Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like “umm” and reduce repetition.

예시: Yes. I live in Ahmedabad, which has seen rapid development, so there are many newly built tall commercial and residential buildings near my home. For example, a new shopping complex and several apartment towers were completed last year, which changed the skyline.

제안: Organize your response: state your main preference, then give specific conditions when you would photograph buildings. Remove hesitations and repeated phrases; use linking words like 'however' or 'but' for clarity.

예시: Not usually — I prefer photographing natural scenery. However, I will photograph buildings when they add interest to a shot, for instance if a building forms a dramatic silhouette at sunset or fits well into a landscape composition.

제안: Begin with a clearer topic sentence naming the building, then give two specific details (purpose, appearance) and a brief reason why you want to visit. Omit fillers and vague phrases like 'that is the recent building.'

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the new city museum that was recently opened to showcase local artifacts and history. It has intricate carvings along the upper façade and a striking white exterior, which makes it both culturally interesting and visually appealing.

제안: Correct unclear words and give clear reasons. Start with a direct refusal, then give two precise reasons (practical concerns and personal preference) using linking words like 'because' and 'for example.' Avoid incoherent phrases (e.g. 'lips would not work').

예시: No, I would not. Although tall buildings offer great views, I prefer low-rise homes because I worry about reliability during emergencies — elevators may be unusable and power outages can make life difficult. For these practical reasons, I prefer living closer to the ground.

× So there are a lot of new buildings that has been built be it commercial or residential and they are quite tall.

✓ So there are a lot of new buildings that have been built, be they commercial or residential, and they are quite tall.

The relative clause 'that has been built' refers to 'buildings' (plural), so the verb should be plural 'have been built' (subject-verb agreement). Also use 'be they' for the idiomatic expression and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Match the verb number to the plural noun and use 'be they' in this fixed phrase.

× To be honest, I don't prefer to take pictures of tall buildings as I am more into taking pictures of natural scenery.

✓ To be honest, I don't prefer taking pictures of tall buildings as I am more into taking pictures of natural scenery.

The verb phrase 'prefer to take' is acceptable, but when following 'prefer' with another verb in a parallel structure ('am more into taking'), it is smoother to use the gerund 'taking' for consistency. Suggestion: Use the gerund after 'prefer' when contrasting with 'be into + -ing'.

× But if a picture is in the if a building is in the frame or picture, I would definitely click pictures.

✓ But if a building is in the frame, I would definitely take the picture.

The original sentence is redundant and has a fragment 'if a picture is in the'. Simplify structure: use a single conditional clause 'if a building is in the frame' and a natural verb-object collocation 'take the picture' (or 'take pictures'). Suggestion: Avoid repetition and choose one clear conditional clause and one verb phrase.

× If there is a sunset happening and the building acts as a silhouette, definitely yes.

✓ If there is a sunset and the building appears as a silhouette, then definitely yes.

Use 'appears as' instead of 'acts as' for inanimate objects forming a silhouette; 'happening' is unnecessary. Adding 'then' improves sentence flow. Suggestion: Use 'appear as' and omit unnecessary progressive 'happening'.

× Yes, that is the recent building uh, and it has been built for showcasing artifacts and historical backgrounds of my city.

✓ Yes, that is a recent building, and it was built to showcase artifacts and the historical background of my city.

'Has been built' is present perfect passive implying recent relevance; 'was built' is simpler here because you describe purpose. Also 'for showcasing' is less natural than 'to showcase', and 'historical backgrounds' should be singular 'historical background' when referring to the city's history. Suggestion: Use 'was built to + verb' for purpose and use singular 'historical background' when general.

× So I would definitely like to visit that building as it has intricate carvings on the uppermost part of the building and it is white in colour, so it is quite beautiful.

✓ So I would definitely like to visit that building because it has intricate carvings on its uppermost part and it is white in colour, so it is quite beautiful.

Replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity of reason; use the possessive 'its uppermost part' rather than repeating 'of the building'. Otherwise sentence is acceptable. Suggestion: Use possessive pronouns to avoid repetition.

× No, according to my perspective, I would not want to live in a tall building, although it provides quite scenic views and picturesque pictures.

✓ No, from my perspective, I would not want to live in a tall building, although it provides quite scenic views and picturesque images.

'According to my perspective' is awkward; 'from my perspective' is natural. 'Picturesque pictures' is repetitive; use 'picturesque images' or simply 'pictures'. Suggestion: Use idiomatic prepositional phrase and avoid redundant word pairs.

× But I believe that in case of any circumstances or whenever there is any natural phenomenon that is happening, lips would not work and generators would also not work.

✓ But I believe that in case of any emergency or when any natural phenomenon occurs, lifts would not work and generators might also fail.

Original has multiple issues: 'in case of any circumstances' is vague — 'in case of any emergency' is standard. 'Whenever there is any natural phenomenon that is happening' is wordy; 'when any natural phenomenon occurs' is concise. 'Lips' is a typo for 'lifts'. Also 'would not work' is absolute; 'might also fail' is more natural. Suggestion: Use clear nouns, correct typos, and choose appropriate modal verbs for uncertainty.

× So I would prefer to stay in a low building.

✓ So I would prefer to stay in a low-rise building.

'Low building' is nonstandard; 'low-rise building' or 'a shorter building' are idiomatic. Suggestion: Use established adjective-noun combinations like 'low-rise'.