Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., “I always walk” repeated), and use linking words to add brief details. Include a specific frequency and an example to sound more fluent.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often, usually several times a week with my friends. For example, we often walk to the local market or cinema because it’s a convenient and sociable way to get there.

제안: Clarify the time frame and correct grammar. Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid confusion and filler words.

예시: Yes, I often played outside with my neighbours when I was a child. For instance, we used to walk to the nearby playground every afternoon because we preferred playing outside to staying at home.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) and complete your sentences. Avoid vague statements like “it is good.”

예시: People like walking in parks because the atmosphere is peaceful and green. For example, parks offer fresh air and benches to rest, so walkers can relax and enjoy nature away from traffic.

제안: Respond with a clear conditional sentence and provide specific reasons. Reduce hesitation words (um, uh) and correct verb forms. Add one or two concrete details about what appeals to you there.

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in New York City because I’m curious about its varied neighbourhoods and famous parks like Central Park, which would offer both urban sights and green space.

제안: Give a clear past-tense answer with specific details: when, who, and how it felt. Avoid filler words and fix grammar (e.g., “a park,” “an unforgettable day,” “it made me feel calmer and happier”). Keep it within a few natural sentences.

예시: Recently I went for a walk in a nearby park with my classmates and we had a picnic. It was an unforgettable day because the weather was perfect and it made me feel relaxed and happy.

× Yes, I always walk, especially I walk with my friends.

✓ Yes, I always walk, especially with my friends.

The original repeats the verb 'walk' unnecessarily. Removing the repetition and using the prepositional phrase 'with my friends' is natural. Also no present participle required here; keep simple present 'walk'. Suggestion: Avoid repeating the main verb; use concise phrases like 'especially with my friends.'

× We always go the market or the cinema.

✓ We always go to the market or the cinema.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'to' before destinations. Use 'to the market' and 'to the cinema' with the definite article 'the' because these are specific places. Suggestion: Use 'go to' + place: 'go to the market.'

× It's interesting and funny.

✓ It's interesting and fun.

Both 'interesting' and 'funny' can be used, but 'fun' is the usual adjective to describe enjoyable activities. 'Funny' primarily means causing laughter. Use 'fun' to convey enjoyment. Suggestion: Use 'fun' for enjoyable experiences.

× I like walking.

✓ I like walking.

This sentence is correct. 'Like' agrees with the subject 'I' so no change needed. Suggestion: Keep as is.

× Is I always played with my neighbors.

✓ I always played with my neighbors.

The auxiliary 'Is' is incorrect. For past habitual action use the simple past 'I always played.' Remove the extraneous 'Is.' Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb order: 'I always played...'.

× I have never gone to my house because I I like it play with my friends, so I always go to the walk No, but I'm.

✓ I never went home because I liked playing with my friends, so I always went out to play.

The original mixes tenses and has several errors: 'have never gone to my house' is awkward for habitual past; use simple past 'never went home.' 'I I like it play' has extra words and wrong verb forms; use 'liked playing.' 'go to the walk' is incorrect — use 'went out to play.' Remove extraneous fragments like 'No, but I'm.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past) and use natural expressions: 'I never went home because I liked playing with my friends.'

× Because this place is comfortable and calm.

✓ Because the park is comfortable and calm.

As a standalone answer to 'Why do people like to walk in parks?' the fragment should explicitly reference the subject: 'the park' or 'parks.' Adding 'the park' makes it a complete sentence. Suggestion: Include the noun after 'because' for clarity.

× For example, everyone likes walking in parks.

✓ For example, everyone likes walking in parks.

This sentence is correct and fits the context. Suggestion: No change needed.

× It is good. You relaxing and.

✓ It is good. You can relax there.

The fragment 'You relaxing and.' is ungrammatical. To express the intended meaning use a modal or simple verb: 'You can relax there.' This completes the sentence and corrects verb form. Suggestion: Use 'You can relax there' or 'It helps you relax.'

× If I have a lot of opportunities, I would like to, uh, walk, umm.

✓ If I had a lot of opportunities, I would like to walk.

This is a second conditional situation (hypothetical), so the if-clause needs past tense 'had' not present 'have.' Keep the conditional 'would like' in the result clause. Suggestion: Use 'If I had...' for unreal present/future conditions.

× In a in New York, the city is seems really comfortable.

✓ In New York, the city seems really comfortable.

Remove the duplicate preposition 'in a in' and the extra 'is' before 'seems.' Use 'seems' alone as the linking verb. 'In New York' is sufficient to indicate location. Suggestion: Keep one preposition and one linking verb: 'In New York, the city seems comfortable.'

× I want to go in the future.

✓ I want to go in the future.

This sentence is grammatically correct; it uses present 'want' to express a future intention. No change needed. Suggestion: Optionally use 'I would like to go in the future' for politeness.

× I went to park with my classmates, umm we did a picnic in outside this time we really unforgettable day for me to be honest, it gave me a calmer and a happy.

✓ I went to the park with my classmates. We had a picnic outside. It was an unforgettable day for me; to be honest, it made me feel calm and happy.

Multiple errors: missing article 'the' before 'park'; run-on sentence and incorrect verb choices. Use 'had a picnic outside' for past action. 'We really unforgettable day' needs 'It was an unforgettable day.' 'It gave me a calmer and a happy' is ungrammatical—use 'it made me feel calm and happy.' Split into sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use proper articles, past tense verbs, and clear sentence boundaries: 'I went to the park... We had a picnic outside. It was an unforgettable day...'}]}},{