Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite food, then give one or two specific supporting details (reason, example). Avoid filler words and grammar mistakes (e.g., "sorts of things", "we're always gonna"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to make your answer coherent.

예시: My favourite food is sushi. I especially enjoy salmon nigiri because the fresh fish and seasoned rice create a delicate balance of flavours. For example, my family often eats rice with small side dishes, but I choose sushi when I want something light and flavorful.

제안: Give a clear, concise statement about the past, then add one specific detail or short anecdote. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases ("like I went, I was a child", "cousin candy"). Use past tense consistently and a linking word like "because" or "for example".

예시: When I was young, I loved sweet treats such as cotton candy. I had a real sweet tooth, so I used to ask my parents to buy me sweets every time I came home from school. For example, I remember saving pocket money to buy cotton candy at the fair.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer structures: state whether you do, then explain with specific examples of any occasional changes (festivals, seasons). Reduce fillers ("you know", "like"). Use linking expressions such as "however" or "occasionally".

예시: Not really — my diet stays similar throughout the year. However, occasionally I try seasonal foods; for instance, I eat more cold salads in summer and heartier soups in winter. Once in a while I also try new cuisines when I travel or dine out.

제안: Make a clear contrast between past and present with appropriate tenses and concise reasons. Start with a topic sentence that states the change, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors ("I would my kids self").

예시: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I loved sweet foods such as candy and chocolate, but now I prefer savory dishes like grilled fish because I enjoy more balanced flavours and healthier options.

× Like whatever me and my family ate, we're always gonna have rice and have a little side dish of everything.

✓ Like whatever my family and I ate, we always had rice and a little side dish of everything.

Use subject pronoun order 'my family and I' not 'me and my family.' Also tense should match past context 'ate' so use 'we always had' rather than future colloquial 'we're always gonna have.' Replace informal 'gonna' with 'had' for correct grammar.

× I'm not really sure but I feel like when I was a kid I would be the type of person who would love to eat cotton candy because like I went, I was a child.

✓ I'm not really sure, but I feel like when I was a kid I was the type of person who loved to eat cotton candy because I was a child.

Avoid redundant modals and simplify: 'would be the type' is wordy; in past context use 'was the type' and 'loved' to match past tense. Remove 'because like I went' which is ungrammatical and replace with 'because I was a child.' Also add a comma after 'sure' for clarity.

× I have a sweet tooth so each time when I went home from school I would always beg my parents to buy me some cousin candy.

✓ I have a sweet tooth, so whenever I came home from school I would always beg my parents to buy me some cotton candy.

'Each time when' is awkward; use 'whenever' for repeated past actions. 'Went' should match subject: 'I came home' fits better. The word 'cousin candy' is incorrect; likely 'cotton candy.' Commas improve readability.

× I don't think so 'cause I feel like each time of the year I would always it pretty much the same thing but you know, just a repetitive food.

✓ I don't think so, because I feel like at each time of the year I usually eat pretty much the same things; it's just repetitive food.

Original has missing verb 'eat' after 'would always.' Replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because.' Use 'at each time of the year' or 'throughout the year'; change 'would always' to 'usually' for habitual present. Use plural 'things' to match 'same things.' Use punctuation to separate clauses.

× But once in a blue moon I will actually try something new and like get out of my comfort zone and taste a lot of cuisine.

✓ But once in a blue moon I actually try something new, get out of my comfort zone, and try many different cuisines.

Mixed future 'will' with general habit; use present simple 'I actually try' for habitual occasional actions. 'Taste a lot of cuisine' is awkward; use 'try many different cuisines.' Parallel verbs should match form: 'try, get, and try.' Commas improve clarity.

× Certainly back when I was a child I have always loved to eat sweet things like candy, cotton candy, chocolate like name everything that has sugar.

✓ Certainly, back when I was a child I always loved to eat sweet things like candy, cotton candy, and chocolate — basically anything that has sugar.

Tense mixture: 'back when I was a child' requires past tense 'always loved' rather than 'have always loved.' 'Have' indicates present perfect which conflicts with past time marker. Also clarify list with 'and' and replace 'like name everything' with 'basically anything' for natural phrasing.

× I would my kids self would love it.

✓ My child self would have loved it.

Original is ungrammatical with duplicated modals and misplaced words. Use 'my child self' or 'my younger self' and past conditional 'would have loved' to indicate hypothetical past preference. This corrects word order and verb form.

× But now I'm I'm more into the savory things like maybe grilled fish.

✓ But now I'm more into savory things, like grilled fish.

Duplicate 'I'm' is a speech disfluency and should be reduced to a single 'I'm.' Use 'savory things' without 'the' for general category. Comma before example improves flow.