Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장을 더 자연스럽게 만들고 문법 오류를 수정하세요. 단수/복수와 관사 사용(예: a huge building, buildings)과 어순을 바로잡으세요. 또한 주제 문장을 명확히 하고 추가 설명에는 연결어를 사용해 구체적인 세부 정보를 덧붙이세요. 예: 건물의 용도와 위치를 한두 문장으로 간결하게 정리하세요.

예시: Yes, there are some tall buildings near my home. For example, a large office building belonging to a paper company is close to my apartment, and it also houses several clinics on its lower floors.

제안: 문법과 어휘 선택을 개선하세요. 시간·거리 표현은 더 자연스럽게 하고, 형용사 사용에서 부정확한 단어(예: rotted tower)를 교체하세요. 연결어(if 대신 when)을 쓰고 사진을 찍는 이유나 느낌을 한두 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings. For example, when I walk for about ten minutes I reach the Han River, and across the river there is an old tower that I like to photograph because its weathered surface creates an interesting contrast with modern architecture.

제안: 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고 문법을 고치세요. "planning to go on an exchange"처럼 표현을 정확히 하고 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요. 분위기나 기대하는 경험을 덧붙이면 더 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in France. I am planning to study abroad in Europe, and I am excited to see the tower’s atmosphere and the panoramic views of Paris from the top.

제안: 의견을 더 자연스럽게 표현하고 이유를 구체화하세요. 감정 표현은 더 자연스러운 어휘(secure → security, calm → peace)로 바꾸고 문장 구조를 간결하게 만드세요. 또한 예시(예: 정원, 이웃과의 교류)를 추가하면 설득력이 높아집니다.

예시: No, I would not like to live in a tall building because I prefer the security and peace of a low-rise house. For instance, a small private house with a garden feels more comfortable to me and allows more interaction with neighbours.

× Yes, there is huge building around my apartment.

✓ Yes, there is a huge building around my apartment.

'huge building' needs an article 'a' before the singular noun 'building'. Use 'a' with singular countable nouns when introducing one non-specific item.

× There is a building of the paper company which also has some hospitals in it.

✓ There is a building owned by a paper company that also has some clinics in it.

'building of the paper company' is awkward; use 'owned by a paper company' or 'a paper company building'. Also 'hospitals' is unlikely inside one building; 'clinics' or 'offices' fits better. Use 'that' for restrictive relative clauses.

× For example if I walk 10 minutes there is a Han river and across the river there is a rotted tower and I like picture of it.

✓ For example, if I walk for 10 minutes there is the Han River, and across the river there is an old tower that I like to take pictures of.

Need 'for' with a duration ('walk for 10 minutes'), use the definite article 'the' with named rivers, 'rotted' is wrong for buildings so use 'old' or 'ruined', and the noun phrase 'I like picture of it' should be 'I like to take pictures of it' for correct verb structure.

× Yes, I'd like to visit the Eiffel Tower in France.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit the Eiffel Tower in France.

Sentence is grammatically correct. 'I'd like to' is an appropriate modal expression of desire; no change needed.

× Personally, I'm planning to go to an exchange student for Europe and the atmosphere that tower gives me.

✓ Personally, I'm planning to go to Europe as an exchange student because I like the atmosphere of the tower.

'go to an exchange student for Europe' is ungrammatical; the correct structure is 'go to Europe as an exchange student'. Also 'the atmosphere that tower gives me' should be 'the atmosphere of the tower' or 'the atmosphere the tower gives'.

× No, I don't want to live in a huge building because I prefer feelings of secure and calm, so the lower building like personal house will be much better for me.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a huge building because I prefer to feel secure and calm, so a low building like a private house would be much better for me.

Use verb form 'prefer to feel' rather than 'prefer feelings of'. 'Secure' and 'calm' should be adjectives following 'feel'. 'Lower building' is awkward; use 'a low building' or 'a low-rise building'. 'Personal house' should be 'private house' or 'private home'. Also conditional/modal consistency: 'would be' fits better than 'will be'.