Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence stating your favourite, then give one or two specific supporting details (why you like it, how you eat it) with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and long unclear fragments. Work on verb forms, articles and sequence words (first, then).

예시: My favourite food is Japanese salmon sashimi because it tastes fresh and delicate. I usually slice the salmon thinly, dip it first into soy sauce and then a little mayonnaise for richness. I enjoy it with steamed rice and wasabi, which balances the flavour.

제안: Give a clear past-focused topic sentence (I liked X when I was young), then explain briefly with a specific reason or memory. Use simple past tense consistently and avoid filler words. Clarify health reasons with correct vocabulary (e.g., tonsillitis) and link cause and effect (so, because).

예시: When I was young, I loved eating ice cream. Because I had frequent tonsillitis, my mother often told me not to eat it, so I felt disappointed. I remember saving pocket money to buy ice cream on special occasions.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and then list seasonal differences using linking words (in summer, in winter, during the rainy season). Provide one specific example per season and explain briefly why (e.g., to cool down, to feel warm). Reduce hesitations and repeat vocabulary less.

예시: Yes. In summer I often eat ice cream and drink cold juice to cool down. In winter I prefer hot foods like barbecue or soup to keep warm. During the rainy season I enjoy hot chocolate while watching the rain from a window.

제안: Answer directly: state whether it changed and give a clear progression with linking words (first, then, now) and reasons for change (taste preferences, health, maturity). Keep sentences concise and avoid vague statements like 'every single time.'

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed over time. At first I liked ice cream because it was sweet, then I preferred cake since I enjoyed richer flavours. Now I often choose savoury dishes like salmon sashimi because I appreciate more subtle tastes.

× My favorite foods for the all time is salmon sashimi from Japan.

✓ My favorite food of all time is salmon sashimi from Japan.

The phrase 'for the all time' is incorrect; use the idiom 'of all time'. Also 'foods' should be singular because it refers to one favorite item, so use 'food' and ensure subject-verb agreement with 'is'. Use 'of all time' to express the superlative time frame and 'favorite food' for singular preference. Suggestion: Say 'My favorite food of all time is salmon sashimi from Japan.'

× I have my own recipe.

✓ I have my own recipe for it.

The original sentence is grammatical but vague given the context; adding 'for it' clarifies that the recipe is for the salmon sashimi. Suggestion: Include the object when referring to a recipe: 'I have my own recipe for it.'

× When you get the salmon then you did dip it into the so I saw it and the also dip it onto the mayonnaise.

✓ When you get the salmon, you dip it into soy sauce, and then you also dip it into mayonnaise.

Several issues: 'did dip' is unnecessary past emphatic—use simple present 'dip' for instructions. 'so I saw' is a misheard 'soy sauce' (spelling and word choice). 'onto the mayonnaise' should be 'into mayonnaise' or 'into the mayonnaise' depending on context; here 'into mayonnaise' is natural. Also add commas and conjunctions for clarity and proper sentence structure. Suggestion: Use simple present for instructions and correct nouns: 'When you get the salmon, you dip it into soy sauce, and then you also dip it into mayonnaise.'

× This.

✓ That's it.

A single word 'This.' is incomplete in this context. Use a short concluding phrase like 'That's it.' to indicate the end of the explanation. Suggestion: Replace fragment with a complete brief sentence: 'That's it.'

× My favorite foods are when I wait was yen was umm the ice cream, but I have tonsil like this so mom told me not to eat that ice cream uh for my hub.

✓ When I was young, my favorite food was ice cream, but I had tonsillitis, so my mom told me not to eat ice cream for my health.

Multiple errors: tense and word order ('when I wait was yen was' should be 'When I was young'), 'favorite foods are' should be 'my favorite food was' for past preference. 'tonsil like this' likely means 'tonsillitis'—use correct medical term and past tense 'had'. 'for my hub' is incorrect; intended 'for my health'. Also fix pronouns and articles. Suggestion: Use past tense to talk about childhood and correct medical term: 'When I was young, my favorite food was ice cream, but I had tonsillitis, so my mom told me not to eat ice cream for my health.'

× Of course I eat a ice cream and juice, uh, for the summer.

✓ Of course I eat ice cream and drink juice in the summer.

Article error: 'a ice cream' should be 'ice cream' or 'an ice cream' depending on meaning; here general consumption uses uncountable 'ice cream'. Also use parallel verbs 'eat' and 'drink' and correct preposition 'in the summer' rather than 'for the summer'. Suggestion: Say 'I eat ice cream and drink juice in the summer.'

× In the winter I eat hot bar like BBQ like that and in rainy season I drink, uh, some chocolate chocolate and view the window.

✓ In the winter I eat hot food like barbecue, and in the rainy season I drink hot chocolate and look out the window.

'hot bar' is incorrect; likely 'hot food' or 'hot barbecued food' and 'BBQ' should be 'barbecue'. Add 'the' in 'the rainy season' and use 'hot chocolate' not 'some chocolate chocolate'. 'view the window' is unnatural; use 'look out the window'. Suggestion: Use correct nouns and natural verbs: 'In the winter I eat hot food like barbecue, and in the rainy season I drink hot chocolate and look out the window.'

× Yes, I changed food every single time.

✓ Yes, I change my favorite food all the time.

The question asks about change since childhood; a present habitual meaning is appropriate: 'I change my favorite food all the time.' 'Changed' (past) with 'every single time' is awkward. Also include 'my favorite food' for clarity. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions: 'I change my favorite food all the time.'

× When I eat ice cream it is sweet so I like it.

✓ When I eat ice cream, it is sweet, so I like it.

Add commas for clarity; sentence is otherwise acceptable. Maintain present tense to describe general truth. Suggestion: Use punctuation to separate clauses: 'When I eat ice cream, it is sweet, so I like it.'

× After that I eat cake and it is more sweet than the ice cream so I love that and always change.

✓ After that I eat cake, and it is sweeter than the ice cream, so I love it and my preference keeps changing.

Use comparative adjective 'sweeter' rather than 'more sweet'. Use 'it' rather than 'that' for the cake, and rephrase 'always change' to 'my preference keeps changing' for clarity and correct tense/aspect. Suggestion: Use comparative form and clear phrasing: 'After that I eat cake, and it is sweeter than the ice cream, so I love it and my preference keeps changing.'