories tall.

Original contains a fragment 'The house.' which is incomplete (sentence structure error). Also 'are like, umm, maybe just one or two stories' is colloquial and disfluent. Correction combines ideas into complete sentences and uses 'only' and 'tall' to describe building height clearly. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and filler words; form complete sentences with a subject and verb.

× Yes I do, but I think it depends if it's like church or some special structure that I will take photos.

✓ Yes I do, but I think it depends on whether it's a church or some special structure that I would photograph.

The original misuses 'depends if' (preposition issue) and uses 'will take photos' which is awkward in this context. According to list, fix verb + -ing and preposition usage: use 'depends on whether' and change 'will take photos' to 'would photograph' to match hypothetical conditional. Suggestion: use 'depends on' + 'whether' and choose conditional 'would' for habitual or hypothetical actions; use 'photograph' instead of 'take photos' for conciseness.

× Yes, my dream is to go to Europe to visit, to visit some cathedral or some ancient church.

✓ Yes, my dream is to go to Europe to visit cathedrals and ancient churches.

Original repeats 'to visit' causing redundancy and awkward rhythm (sentence structure issue). Correction removes repetition and pluralizes 'cathedral' to match general desire. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition; use plural nouns when speaking generally and streamline infinitive phrases.

× Not at all, because in my country we have earthquake, which means that if I live in a tall building it's a little bit hard for me to get out quickly.

✓ Not at all, because in my country we have earthquakes, which means that if I lived in a tall building it would be difficult for me to get out quickly.

Original uses singular 'earthquake' (singular/plural issue) and mixes present factual statement with conditional consequence incorrectly (tense issue). The situation is hypothetical ('if I lived'), so use past simple in the if-clause and 'would' in the main clause. Also pluralize 'earthquakes'. Suggestion: use 'earthquakes' for general phenomena and use the second conditional (if + past, would + base) for hypothetical situations.

× Yes I do, but I think it depends if it's like church or some special structure that I will take photos.

✓ Yes I do, but I think it depends on whether it's a church or some special structure that I would photograph.

Original uses 'depends if' which is nonstandard; the correct form is 'depends on whether'. Also add the article 'a' before 'church'. Suggestion: use 'depends on' + 'whether' and include appropriate articles for countable nouns.