Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct noun phrases and verbs, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and keep answers under five sentences. For example, correct "beef stiff" to "beef stew" (or the intended dish), fix tense and remove hesitations. Add why you like it (taste, texture, memories).

예시: My favourite food is traditional Vietnamese beef stew, especially the version my mother makes. It is simmered slowly for hours, which makes the meat incredibly tender and the broth very rich. I like it because the flavours are comforting and it reminds me of family dinners.

제안: Focus on accurate tense and clear vocabulary. Begin with a simple past tense topic sentence ("When I was young, I liked..."). Use correct food names ("egg porridge" or "congee") and clear adjectives ("easy to digest", "versatile"). Provide one specific detail or example and use a linking word. Avoid filler words and pronunciation issues in writing.

예시: When I was young, I liked egg porridge (congee). It was easy to digest and I could add many toppings, such as minced pork or spring onions, which made it varied and comforting.

제안: Correct subject-verb structure and vocabulary mistakes. Answer directly, then give a seasonal example with linking words ("for example", "in summer"). Use precise adjectives ("fresh flavours", "lighter dishes") and explain why (e.g., weather, appetite). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I do. For example, in summer I usually eat lighter dishes with fresh flavours, such as salads and grilled fish, because they feel more refreshing in hot weather.

제안: Make a clear, coherent statement about change using simple language. Use past and present contrast with linking words ("when I was a child" / "now"). Explain briefly why the change happened (health, taste, lifestyle). Avoid unclear phrases and unrelated words. Keep answer to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since I was a child. When I was young I preferred simple, plain foods for their comfort, but now I enjoy more diverse and nutritious meals because I care more about health and flavours.

× To be honest, my favorite food is traditional Vietnamese food, especially my mom's beef stiff.

✓ To be honest, my favorite food is traditional Vietnamese food, especially my mom's beef stew.

The word 'stiff' is incorrect here; the intended noun is 'stew', an edible dish. This is a vocabulary choice error affecting meaning. Use the correct noun 'stew' to convey the intended dish.

× She she's on when she wants it for for hours.

✓ She cooks it when she wants and simmers it for hours.

The original sentence has repeated words and unclear structure. 'She she's on' and 'for for hours' are errors. Rephrase to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'She cooks it when she wants and simmers it for hours.' This fixes repetition and provides correct verb usage and meaning.

× While the mood is incredibly tender in the Prof is very rich.

✓ The meat is incredibly tender and the broth is very rich.

Many words are incorrect or misspelled ('mood' -> 'meat', 'Prof' -> 'broth') and the sentence mixes fragments. Correcting vocabulary and joining with 'and' yields a grammatically correct description. Use precise nouns and coordinate two adjectives for clarity.

× When I was a guy, I really love eating eggs porridge because it was so very very digested and in common with many different flavors, especially both Miss pork.

✓ When I was a child, I really loved eating egg porridge because it was easy to digest and had many different flavors, especially with minced pork.

'guy' is informal and wrong for 'child'; tense mismatch ('love' vs past 'was') and wrong adjective 'digested' instead of 'easy to digest'; 'in common with' is incorrect and 'both Miss pork' is meaningless. Fix tense to past 'loved', use proper adjective phrase 'easy to digest', and correct noun phrase 'minced pork'.

× Yes definitely am a food lover and I enjoy changing of my music at different times of the years.

✓ Yes, I'm definitely a food lover and I enjoy changing my meals at different times of the year.

Missing subject in 'am a food lover' requires 'I'm'. 'Changing of my music' is incorrect word choice; 'meals' fits context. 'At different times of the years' should be singular 'year' for a general statement.

× For example in the shimmer I I usually eat dishes with fresh flavors because it make me feel more.

✓ For example, in the summer I usually eat dishes with fresh flavors because they make me feel refreshed.

'shimmer' is a misspelling of 'summer'. Tense/number agreement: 'it make' should be 'they make' to match plural 'dishes'. 'Feel more' is vague; 'feel refreshed' is clearer. Include commas for clarity.

× Yes definitely my pillage has evolved over the years as a child I observe with nutrients point but am model I develop myself for suffering more like my motorbike self.

✓ Yes, my palate has evolved over the years. As a child I preferred simple, nutritious food, but now I have developed a taste for richer flavors and more variety.

The original contains many incorrect words ('pillage'->'palate', 'observe with nutrients point' unclear, 'am model I develop myself for suffering more like my motorbike self' nonsensical). Break into two sentences for clarity, replace incorrect vocabulary with 'palate' and 'preferred simple, nutritious food', and express current preference clearly. Ensure tense consistency and logical progression.