Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “cheese” repeated) and correct minor grammar (use "a lot of" or "a large amount of").

예시: I like pizza most because of its cheesy flavor. For example, I enjoy thin-crust margherita with extra mozzarella, which is both satisfying and easy to share with friends.

제안: Be more specific and avoid vague or incorrect words. Use linking words (for example, and later) and correct vocabulary (avoid ‘charming’ if you meant a food name). Limit to two or three items and explain briefly why you liked them.

예시: When I was young, I mainly liked fast foods such as burgers and pizza because they were tasty and convenient. For example, I often chose burgers after school because they were quick and filling.

제안: Make the answer grammatical and add a specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "for instance." Correct article and plurality ("different types of food in different seasons") and prefer natural phrasing ("summer"/"winter").

예시: Yes, I eat different foods in different seasons because my body craves different things. For instance, in summer I prefer cold salads and smoothies, while in winter I choose soups and stews to keep warm.

제안: Answer directly, then give a clear reason and a brief comparison using linking words like "but" or "however." Avoid repeating the same phrase; vary vocabulary (e.g., "cheesy taste").

예시: Yes, it has changed. As a child I preferred burgers because they were fun to eat, but now I prefer pizza because I enjoy its cheesy taste and the variety of toppings available.

× My favorite food is pizza as I like cheese a lot and pizza consists of heavy amount of cheese.

✓ My favorite food is pizza because I like cheese a lot and pizza contains a large amount of cheese.

Used 'as' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer; 'consists of heavy amount of cheese' is ungrammatical: 'consist of' isn't used with 'amount' here and 'heavy amount' is incorrect quantifier/adjective choice. Use 'contains' (correct verb for ingredients) and 'a large amount of' or 'a lot of' to quantify noncount noun 'cheese'. Use 'contains a large amount of cheese' or 'has a lot of cheese'.

× When I was young I used to like a lot of junk food including burger, pizza, momo, charming etcetera.

✓ When I was young, I used to like a lot of junk food including burgers, pizza, momo, and chaat, etc.

List items should match number: use plural 'burgers' when referring generally. Also 'charming' seems wrong; likely 'chaat' or another snack. Use commas and 'and' before final item. 'etc.' is better after a comma. Maintain plural/singular consistency for list items.

× I also used to love eating non veg items.

✓ I also used to love eating non-veg items.

Main issue is stylistic: 'non veg' should be hyphenated 'non-veg' or written 'nonvegetarian' to be clear. No major grammatical tense problem; kept 'used to' which correctly indicates past habit.

× Yes, I do eat a different types of food on different seasons as warmer seasons requires colder foods intake and cold seasons requires warmer foods intake.

✓ Yes, I eat different types of food in different seasons because warmer seasons require cooler foods and cold seasons require warmer foods.

'a different types' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use 'different types'. Preposition 'on' should be 'in' for seasons. Subject-verb agreement: 'seasons require' not 'seasons requires'. Use 'cooler' not 'colder' foods for warmer seasons. 'foods intake' is awkward: use 'foods' or 'food', or 'the intake of food' but simpler 'require cooler foods' is correct.

× Yes, it has changed.

✓ Yes, it has changed.

This sentence is grammatically correct: present perfect 'has changed' is appropriate to indicate a change from childhood to now. No correction needed.

× When I was a child I used to love eating burgers, but as of now I love eating pizza.

✓ When I was a child, I used to love eating burgers, but now I love eating pizza.

'As of now' is wordy; 'now' is more natural. Added comma after introductory clause. Tenses are appropriate: 'used to' for past habit and 'love' for present.

× I enjoy pizza a lot because of how cheesy it is.

✓ I enjoy pizza a lot because it is very cheesy.

Original is understandable but slightly awkward: 'because of how cheesy it is' can be simplified to 'because it is very cheesy.' Both are acceptable; simplified version is clearer and more natural.