Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and focus on one main idea: state your favourite food, give one or two specific reasons or a brief example, and avoid unrelated details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, since, especially). Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

예시: My favourite food is rice with vegetables because it is healthy and satisfying after a long day. For example, my wife often prepares a vegetable stir-fry with fragrant rice, which helps me relax when I get home.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about your past preference, then contrast it with the present using a linking word (however, but, since). Give a specific example of a junk food you liked and one reason you changed your habit.

예시: When I was young, I used to love eating fast food such as burgers and fries. However, I no longer eat them because I realised they made me feel unhealthy, so now I prefer rice and vegetables.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples of seasonal or festival foods and briefly explain why they differ (tradition, celebration, availability). Use linking words for coherence (for example, during, while, therefore).

예시: Yes. During Ramadan we prepare a variety of special dishes, such as sweet pastries and festive meat dishes for iftar. In contrast, during other months we usually eat simpler meals like rice and vegetables because daily routines are less celebratory.

제안: Answer directly first (Yes or No) and briefly explain why. Avoid broad unrelated remarks about cooking methods unless relevant; if you mention changes in cooking, link it clearly to how it affected your preference. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words (however, because, since).

예시: No, my favourite food has not changed much; I still enjoy rice and vegetables. However, cooking methods have changed — for example, people now use gas or electric stoves instead of wood, which can make food quicker to prepare.

× My favorite food is rice with vegetables.

✓ My favorite food is rice with vegetables.

No change needed. The sentence correctly uses articles (none required) and is grammatical.

× My wife can cook very delicious food, especially when I get back from work.

✓ My wife can cook very delicious food, especially when I get back from work.

No change needed. Pronoun use is correct ('I' refers to the speaker). The sentence is grammatical.

× I used to like to eat junk food, however these days I stopped eating them and start to eat healthy food like rice, vegetables.

✓ I used to like eating junk food; however, these days I have stopped eating it and have started to eat healthy food like rice and vegetables.

Original contains mixed and incorrect tenses and pronoun/number issues. 'Used to' describes a past habit; when contrasting with the present, use present perfect ('have stopped') to indicate a change that affects the present. 'Stopped' alone (simple past) is possible but less natural with 'these days'. 'Start' should be in present perfect ('have started') to match. 'Junk food' is uncountable as a general category, so use 'it' rather than 'them'. Also use 'eating junk food' (gerund) after 'used to like' for natural phrasing. Add 'and' between 'rice and vegetables'. Use a semicolon or period before 'however' and a comma after it for correct punctuation.

× During the holy month of Ramadan we eat so many type of food, while in the remaining months we kind of eat simpler food like rice and vegetables.

✓ During the holy month of Ramadan we eat so many types of food, while in the remaining months we tend to eat simpler foods like rice and vegetables.

'So many' requires a plural noun: change 'type' to 'types'. 'Food' can be countable as 'foods' when referring to different kinds. 'We kind of eat' is informal; 'we tend to eat' is more appropriate. Also maintain parallel plural form 'foods' after 'simpler'.

× I think no, however the way people cook their food might change due to the tools change as well because during the old days people were cooking via wood.

✓ I don't think so; however, the way people cook their food might change because of changes in tools, since in the past people cooked using wood.

Multiple issues: 'I think no' is unnatural — use 'I don't think so.' 'Might change' is acceptable for present/future possibility; keep it. 'Due to the tools change' is incorrect preposition and noun order — use 'because of changes in tools' or 'because tools have changed.' 'During the old days' is awkward; use 'in the past.' 'People were cooking via wood' is incorrect verb form and preposition: use simple past 'cooked' and 'using wood' rather than 'via wood'. Also added punctuation for clarity.