Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (tense and articles), use linking words to explain why you like it, and give one specific example. Keep it under five sentences. For example, say when and where you tried it, what you like about its taste or texture, and mention one way you enjoy it (e.g., as ice cream).

예시: My favourite drink is matcha, a powdered green tea I first tried in Japan five years ago. I love its slightly bitter, vegetal flavour and creamy texture. Because of that, I often enjoy it as matcha ice cream or in chocolate desserts. Trying it while in Kyoto made the experience special and memorable.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and correct small errors. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' and 'so') and give one concrete detail about the candy or a short anecdote. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: When I was a child, my favourite food was candy because my mother limited how much I could have. As a result, I craved sweets even more and always saved pocket money to buy them at the weekend. One candy I remember most was a sour fruit chew I could never stop eating.

제안: Make the timeframe and tenses accurate and use clearer linking words (e.g., 'when', 'during', 'now'). State a simple pattern (where you lived and what you ate), then give one specific example of a seasonal dish. Avoid run-on sentences and keep it within five sentences.

예시: Yes. When I lived in Taiwan from January to April, I mainly ate Taiwanese dishes like beef noodle soup and oyster omelettes. Now, since I moved to Japan in May, I often eat Japanese food such as sushi and ramen. Next month I expect to try more regional specialties as I travel.

제안: Answer directly and correct repetition and tense issues. Use linking words like 'but' and 'because' to show contrast and reason. Give one concise detail about why you like the new food (taste, texture or health reasons). Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes. As a child I loved candy, but when I started elementary school my favourite food became broccoli because I enjoyed its crunch and slightly bitter taste. I also felt proud to eat vegetables, and my parents praised me for choosing healthy snacks.

× My favorite food is mecha.

✓ My favorite drink is matcha.

The student used the wrong noun and article; 'mecha' is likely a misspelling of 'matcha' and 'matcha' is a drink, not a food. Use the correct word and 'drink' to be accurate. Also 'My favorite food is matcha' is odd because matcha is a drink; using 'drink' fits the meaning.

× When I tasted it in Japan in five years ago.

✓ I tasted it in Japan five years ago.

The phrase 'in five years ago' incorrectly mixes 'in' with 'ago'. With 'ago' you do not use 'in'. Also 'When I tasted it' as a clause followed by a time expression is redundant; use 'I tasted it in Japan five years ago.' This corrects word order and tense reference.

× And maybe make a ice cream and make a chocolate.

✓ Maybe I could make ice cream and chocolate.

The original lacks a subject and uses the wrong article 'a' before uncountable 'ice cream'. Adding a subject 'I' and using modal 'could' expresses possibility. Remove 'a' and pluralize or use uncountable nouns appropriately.

× I very like them.

✓ I like them very much.

English places 'very' before adjectives or adverbs, not before verbs. To emphasize liking, use the phrase 'like ... very much' rather than 'very like'. This corrects adverb placement and idiomatic usage.

× MMM my favorite food in my childhood was candy because at that time my mom always limited me, couldn't eat too much candy.

✓ My favorite food in my childhood was candy because my mom always limited me; I couldn't eat too much candy.

The sentence needs clearer clause boundaries and correct past tense/modal use. 'Couldn't' should be attached to a subject 'I'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join related ideas. The past tense 'was' and 'limited' are correct; ensure subject present for 'couldn't.'

× So you know, kids always like the thing they couldn't do then.

✓ So you know, kids always like things they are not allowed to do.

'The thing they couldn't do then' is awkward and mixes tense. Use plural 'things' and 'are not allowed to do' to express general truth about children. This fixes noun number and clearer present-tense generalization.

× In this era, January to April, I ate Taiwanese food because I lived in Taiwan at that time.

✓ From January to April, I ate Taiwanese food because I lived in Taiwan then.

'In this era' is unnatural; use 'From January to April' for a time span. 'At that time' can be shortened to 'then'. Keep past tense 'ate' and 'lived' consistent.

× But May to June, just right now, I eat Japanese food because I lived in Japan Right now I think I'm at is diverse food in next month and.

✓ But in May and June, right now I am eating Japanese food because I live in Japan. I think the food will be more diverse next month.

The original mixes tenses and has incorrect prepositions and structure. Use 'in May and June' or 'from May to June', and present continuous 'am eating' for current action. 'I lived' should be 'I live' for current residence. 'I'm at is diverse food in next month and' is ungrammatical; clarify as 'I think the food will be more diverse next month.' This corrects tense consistency, prepositions, and sentence structure.

× Yes, just I said before I like I like add candies when when I was a kid, but when I got into elementary school, my favorite food changed changed to broccoli because I like the taste and the texture of broccoli.

✓ Yes, as I said before, I liked candies when I was a kid, but when I started elementary school my favorite food changed to broccoli because I like the taste and texture of broccoli.

Use past tense 'liked' to describe childhood preference. Remove repeated words and extra fillers. 'Got into elementary school' is better expressed as 'started elementary school.' Keep 'changed to broccoli' and present 'like' for a continuing preference for taste and texture. Clean up repetition and tense consistency.