Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, use 2–3 supporting details, and avoid redundancy and sentence fragments. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and correct common grammar errors (e.g., "do walking" → "go walking", "my hairs" → "my hair").

예시: Yes, I walk regularly in the mornings because it helps me stay fresh and healthy. For example, I enjoy the fresh air and the sound of birds, which makes the walk relaxing. Because it is quiet at that time, I can think clearly and start my day well.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear past-tense topic sentence and specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and avoid run-on sentences. Include linking words like "because" and "so" to show cause and effect, and give one clear example (who, where, what).

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. For instance, I used to go to the park every day with my grandmother because she wanted me to explore the neighborhood and meet new people. As a result, I became more confident speaking with others.

제안: Begin with a clear general statement and then provide two specific reasons with examples. Correct subject-verb agreement and word choice (e.g., "everybody enjoys", "parks are"). Use linking words like "also" and "for example" to structure ideas and finish sentences fully.

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because it is good exercise and it helps them relax. Also, parks are social spaces where you can meet neighbors or join group activities; for example, many people chat on benches or join morning exercise groups.

제안: Answer with a clear conditional sentence and give specific reasons why you would choose that place. Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary (e.g., "an environmental park", "well-planned", "I have never had the opportunity"). Keep to 2–3 supporting sentences and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the environmental park in my city because it is well planned and peaceful, with many old trees and little traffic. I haven’t explored it much since I moved away, so I would like to spend time there to enjoy the scenery.

제안: Respond with a clear past-tense topic sentence and avoid length errors (e.g., "3045 minutes" should be "30–45 minutes"). Use concise reasons and correct word choice (e.g., "back garden" → "backyard"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so" appropriately.

예시: Recently, I walked in my backyard because it is the most convenient place to walk. I usually walk there for about 30–45 minutes whenever I feel the need to exercise.

× Definitely yes.

✓ Definitely, yes.

Add a comma for natural spoken response; this is not a grammar error per se but improves fluency. The sentence is a short affirmative reply in present tense; adding a pause makes it sound natural.

× I am a morning riser and first and foremost I do walking to keep myself fresh and healthy.

✓ I am a morning riser and, first and foremost, I walk to keep myself fresh and healthy.

The phrase 'do walking' is ungrammatical. After 'do' we use a verb base form only for emphasis (do walk) but not 'do walking'. Use the simple present 'I walk' to describe habitual action. Commas improve clarity.

× this is the only time when I can get enough exposure of the nature in my surrounding.

✓ this is the only time when I can get enough exposure to nature in my surroundings.

Use the preposition 'to' with 'exposure' (exposure to something). 'Nature' is uncountable so no article 'the' is needed here. 'Surroundings' is usually plural. These changes correct preposition and article usage.

× I love to hear the chirping of birds and let the winds play with my hairs.

✓ I love to hear the chirping of birds and let the wind play with my hair.

Use 'wind' as an uncountable noun in this context and 'hair' as an uncountable noun when referring to hair on the head. 'Winds' and 'hairs' suggest multiple distinct winds/hairs which is incorrect here.

× So it is one of the lonely time that I.

✓ So it is one of the quietest times for me.

Original is incomplete and uses incorrect word choice. 'Lonely time' is odd for this meaning; 'quietest times' or 'peaceful times' is better. Also provide a full clause; the fragment 'that I.' is incomplete.

× Frequently I love to explore the outside.

✓ I used to love exploring the outdoors frequently.

The question asks about childhood (past). Use a past habitual structure: 'used to' or past simple. 'Explore the outside' is unnatural; 'exploring the outdoors' is the correct phrase.

× Today as well as when I was a kid I went to park daily with my granny because she let me to have a feel in the surrounding and also introduced me many new people so that I able to converse each and everyone effectively and secondly she introduced lots of plans.

✓ Both now and when I was a kid, I went to the park daily with my granny because she let me experience the surroundings and introduced me to many new people so that I was able to converse with everyone effectively; she also introduced me to many plants.

Multiple issues: use 'the park' with definite article, 'let me to have a feel' is ungrammatical—use 'let me experience' or 'let me feel'. 'Introduced me many new people' requires 'introduced me to many new people'. Use past forms ('was able'). 'Each and everyone' is redundant—use 'everyone'. Likely 'plans' was intended as 'plants'. Added punctuation for clarity.

× To keep themselves fit and healthy, everybody enjoy walks in the park.

✓ To keep themselves fit and healthy, everybody enjoys walking in the park.

Subject 'everybody' is singular and requires singular verb 'enjoys'. Also use 'walking' (noun) instead of 'walks' for general activity. 'Theirselves' not used; 'themselves' used correctly here.

× Moreover, park is also a place to have many other people so we can get a new connection as well as we share our thought with the many other people who are living in our neighbors.

✓ Moreover, a park is also a place to meet many other people, so we can make new connections and share our thoughts with the people living in our neighborhood.

Use 'a park' with article, 'meet' instead of 'have', 'make connections' is natural, 'share our thoughts' plural, 'neighborhood' is the correct single noun, not 'neighbors'.

× So park are not only for work, but they are also providing connection and.

✓ So parks are not only for exercise or work, but they also provide social connections.

Subject 'park' must be plural 'parks' to match verb 'are'. 'Providing connection and.' is incomplete; use 'provide social connections' for clear meaning. Also 'work' may be replaced by 'exercise' depending on intended meaning.

× I have environment park in my city and it is very famous for a long shabby tree and it is well planned and far from the traffic of city.

✓ I have an environmental park in my city. It is very famous for its long, shabby trees; it is well planned and far from the city's traffic.

Use article 'an' before vowel sound. 'Environmental park' is correct term. Use possessive 'its long...trees' and plural 'trees' if multiple. 'Traffic of city' should be 'the city's traffic'. Punctuation split into sentences for clarity.

× Most of the people of my area are going for walk in this place but I had never opportunity to explore this nowadays I shifted.

✓ Most people in my area go for walks there, but I never had the opportunity to explore it because I have recently moved.

Use 'go for walks' habitual present, 'never had the opportunity' for past negative, 'nowadays I shifted' is incorrect—use 'I have recently moved' to show recent change. Prepositions adjusted ('in my area', 'there').

× I went for Walker in my back garden only because this is one of the easiest way to go there because it is far more convenient and accessible as compared to going back in other area.

✓ I went for a walk in my backyard because it is one of the easiest places to go; it is far more convenient and accessible compared to going to other areas.

'Walker' should be 'a walk' (noun). 'back garden' -> 'backyard' or 'back garden' with article. 'One of the easiest way' should be 'one of the easiest places/ways' plural agreement. 'Going back in other area' unclear; use 'going to other areas'.

× So whenever I feel need to walk, I always go there and do walk for 3045 minutes.

✓ So whenever I feel the need to walk, I always go there and walk for 30–45 minutes.

Add 'the' in 'the need'. 'Do walk' is unnecessary; use 'walk'. Write duration as '30–45 minutes' with a dash or '30 to 45 minutes'. This fits present habitual tense.