Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体自然且信息量适中，但有冗余与小语法瑕疵。建议：1) 开头直接给出主题句（更简洁）；2) 在支持细节中使用连接词（e.g. because, also）并避免重复词汇（如两次fish）；3) 注意时态一致与简洁表达（e.g. “I often went fishing”可以更流畅地衔接）。具体练习：用一到两句说明喜欢的原因，再用一到两句补充个人回忆作为例子。

예시: My favourite food is fish because it tastes great and is high in protein. I also have fond memories of going fishing with my grandfather, which made me appreciate fresh seafood.

제안: 内容有用但表达不清晰且存在词汇错误（“staples”与“stable”混淆），句子较冗长且逻辑可更紧凑。建议：1) 使用正确词汇（如“staple foods”或“basic foods”）；2) 精简句子，把背景与个人感受分成两句；3) 提供具体例子（例如米饭、玉米）以增加细节。

예시: When I was young I mainly ate staple foods, such as rice and corn, because I grew up in a poor village. Food was often scarce, so I was used to simple, filling meals.

제안: 回答结构清晰且有例子，但用词和句子可更自然流畅。建议：1) 把一般陈述和例子用连接词衔接（e.g. “For example”很好）；2) 细化原因（为什么季节影响饮食）；3) 用更地道的表达（e.g. “we tend to eat”而不是“we add the intake of meat”）。

예시: Yes. In China people often adjust their diet with the seasons. For example, in spring and summer we tend to eat more vegetables and lighter meals, while in autumn and winter we prefer heartier dishes with more meat to keep warm.

제안: 回答表达了对比，但存在重复（“fatty, fatty”），时态和词汇需要修改（“taste becomes more bland”应为“has become blander”或“is blander”）。建议：1) 避免重复词汇；2) 用更自然的对比句型并解释原因（例如健康或习惯变化）；3) 提供具体食品例子。

예시: Yes. As a child I loved fatty and sweet foods, like fried snacks and sweets, but as I've grown older my taste has become blander and I now prefer lighter, healthier dishes.

× I love eating fish because fish is delicious and full of nutrition, especially protein.

✓ I love eating fish because it is delicious and full of nutrients, especially protein.

使用形容词/名词时要注意不可数名词与可数形式。原句中重复使用“fish”显得啰嗦，且“nutrition”通常作不可数名词，表示“营养”，要说“富含营养”更自然可用“nutrients（营养物质）”。建议将主语替换为代词“it”，并用复数形式“nutrients”。 建议：用代词避免重复，nutrition改为nutrients或用短语“rich in nutrition”。

× I also remember when I was young I often went fishing with my grandfather.

✓ I also remember that when I was young I often went fishing with my grandfather.

句子缺少连词导致从句结构不完整。引导词“that”可以使“remember”后接完整的宾语从句，句子更通顺。 建议：在表达“记得……事情”时用remember that或直接用过去时短句，两者均可。

× I remember when I was young, I always enjoyed eating staples because I was born and raised up in a remote village where people didn't have enough food to eat, so I always felt hungry.

✓ I remember that when I was young, I always enjoyed eating staple foods because I was born and raised in a remote village where people didn't have enough food, so I always felt hungry.

有几个问题：1) “staples”作为名词可以，但更常用表达是“staple foods”；2) “born and raised up”中“up”多余，应为“born and raised”；3) “people didn't have enough food to eat”中“to eat”重复赘余，可简化为“didn't have enough food”。此外时态使用为过去时，句中动词形式已大体正确，主要是措辞和冗余问题。 建议：用“staple foods”，去掉多余的“up”和“to eat”。

× I liked eating stable.

✓ I liked eating staple foods.

原句将“stable”（形容词，意为“稳定的”）误用为名词。正确的词是“staple”（常用作名词或形容词，表示主食或主要的），此处应使用名词短语“staple foods”。 建议：区分stable和staple，表达“主食”用staple food(s)。

× Chinese people often eat different foods on the basis of Four Seasons.

✓ Chinese people often eat different foods according to the four seasons.

“on the basis of”在语感上不如“according to”自然，且“Four Seasons”不应大写为专有名词，应该是“the four seasons”。 建议：用“according to the four seasons”或“depending on the season”。

× For example, in spring and summer we eat less meat and more vegetables, but in winter and autumn we add the intake of meat.

✓ For example, in spring and summer we eat less meat and more vegetables, but in winter and autumn we increase our meat intake.

“add the intake of meat”是不自然的表达，动词和名词搭配错误。应使用动词“increase”搭配“meat intake”或直接说“eat more meat”。另外“autumn”与“winter”前可以省掉重复的“we”，但保留也可。 建议：用“increase our meat intake”或“eat more meat”。

× Yes, it has actually. My taste in food had changed greatly.

✓ Yes, it has, actually. My taste in food has changed a lot.

时态混用错误：上一句使用现在完成时“has”，下一句不应使用过去完成时“had”表示与现在有关的变化，应该用现在完成时“has changed”。此外“greatly”可接受，但更自然是“a lot”。 建议：保持现在完成时一致，使用“has changed”。

× When I was young, I especially enjoyed fatty, fatty and sweet food which always made me feel satisfied.

✓ When I was young, I especially enjoyed fatty and sweet foods, which always made me feel satisfied.

问题包括：1) 重复“fatty, fatty”显然是笔误或重复；2) “food”在这里指多种食物，应使用复数“foods”或泛指复数；3) 关系从句前应加逗号。保持过去时“enjoyed”是正确的。 建议：去掉重复词，使用复数“fatty and sweet foods”。

× But as I grew up, my taste becomes more bland.

✓ But as I grew up, my taste became blander.

时态不一致：从句“as I grew up”是过去时，主句应使用过去时“became”而不是现在时“becomes”。另外“more bland”结构虽然可用，但比较级更自然是“blander”。 建议：使时态一致，使用“became blander”。