Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence stating how often you walk, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "near my apartment" repeated) and keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I walk regularly because my workplace is close to my apartment. Also, there is a large park nearby with nice scenery and skyline views, so I often go for a walk there after dinner to relax.

제안: Use correct past tense and link your ideas clearly. Begin with a direct topic sentence in past tense, then give specific examples and a brief reason using linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid general statements without detail.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents often took me to different attractions, so I walked outside a lot as a child. They believed that walking would help my eyesight and broaden my horizons.

제안: Structure your answer: give a clear main reason, then add one or two specific supporting points with linking words. Use correct nouns and plural forms, and avoid grammatical errors (e.g. "a lot of shady seats", "make good memories").

예시: People enjoy walking in parks mainly because of the pleasant environment. For example, parks offer shady benches and attractive scenery, so families and friends can relax and create good memories together.

제안: Combine sentences and correct grammar. Use conditional form smoothly and give specific reasons or examples of what you would do or see. Avoid repetition of 'like' and correct verb forms (e.g. 'touch nature' -> 'be close to nature').

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a national park. I would enjoy being close to nature, observing unique plants and geological features, and taking photos of interesting natural phenomena.

제안: Use correct past tense and give clearer, specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add where exactly you went and what you did, using linking words. Correct city descriptions (no article before 'China') and verbs (rode bikes).

예시: Last weekend I went for a walk with my friends in Shanghai. We explored several districts by bike, saw beautiful riverside scenery, and visited some popular landmarks in the city.

× I often have worked there after dinner.

✓ I often worked there after dinner.

This sentence incorrectly uses the present perfect 'have worked' with 'often' and a past time reference implied by 'after dinner' in a habitual past context. Use simple past 'worked' for repeated actions in the past. Suggestion: Use 'I often worked there after dinner' or if it is a present habit, 'I often work there after dinner.'

× I often go outside to have a walk when I was a child because my parents always take me to some new attractions.

✓ I often went outside to take a walk when I was a child because my parents always took me to new attractions.

The original mixes present tense verbs ('go', 'take') with the past time 'when I was a child'. Maintain past tense for all verbs describing past habits: 'went' and 'took'. Also 'take a walk' is the usual collocation. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent with time references.

× They told me that it can enhance my eyesight and expand my thinking.

✓ They told me that it could enhance my eyesight and expand my thinking.

When reporting what someone said about the past, use a past modal ('could') rather than present 'can'. This keeps sequence of tenses consistent. Suggestion: Use 'could' after 'told' when reporting past statements.

× Actually, in my opinion parks have a beautiful scenery and there are a lot of shady seating for individuals.

✓ Actually, in my opinion parks have beautiful scenery and there are a lot of shady seats for people.

'Scenery' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. 'Seating' can be uncountable but 'shady seats' is clearer here; 'individuals' is overly formal—'people' is natural. Suggestion: Use uncountable nouns correctly and choose plural countable nouns when referring to items like seats.

× You can walk there with my friend and your family members and a good friend you can have a good memories in there.

✓ You can walk there with your friend or your family, and with a good friend you can have good memories there.

Pronouns were inconsistent ('my friend' vs 'your family members')—keep perspective consistent. 'A good memories' is ungrammatical: 'memories' is plural so no 'a'. 'In there' is awkward; use 'there'. Suggestion: Keep pronoun perspective consistent and match articles to countable nouns.

× Yes, I'd like to take a long walk. If I had a chance. I'd like to go to some national parks to have a long walk.

✓ Yes, I'd like to take a long walk. If I had the chance, I'd go to some national parks to take a long walk.

'If I had a chance.' is a sentence fragment and punctuation is incorrect. Use a single conditional sentence with correct punctuation and a consistent conditional verb form: 'If I had the chance, I'd go...' Also 'have a long walk' is less natural than 'take a long walk.' Suggestion: Combine clauses properly and use natural collocations.

× I like touch the nature. I like find some natural phenomena and I like nature.

✓ I like to be close to nature. I like to find natural phenomena, and I like nature.

'Like touch' and 'like find' omit the infinitive marker 'to' or need gerunds. Also 'touch the nature' is awkward; say 'be close to nature' or 'touch nature.' Suggestion: Use 'like to + verb' or 'like + verb-ing' consistently and choose natural expressions.

× Last weekend I have a walk with my friends.

✓ Last weekend I went for a walk with my friends.

A specific past time ('Last weekend') requires simple past, not present perfect 'have'. Use 'went for a walk' or 'had a walk'—'went for a walk' is more natural. Suggestion: Use simple past with definite past time expressions.

× We went to Shanghai, which is the biggest city of the China and is economic center of the country.

✓ We went to Shanghai, which is the biggest city in China and the economic center of the country.

Do not use 'the' before country names like 'China'. Use 'in China' not 'of the China.' Also include the article 'the' before 'economic center'. Suggestion: Use 'in' with country names and correct article placement: 'the economic center'.

× We ride the bike in Shanghai be district and see beautiful scenery.

✓ We rode bikes around Shanghai's districts and saw beautiful scenery.

The sentence mixes present tense 'ride' with past context and has incorrect word order ('be district'). Use past tense 'rode' and pluralize 'bikes' if more than one. 'Around Shanghai's districts' or 'in different districts of Shanghai' is clearer. Suggestion: Use past tense for past events, correct prepositions and pluralization.