Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar, use one clear topic sentence then add 1–2 specific supporting details (ingredients, occasions, or why you like it). Avoid repetition and fix verb forms and articles.

예시: My favourite food is tihari, a flavorful rice dish made with beef, onions, and aromatic spices. I usually eat it at family gatherings because I love its rich, spicy taste and the comforting aroma that reminds me of home.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and correct tense and articles. Give one reason and one specific example of occasions. Reduce repetition and use linking words like 'however' or 'when'.

예시: When I was young, I liked fast food, especially chicken nuggets, French fries and pasta. However, because these were unhealthy, we only ate them occasionally, usually during family picnics or outings.

제안: Avoid fillers (uh) and be grammatically accurate. Use a clear topic sentence and a specific seasonal example with linking words ('for example', 'in winter'). Correct comparative expressions and noun usage.

예시: I usually eat rice all year round, but my menu changes with the seasons. For example, in winter we tend to eat more hearty vegetables and soups, while in summer we prefer lighter dishes like grilled fish and salads.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hesitations. Provide a concise reason or brief example to support your answer, and correct tense and word choice.

예시: No, my favourite food has not changed — it is still tihari. I grew up eating it at family celebrations, and I still enjoy it for its spicy flavour and comforting memories.

× My favorite food is the tihari which is a very flavorful rice and a mix with beef and blend with some spices.

✓ My favorite food is tehari, which is a very flavorful rice dish mixed with beef and spices.

The sentence uses the definite article 'the' incorrectly before a proper dish name and contains awkward noun and verb forms. 'Tehari' does not need 'the'; use 'tehari' or 'the tehari' only if referencing a specific plate, but generally use the name alone. 'Rice and a mix with beef and blend with some spices' is ungrammatical: use 'rice dish' and the past-participial adjective 'mixed with' and simple noun 'spices' to describe preparation. Suggestion: Omit the unnecessary 'the', use 'rice dish', and use 'mixed with' to describe ingredients.

× I usually eat on my family gathering and the food is a very rich in taste.

✓ I usually eat it at my family gatherings, and the food is very rich in taste.

Use 'eat' with an object ('eat it') and the correct preposition for events is 'at' (not 'on'). 'Family gathering' should be plural if referring to repeated events. Also remove the extra article 'a' before 'very rich in taste'. Suggestion: Say 'eat it at my family gatherings' and 'the food is very rich in taste'.

× When I was young, I loved a fast food, especially chicken fries, French fries and pasta.

✓ When I was young, I loved fast food, especially chicken fries, French fries, and pasta.

'Fast food' is an uncountable noun in this context and should not take the indefinite article 'a'. Also add a serial comma for clarity when listing items. Suggestion: Remove 'a' before 'fast food'.

× Although those foods are unhealthy, I like those food.

✓ Although those foods are unhealthy, I liked them.

'Those foods' is plural, so use a plural pronoun 'them' rather than repeating the singular 'food'. Also keep tense consistent with 'When I was young' by using past tense 'liked'. Suggestion: Replace 'I like those food' with 'I liked them'.

× When we went out as a family tour or picnic, I eat eat those food.

✓ When we went out as a family on a tour or picnic, I ate those foods.

The main clause is in the past tense ('went'), so the verb describing habit in the past should be past tense 'ate' (not 'eat'). Also remove duplicated 'eat', use 'on a tour' rather than 'as a family tour', and use plural 'foods' or 'food' consistently; 'those foods' matches 'those'. Suggestion: Use 'ate' and correct the prepositional phrase to 'on a tour or picnic'.

× As an Asian, I usually eat rice year round, uh, but my uh, menu is changed, uh, through season, uh, for example, in winter, uh, we take a more vegetables than fish or meats, uh.

✓ As an Asian, I usually eat rice year-round, but my menu changes with the seasons. For example, in winter we eat more vegetables than fish or meat.

'Year round' should be hyphenated as 'year-round' when used as an adverbial phrase. 'Menu is changed' is passive and awkward; use active 'menu changes'. 'Through season' is incorrect; use 'with the seasons' or 'through the seasons'. 'We take a more vegetables' is ungrammatical: use 'eat more vegetables' and 'fish or meat' (mass nouns) rather than 'meats' unless referring to types of meat. Suggestion: Use active voice 'menu changes', 'with the seasons', and 'eat more vegetables'.

× No, my favorite food is always tihari.

✓ No, my favorite food has always been tehari.

When describing a preference that started in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect 'has always been' rather than simple present 'is always'. Also correct spelling to 'tehari'. Suggestion: Use present perfect to show continuity from childhood to now.

× Uh, in my childhood I loved to eat tehari and in my young or in my this time I also loved the same dish, tehari.

✓ In my childhood I loved to eat tehari, and now I also love the same dish, tehari.

'In my young' and 'in my this time' are incorrect phrases. Use 'in my childhood' for past time, and 'now' or 'at this time' for present. Maintain consistent tense: 'loved' for past and 'love' for present. Also avoid repeating 'tehari' unnecessarily. Suggestion: Contrast past and present with 'in my childhood' and 'now', and use present simple 'I also love' for current preference.