Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, finish your idea, and add one specific detail. Use linking words to connect reasons. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk to my office every day because it lets me enjoy the scenery and notice interesting events along the route. For example, I often see street performers and small markets, which makes the commute enjoyable and relaxing.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid trailing off, and add a specific memory or example. Use a linking word to show sequence or reason. Keep answers complete and under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. I used to walk with my friends around the neighborhood and we would explore hidden gardens where we played games and talked for hours. Those walks helped us form close friendships and sparked my curiosity about local places.

제안: Give a direct opening sentence, avoid small grammatical errors, complete the final point, and use linking words (first, second, finally). Provide specific examples of park features to support your reasons.

예시: People like to walk in parks for several reasons. First, parks provide open space for exercise and help people stay fit. Second, the pleasant scenery—like trees, ponds, and flowerbeds—creates a relaxing atmosphere. Finally, parks often have benches and walking paths that make it convenient for socializing or resting.

제안: Answer directly, correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "Guangdong" or "Guangzhou" province), avoid repeated phrases, finish your thought, and give one concrete reason or example of what you'd see. Keep it natural and within five sentences.

예시: I would like to take a long walk in Guangdong province because it offers a variety of landscapes, from coastal areas and grasslands to hilly regions. For instance, I would enjoy walking along seaside paths in the morning and then hiking through nearby hills to experience different scenery and local culture.

제안: Provide a concise topic sentence, avoid repetition, give one or two specific details about the walk (names or activities), and use a linking word to show result or feeling. Keep it within five sentences and natural sounding.

예시: I recently went for a walk in Yunnan Province. We visited a beautiful lake and ancient monasteries, and I especially remember hiking around Erhai Lake where the views were stunning. It was an unforgettable experience because of the scenery and local culture.

× Yes, I work a lot. I walk to my office every day because I am able to, uh, see the scenery on the way and, uh, find some interesting things happening in the surrounding, which makes me very.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot. I walk to my office every day because I am able to see the scenery along the way and find interesting things happening in the surroundings, which makes me very happy.

The sentence had present tense usage that was mostly correct but included awkward phrases and missing words. 'on the way' is better as 'along the way' for natural English; 'surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings'; the clause 'which makes me very' was incomplete and needs an adjective such as 'happy'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Ensure consistent simple present tense for habitual actions and complete the final clause. Suggested improvement: use natural collocations ('along the way', 'surroundings') and finish clauses with appropriate adjectives.

× Yes, I would go out to have a walk with my friend in the neighborhood. We would go to some hidden place to play games or, uh, just talk to each other. We had a lot of.

✓ Yes, I used to go out for walks with my friends in the neighborhood. We would go to hidden places to play games or just talk to each other. We had a lot of fun.

The original mixed conditional/modal 'would' and singular/plural forms caused awkwardness. For habitual past actions, 'used to' or 'would' are acceptable, but 'would go out to have a walk' is unnatural; use 'go out for walks'. 'My friend' should be plural 'my friends' if referring generally; 'some hidden place' better as 'hidden places'. The final sentence was incomplete; add 'fun'. Suggested improvement: choose clear past habitual structures ('used to' or 'would') and ensure plurality and sentence completion.

× First, people walk to in the park to exercise and maintain their fitness. Second, parks offer pleasant scenery on their way to walk, which is a relaxing for people. And the last one is.

✓ First, people walk in the park to exercise and maintain their fitness. Second, parks offer pleasant scenery during a walk, which is relaxing for people. And the last reason is that parks provide a peaceful environment.

'walk to in the park' contains redundant prepositions; correct form is 'walk in the park'. 'on their way to walk' is ungrammatical; use 'during a walk' or 'along the way'. 'a relaxing for people' misuses the article and noun; use 'relaxing' as an adjective. The final fragment 'And the last one is.' is incomplete and needs a full clause. Suggested improvement: simplify prepositional phrases ('in the park', 'during a walk') and complete sentence ideas.

× I like to take a long walk in Guangzhou province because it provides it possess the various of landscapes there, from grasslands to, uh, high plateau and ice mountains. Uh, it's exciting to see different views along the road and to.

✓ I would like to take a long walk in Guangdong province because it has a variety of landscapes, from grasslands to high plateaus and snowy mountains. It's exciting to see different views along the way.

Problems: 'provides it possess the various of landscapes' combines verbs and incorrect article/adjective forms. Use 'has a variety of landscapes' or 'possesses various landscapes'. 'Guangzhou province' is commonly 'Guangdong province' or 'Guangzhou' city; choose correct place name. 'high plateau' should be plural 'high plateaus' and 'ice mountains' is unnatural; use 'snowy mountains' or 'glaciated mountains'. The final clause was incomplete; remove trailing 'and to' and finish with a complete idea. Suggested improvement: use correct collocations ('a variety of', 'high plateaus', 'snowy mountains') and avoid redundant verbs.

× I went for a walk in Yunnan Province lately. We visited the beautiful lake and the ancient monasteries and the many, many beautiful scenic spots along the way. It's an incredible and unforgettable memory for all of us.

✓ I went for a walk in Yunnan Province recently. We visited a beautiful lake, ancient monasteries, and many scenic spots along the way. It was an incredible and unforgettable experience for all of us.

Use of 'lately' with simple past 'went' is awkward; 'recently' is more natural. 'the beautiful lake' may need 'a beautiful lake' unless a specific lake was previously identified. Repetition 'many, many beautiful scenic spots' is redundant; simplify to 'many scenic spots'. The final sentence should match past tense: use 'It was an incredible and unforgettable experience' rather than present 'It's' to keep tense consistency. Suggested improvement: maintain consistent past tense for completed past events and avoid redundant adjectives.