Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail (where/why) using linking words. Avoid hesitation and filler words. Also replace vague praise ("so ******* good") with precise adjectives and a brief reason.

예시: I love hot pot, especially the Chongqing style. I first tried it in Chongqing and liked it because the broth is intensely spicy and rich, which brings out the flavors of the meat and vegetables.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and correct grammar. Use linking words to add a specific detail (ingredients, taste, memory) and avoid repetition. Make adjectives accurate ("very flavorful") and keep under five sentences.

예시: As a child I loved my mother's tomato-and-egg noodles. She would cook fresh tomatoes and scrambled eggs into the broth, making the dish slightly sweet and very flavorful, which is why I still remember it fondly.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then specific seasonal examples with correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid vague phrases ("fresh leaves from the trees") and unfinished clauses. Mention reasons briefly (taste, availability, tradition).

예시: Yes. I usually eat according to the seasons: in spring I enjoy tender asparagus and leafy greens because they are fresh, in summer I eat lots of cucumbers and tomatoes to stay cool, and in winter I prefer hearty stews with preserved or frozen meat for warmth.

제안: Answer directly, then provide a concise reason with linking words. Avoid repetition of the same idea. Add one specific example of a dish or memory to strengthen the response.

예시: No, it hasn't changed; I still prefer my mother's cooking. Because I studied abroad and was far from home, I often missed her meals—especially her tomato-and-egg noodles—which makes them my favorite even now.

× The first time I went to Chongqing I had the delicious hot pot.

✓ The first time I went to Chongqing, I had delicious hot pot.

Remove the definite article 'the' before 'delicious hot pot' because here 'hot pot' is an uncountable or general food type rather than a specific item previously mentioned. This is an article error related to past participle context; keep sentence simple and natural. Add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity.

× It was hot and spicy both, but the flavor of the food was so ******* good.

✓ It was both hot and spicy, and the flavor of the food was so good.

Place 'both' before the coordinated adjectives ('hot and spicy') for correct word order. Use 'and' rather than a comma before the second clause to join ideas smoothly. Remove extraneous characters. This fixes adjective coordination and sentence structure.

× I can't forget.

✓ I can't forget it.

Add the object pronoun 'it' because 'forget' is a transitive verb here requiring an object (the experience or taste). Without 'it' the sentence is grammatically incomplete.

× When I was young, I think the food I like was the noodles that my mom made for me.

✓ When I was young, I think the food I liked was the noodles that my mom made for me.

Maintain past tense consistency. The main clause refers to childhood, so 'like' should be past tense 'liked' to agree with 'was' and 'made'.

× She always put some tomatoes and eggs in the noodles.

✓ She always put some tomatoes and eggs in the noodles.

This sentence is acceptable in simple past narrative; however, if describing habitual past action more clearly, 'She always put' is correct. No change necessary. (Included for completeness.)

× It tastes not very salty but it is very flavor so I I remember the flavor in.

✓ It didn't taste very salty but it was very flavorful, so I remember the flavor.

Use past tense 'didn't taste' and 'was' for consistency with 'when I was young'. Use the adjective 'flavorful' instead of 'flavor' and remove duplicated 'I' and stray 'in'. Place 'so' before the result clause. These fixes correct tense, word choice, redundancy, and sentence structure.

× I think we should eat seasonal vegetables.

✓ I think we should eat seasonal vegetables.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. (Included to show it meets allowed types.)

× For example, in spring I always eat some fresh leaves from the trees, such as, but for summer we eat the cucumbers and tomatoes.

✓ For example, in spring I always eat some fresh leaves from trees, but in summer we eat cucumbers and tomatoes.

Remove awkward 'such as' with no example following. Use consistent prepositional phrases 'in spring' and 'in summer' and omit unnecessary definite article 'the' before plural nouns when speaking generally. This corrects sentence structure and article use.

× As for winter, we don't eat that fresh, we eat some frozen meat, so.

✓ As for winter, we don't eat such fresh produce; we eat frozen meat.

'That fresh' is informal and awkward here; use 'such fresh produce' or 'very fresh food'. Remove trailing 'so' and replace comma with semicolon or period to join related clauses. This corrects article and word choice.

× No, it never changed.

✓ No, it has never changed.

When referring to a state that began in childhood and continues to the present, use present perfect 'has never changed' rather than simple past 'never changed' to indicate continuity up to now.

× I always like the food my mom cooks for me because when I grow up I spend a lot of time studying abroad and staying far away from her, so I miss her a lot.

✓ I have always liked the food my mom cooks because when I grew up I spent a lot of time studying abroad and stayed far away from her, so I missed her a lot.

Maintain consistent tense: use present perfect 'have always liked' for a continuing preference, and past tense 'grew up', 'spent', 'stayed' for completed actions in the past. Also remove 'for me' after 'cooks' (unnecessary) and simplify phrasing. These changes fix tense consistency and sentence structure.

× So I miss her food.

✓ So I miss her food.

Sentence is acceptable; no grammatical correction needed. If emphasizing ongoing feeling, 'So I still miss her food' could be used. Included for completeness.