Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid hesitations or fragmented phrases. Give one brief reason and one specific example. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas.

예시: My favourite food is chocolate because it makes me feel comforted when I'm stressed. For example, after a long exam I usually have a small bar of dark chocolate to relax and lift my mood.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence then add specific supporting details without filler words. Use linking words (for example, such as) and avoid pauses like 'yeah'. Mention frequency or a memory to enrich your answer.

예시: When I was young I had a very sweet tooth, so I often chose sugary snacks such as chocolate and sweet bread. For example, I remember buying a chocolate-filled bun from the school canteen almost every Friday.

제안: Improve grammar and cohesion. Begin with a clear statement, then explain with a reason and an example. Use linking words like because and for this reason. Be specific about timing and cultural practice.

예시: Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year. For instance, in Korea people often eat samgyetang, a ginseng chicken soup, during the hottest days of summer because it is believed to restore energy and balance the body. Many families have it on 'bok' days as a cultural tradition.

제안: Answer directly and expand with one clear supporting detail. Avoid sentence fragments and repetition. Use linking words like however or still if contrasting, or because to explain stability.

예시: Not really — my favourite food has stayed the same because I have always had a sweet tooth and still enjoy sugary snacks. For example, I still prefer chocolate-based treats more than savory ones.

× My favorite food is. Call wait because collate makes feel comfortable so whenever I feel stressed I just eat chocolate.

✓ My favorite food is chocolate because it makes me feel comfortable, so whenever I feel stressed I just eat chocolate.

The original has sentence fragments and unclear words ('Call wait', 'collate') and missing subject for verbs. This is a sentence structure error: complete the main clause by naming the food, remove or replace unclear words, and add the subject 'it' before 'makes' and the pronoun 'me' as the object. Also combine clauses with commas and conjunctions to make a fluent sentence. Suggestion: State the favorite food directly, use 'it makes me feel comfortable', and connect the reason with 'because' and the result with 'so'.

× I had a very sweet tooth at the time so I usually ate something sweet for a snack like chocolate or. Bread. Yeah, something like that.

✓ I had a very sweet tooth at the time, so I usually ate something sweet for a snack like chocolate or bread.

The original contains unnecessary sentence breaks and a punctuation issue rather than true singular/plural mismatch; however the fragmented 'chocolate or. Bread.' disrupts noun phrase continuity. Correct by combining into a single sentence and keeping plural/singular nouns consistent. Suggestion: Keep snack examples together separated by 'or' without extra periods and use commas to join clauses. Note: Also ensure tense consistency with 'had' and 'usually ate'.

× Yes, in Korea we is. We often eat tonic foods like samgyetang.

✓ Yes, in Korea we are. We often eat tonic foods like samgyetang.

The verb 'is' does not agree with the subject 'we'. This is a subject-verb agreement error. Use the plural first-person form 'are' with 'we'. Note however that 'we are' is often followed by a complement; if the speaker means 'we do' or 'we eat', another correction could be 'Yes, in Korea we do.' Suggestion: Use 'we are' if describing a state, or 'we do' if affirming the action; here 'We often eat tonic foods' suffices, so you can omit 'we are.'

× It's a chicken soup during the hottest days of summer because people believe it or gives energy and helps the body recover.

✓ It's a chicken soup eaten during the hottest days of summer because people believe it gives energy and helps the body recover.

The original has an extra word 'or' that makes the clause ungrammatical and a misplaced verb form. This is a sentence structure error. Remove 'or' and use 'eaten' to show the soup is consumed during those days. Also keep the verb 'gives' directly after 'believe it' for correct clause structure. Suggestion: Use 'eaten during' and remove extraneous words to clarify meaning.

× It's a trend.

✓ It's a tradition.

Grammatically the sentence 'It's a trend.' is fine, but contextually Koreans eating samgyetang in summer is better described as a 'tradition' or 'custom' rather than a 'trend.' This is a pragmatic/word choice suggestion to improve accuracy. Suggestion: Use 'tradition' or 'custom' when referring to established cultural practices.

× Actually, not really. I used to. I always had a very sweet tooth, so I always liked something sugary. Taste snacks. It didn't.

✓ Actually, not really. I always had a very sweet tooth, so I always liked sugary snacks, and that hasn't changed.

The original contains fragments ('I used to.', 'Taste snacks.', 'It didn't.') and tense inconsistency. 'Used to' needs an accompanying action to contrast past and present; here the intended meaning is that the preference hasn't changed. This is a present tense issue: use present perfect ('hasn't changed') to indicate continuity from past to present. Also merge fragments into one clear sentence and use 'sugary snacks' as a correct noun phrase. Suggestion: Use 'hasn't changed' or 'is still the same' to show continuity.