Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and correct countability (no skyscrapers). Add one specific detail with a linking word to make it coherent.

예시: No, there are no tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area. However, there is a single skyscraper in our country that is visible from a long distance.

제안: Respond directly and polish phrasing. Use linking words to contrast your general view with exceptions, and give a specific example of a monument you photograph.

예시: Not usually, because most modern buildings look quite similar. However, I do photograph historical monuments, for example the French colonial cathedral in my city, because it has interesting details and history.

제안: Be specific and avoid vague phrases. Give one or two concrete examples and briefly explain why you want to visit, using linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Marina Bay Sands in Singapore and the Petronas Twin Towers in Malaysia because they are famous for their striking design and panoramic views. For example, the Marina Bay Sands has an impressive rooftop infinity pool.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and two concise, well-explained reasons. Remove fillers and finish the sentence. Use linking words to structure reasons.

예시: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I feel safer living closer to the ground and, moreover, frequent elevator use would be inconvenient. Also, in an emergency I prefer easier access to the street level.

× 'In fact, I live in a rural area, uh, so there is no skyscrapers nearby, whereas there is only one in our country and we can see it from far away.'

✓ 'In fact, I live in a rural area, so there are no skyscrapers nearby; there is only one in our country and we can see it from far away.'

'Error type: singular/plural mismatch. The phrase "there is no skyscrapers" mixes singular "there is" with plural "skyscrapers." Use "there are no skyscrapers" to match plural noun. Also remove filler words and connect clauses more clearly. Suggestion: use subject-verb agreement for countable plurals: "there are no + plural noun.'

× 'No, I don't take photos of buildings because I feel like they're all the same.'

✓ 'No, I don't take photos of buildings because I feel they are all the same.'

'Error type: present tense / colloquial contraction and register. "I feel like they're all the same" is conversational but not incorrect grammatically; however in formal speaking, avoid "like" as a filler in this structure and expand the contraction. Suggestion: use "I feel they are all the same" for clearer present-tense statement.'

× 'However, the only, uh, pictures I take of are the historical monuments or the ones from the French colonization.'

✓ 'However, the only pictures I take are of historical monuments or of buildings from the French colonial period.'

'Error type: singular/plural and word order. Original word order "pictures I take of are the..." is awkward; place "are" after subject and use "of" before object: "pictures I take are of..." Also use plural/consistent noun phrases and prefer "French colonial period" to "French colonization.'

× 'Yes, there are many buildings in Asia like Singapore, China or Malaysia that have extremely good architecture but I can't quite remember the names.'

✓ 'Yes, there are many buildings in Asian countries such as Singapore, China, and Malaysia that have excellent architecture, but I can't quite remember their names.'

'Error type: singular/plural and adjective choice. "Buildings in Asia like Singapore" is incorrect because Singapore is a country, not an example of a building. Use "buildings in Asian countries such as..." Also change "extremely good" to the more natural "excellent," and make "names" refer to "their names." Suggestion: keep noun-phrase agreement and use appropriate prepositional phrase for countries.'

× 'There is like a twin tower in Singapore if I remember right.'

✓ 'There is a twin tower in Singapore, if I remember correctly.'

'Error type: present tense / colloquial filler. "There is like a twin tower" uses filler "like" which is informal and can be omitted. "If I remember right" is better expressed as "if I remember correctly." Suggestion: remove filler words and use standard adverbial phrase.'

× 'No, I don't want to live in a skyscraper because I feel it's more, it's safer, uh, living closer to the ground and also it will be really tiring to go up and down even though there may be some elevators but.'

✓ 'No, I don't want to live in a skyscraper because I feel it is safer to live closer to the ground, and it would be really tiring to go up and down even though there are elevators.'

'Error type: third person singular and sentence structure. Original has awkward punctuation and repetition "it's more, it's safer" and the clause "even though there may be some elevators but" is ungrammatical because of the trailing "but." Use "it is" instead of contraction for clarity, "safer to live closer to the ground," and conditional "it would be" to express hypothetical discomfort. Replace "may be some elevators but" with "there are elevators" or "even though there may be elevators." Suggestion: avoid trailing conjunctions and match verb forms for clarity.'