Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid filler phrases like “I assure you” or “I mean, so.” Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. I live in a condominium complex with five towers, each about 40 storeys high. Because they are close together, they dominate the local skyline and create a very urban feel in our neighborhood.

제안: Give a slightly longer, more specific response and use linking words to connect ideas. Replace repeated phrases with varied vocabulary and add a brief reason or example.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings, especially skylines. For example, I often capture cityscapes at sunset because the light highlights the shapes and reflections of the glass facades.

제안: Organize your reply with a clear topic sentence followed by concise supporting details. Correct simple grammar (verb forms and pronouns) and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words like “because” or “since” to explain reasons.

예시: I would like to visit the Petronas Towers in Malaysia because my friend praised their beauty and unique architecture. When I visit Malaysia, I hope to admire the twin towers’ design and take photos from the observation deck.

제안: Make the answer clearer and more natural. Start with a direct opinion, then give a specific reason. Fix unclear expressions (e.g., “read along the elevators”) and use linking words for coherence.

예시: No, I prefer living in a low-rise building because I dislike spending a lot of time on elevators. For instance, climbing or waiting for an elevator to reach the 40th floor would be inconvenient for me.

× I live in a condominium place and there are five towers for that place or that area.

✓ I live in a condominium complex and there are five towers in that area.

Use 'complex' not 'place' for a group of buildings; 'in that area' is the correct preposition. 'Condominium' as a count noun needs a modifier; 'complex' clarifies meaning. Also 'for that place' is unnatural; replace with 'in that area'. Suggestion: use collocations (condominium complex, towers in the area).

× I mean, so all of them are around 40 floors.

✓ I mean, they all have around 40 floors.

Use 'they all have' to show possession; 'all of them are around 40 floors' incorrectly treats buildings as being 'floors'. Correct plural possession structure: 'they have X floors'.

× Yes, I love taking photos of the building.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of buildings.

Use plural 'buildings' when speaking generally. The gerund 'taking' is fine. Change the noun to plural for general statements about types of objects.

× I love seeing the skyline and the cities across.

✓ I love seeing the skyline and the city across from me.

'Cities across' is vague and missing a preposition. Use 'across from me' or 'across the river' to indicate location. If referring to multiple cities, provide context; likely intended 'the city across' or 'the city across from it'.

× My friend used to go there and she excited me.

✓ My friend used to go there and she excited me.

Sentence is awkward rather than strictly wrong; 'she excited me' is unnatural. Better: 'My friend used to go there and she would tell me about it, which excited me.' This uses past habit and corrects verb use to express the emotional effect. (Keep past tense 'used to' for habitual action.)

× Always tell us about the beauty of Petronas Towers.

✓ She always told us about the beauty of the Petronas Towers.

Add past tense 'told' to match 'used to go' and add definite article 'the' with the proper noun 'Petronas Towers'. 'Always tell us' is present; change to past habitual 'always told us'.

× So by the time I'll have a chance to visit Malaysia, I would love to see that architecture.

✓ So when I have a chance to visit Malaysia, I would love to see that architecture.

Do not use 'by the time' with 'I'll' in this context; use 'when I have' for a future possibility. Also 'would love' is polite and acceptable. Alternatively 'If I have a chance' works. Use consistent conditional/modal form.

× I would love to visit the Petronas Tower in Malaysia.

✓ I would love to visit the Petronas Towers in Malaysia.

The famous landmark is 'Petronas Towers' (plural). Use correct proper name without the definite article 'the' is optional but common; 'the Petronas Towers' is also acceptable. Ensure proper noun form matches reality.

× Admittedly, I prefer living in the building with a few floors.

✓ Admittedly, I prefer living in a building with only a few floors.

Use 'a building' not 'the building' for a nonspecific building, and add 'only' to convey 'a few floors' preference. 'With a few floors' is acceptable but 'with only a few floors' is clearer.

× I don't like to read along the elevators just to go to the 40th floor of this building like in condominium.

✓ I don't like having to wait for the elevators just to go to the 40th floor in a condominium.

'Read along the elevators' is incorrect phrase; likely intended 'wait for the elevators'. Use 'having to wait' or 'waiting for' and 'in a condominium' instead of 'like in condominium'. Rearrange structure for natural English.