Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง หลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำซ้อน และใช้ linking words เล็กน้อยเพื่อความลื่นไหล ตัวอย่างที่ควรปรับ: เริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ตอบตรงคำถาม เพิ่มรายละเอียดสั้นๆ เกี่ยวกับพฤติกรรม และสรุปด้วยเหตุผลหรือทางเลือกที่ทำแทนการเดิน

예시: No, I don't walk a lot. I usually spend most of my time sitting in my room, so I only go out occasionally. When I do go out, I prefer to ride a bicycle or a motorcycle instead of walking.

제안: แก้ไวยากรณ์อดีตกาล และอย่าพูดซ้ำ ให้ระบุรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ใครพาไป เดินทำอะไร และทำไมใช้การเดินเป็นวิธีจัดการพฤติกรรมของเด็ก ใช้ linking words เช่น "because" หรือ "so" อย่างถูกต้อง

예시: Yes, I used to walk a lot as a child. My parents or friends often asked me to walk around the house because if I cried they preferred me to be active instead of watching television or using an iPad.

제안: ปรับการใช้คำและโครงสร้างให้เป็นธรรมชาติ อธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจนและให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น บรรยากาศ สภาพอากาศ หรือกิจกรรมที่ทำในสวน ใช้ linking words เช่น "because", "so" และจบประโยคให้สมบูรณ์

예시: In my opinion, people like walking in parks because it helps them relax after a busy day. Parks offer fresh air, greenery and a peaceful atmosphere, so people can unwind and enjoy nature.

제안: แก้คำศัพท์และการสะกดผิด เช่น "ticket of sand" ควรเป็น "texture of sand" หรือ "soft sand" และปรับไวยากรณ์ ให้ประโยคกระชับ ใช้คำอธิบายความรู้สึกที่ชัดเจน พร้อม linking word เล็กน้อย

예시: I would love to take a long walk on the beach because I enjoy the sea view and the soft texture of the sand. Walking on sand feels like a gentle massage on my feet, which is very relaxing.

제안: ปรับ tense ให้ถูกต้อง ใช้คำที่เหมาะสมเช่น "neighborhood" และวลีที่เป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น "take a walk" แทน "dedicated to walk" อธิบายสั้นๆ ว่าเดินนานเท่าไรหรือทำอะไรระหว่างทาง เพื่อเพิ่มรายละเอียด

예시: The last time I went for a walk was around my neighborhood. I was very stressed from work that day, so I decided to take a short walk to relax and recharge my energy.

× No, I don't think I'm walk a lot.

✓ No, I don't think I walk a lot.

Subject and verb should use simple present when expressing habits. 'I'm walk' is ungrammatical because the auxiliary 'am' + base verb requires -ing (present continuous). Use the simple present 'I walk' to show a habitual action.

× I spend most of time sitting in my room and sometime I have to go out.

✓ I spend most of the time sitting in my room and sometimes I have to go out.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'most of the time'. 'Sometime' (one occasion) vs 'sometimes' (occasionally) — here 'sometimes' is correct. Also keep plural 'times' implied by phrase 'most of the time'.

× So I decide I decided to use the bicycle or motorcycle then walk.

✓ So I decided to use a bicycle or a motorcycle instead of walking.

The speaker refers to a past decision, so use past tense 'decided'. Use articles 'a' before singular count nouns 'bicycle' and 'motorcycle'. Use 'instead of' to contrast choices and the gerund 'walking' after preposition.

× Yes, I had walk a lot when I was child.

✓ Yes, I walked a lot when I was a child.

Use simple past 'walked' for habitual past actions. 'Had walk' is incorrect; 'had' would require a past participle. Also include article 'a' before 'child'.

× My parent or friends at me ask me to walk around my house because every time I cry my parents don't want me to watch like television or iPad so they decide to take me walking.

✓ My parents or friends would ask me to walk around my house because whenever I cried my parents didn't want me to watch television or use an iPad, so they decided to take me for walks.

Use plural 'parents'. 'At me ask me' is ungrammatical; use 'would ask me' for repeated past actions. Use 'whenever' for repeated occasions, past tense 'cried' matches 'didn't want'. Use 'watch television' and 'use an iPad' for clarity. 'Decide' to past 'decided' and 'take me for walks' is idiomatic.

× In my opinion, the people who like to work in the park is because they want to let themselves from a time of hard work.

✓ In my opinion, people who like to walk in the park do so because they want to give themselves a break from hard work.

'Work' should be 'walk' here. Subject-verb agreement: plural 'people' takes 'do', not 'is'. Use idiomatic 'give themselves a break' instead of 'let themselves from a time of hard work'.

× So they need to be relaxed and I think they also want to see like nature will because park have many trees and.

✓ So they need to relax, and I think they also want to see nature because parks have many trees.

Use infinitive 'to relax' instead of 'to be relaxed' for intention. Remove filler 'like' and 'will'. Use plural 'parks' or 'the park' and correct verb agreement 'parks have'. Finish the sentence properly.

× It will be great if I have a chance to walk on the beach because I love the sea view and I also love the ticket of sand.

✓ It would be great if I had a chance to walk on the beach because I love the sea view and I also love the feel of the sand.

For hypothetical situations use conditional 'would' and past 'had'. 'Ticket of sand' is incorrect; likely 'feel of the sand'. Use correct noun 'feel' to describe sensation.

× Every time I step on sand it's feel like it's sore pillow in my feet, so it's feel really great.

✓ Every time I step on the sand it feels like a soft pillow under my feet, so it feels really great.

Use 'it feels' for sensation with correct third person singular verb. 'Sore pillow' is wrong meaning; use 'soft pillow'. Preposition 'under my feet' is idiomatic. Maintain consistent 'feels' form.

× I think my last time is walk along my neighborhood because in that day I was so stressed from the work and I want to relax so I dedicated to walk for a while to relax myself and reshard my energy.

✓ I think last time I walked along my neighborhood because that day I was so stressed from work and I wanted to relax, so I decided to walk for a while to relax and recharge my energy.

Use past tense 'walked', 'that day', 'was', 'wanted', 'decided' for past event. 'Dedicated to walk' is incorrect; use 'decided to walk'. 'Reshard' is wrong; correct word 'recharge'. Use 'recharge my energy' or simply 'recharge'.