Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, give 1–2 supporting details (specific reasons or examples), use linking words and finish the thought. Reduce hesitation and filler words.

예시: My favourite food is sushi because I grew up in a coastal city where fresh fish is plentiful. For example, I often visit a local sushi restaurant that serves seasonal nigiri, which I find both healthy and delicious.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Begin with a topic sentence about what you liked, then give specific examples and a brief reason. Avoid unclear words and repetition; keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

예시: When I was young I loved sweet snacks, especially rice crackers and candy. For example, after school I would often buy melon-flavored candy because it was cheap and tasty.

제안: Give a clear direct answer (yes or no), then expand with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and complete your sentences. Avoid repeating words and trailing off.

예시: No, I usually eat similar foods throughout the year because I prefer sushi and visit the same restaurants. However, I sometimes try seasonal dishes like autumn salmon sushi when it's available.

제안: This answer is mostly clear but could be improved by removing unnecessary names and fillers, and by giving a specific reason and example of the change. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'now' to show contrast.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I preferred meat dishes because my family often cooked them, but now I prefer fish and sushi because I find it lighter and healthier.

× Well, my my favorite food is definitely sushi because sushi is one of the famous foods in Japan and when it comes to going to restaurant, I always choose sushi restaurant in Japan.

✓ Well, my favorite food is definitely sushi because it is one of the most famous foods in Japan, and when I go to a restaurant I always choose a sushi restaurant.

The original contains repetition ('my my'), awkward phrasing and article errors. 'One of the famous foods' should be 'one of the most famous foods' (article/degree). 'When it comes to going to restaurant' is ungrammatical; use 'when I go to a restaurant'. Also 'sushi restaurant in Japan' needs an article: 'a sushi restaurant'. Improve by removing repetition, using appropriate articles, and smoothing word order. Suggested improvement: read sentences aloud to spot repetitions, ensure countable nouns have articles ('a/an/the'), and use natural verb phrases like 'when I go to a restaurant'.

× Oh, you know, when I was arcade, I always eat snacks or licensable in Japan, uh, when I, when it comes to snacks, of course, children, obviously children are really into snacks and also, uh.

✓ Oh, you know, when I was young, I always ate snacks or licorice in Japan. When it comes to snacks, children are obviously really into them.

Multiple errors: 'when I was arcade' is incorrect word choice; should be 'when I was young' (vocabulary). Tense mismatch: 'I always eat' refers to habitual past, so use past tense 'I always ate'. 'Licensable' is not correct; likely 'licorice'. Repetition and awkward phrasing ('when I, when it comes to') should be streamlined. Also pronoun reference: 'into snacks' -> 'into them' to avoid repetition. Improve by choosing correct vocabulary, matching tense for past habits, and simplifying duplicated fragments.

× Actually I I would rather choose the almost same things.

✓ Actually I would rather choose almost the same things.

Minor issues: repeated 'I' and incorrect article 'the' before 'almost same things'. For general preference, 'almost the same things' is unnatural; 'almost the same things' without 'the' is better, or better 'choosing almost the same things'. Remove repetition and unnecessary article. Suggested improvement: avoid duplicated words and check whether an article is needed before noun phrases.

× For example, I'm really into sushi restaurant, so when I go out to eat something I always use sushi restaurants.

✓ For example, I'm really into sushi restaurants, so when I go out to eat I always go to sushi restaurants.

Countable noun and verb choice errors: use plural 'sushi restaurants' to match 'I'm really into', and 'use sushi restaurants' is unnatural; native speakers say 'go to sushi restaurants'. Also 'go out to eat something' should be 'go out to eat'. Improve by using correct plural forms and idiomatic verbs.

× So it is difficult for me to to try to.

✓ So it is difficult for me to try new foods.

Sentence is incomplete and contains duplicated 'to'. Add the object 'new foods' to complete the idea. Remove duplicate 'to'. Suggested improvement: always ensure sentences have a clear verb and object when needed.

× I think yes, Steven, yes, actually, because when I was a child I was a bit fond of eating meat.

✓ I think so, yes, actually, because when I was a child I was a bit fond of eating meat.

Use 'so' rather than addressing a name 'Steven' which seems out of place; original possibly nervous filler. Tense is correct (past habitual). Change 'I think yes' to 'I think so' for natural phrasing. No major grammar rule violation beyond phrasing.

× I usually ask my mother to cook some, uh, meat dishes.

✓ I usually asked my mother to cook meat dishes.

Context is comparing past habit ('when I was a child') so 'usually' should be paired with past tense 'asked'. Also unnecessary hesitation 'uh' removed and 'some' is not required. Improvement: match tense to the time reference for habitual actions in the past.

× But these days I like fish.

✓ But these days I like fish.

This sentence is correct. It matches present preference for current time and needs no change.