Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng có lỗi lặp từ, ngữ pháp và một vài chỗ thiếu gọn. Cần dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ (“I I”), rút gọn dài dòng và dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc. Cụ thể: 1) Sửa lỗi lặp và thì: “I walk more than I’d like to admit.” 2) Viết tối đa 3–4 câu, bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu ví dụ. 3) Dùng linking words như “for example” hoặc “even when” hợp lý.

예시: I walk quite often; in fact, I walk more than I’d like to admit. For example, I usually go for a walk in the park whenever I have the chance, even after a long, tiring day.

제안: Nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp (thời quá khứ) và lặp từ, phát âm không liên quan nhưng ảnh hưởng tới sự rõ ràng. Cần dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán, sửa cấu trúc và rút gọn: 1) Dùng “I often went” thay vì “I often go”. 2) Tránh lặp từ như “when when”, “of of”. 3) Thêm mệnh đề giải thích ngắn gọn với liên từ như “because” hoặc “so”.

예시: Yes, definitely. I often went outside as a child because there were no smartphones back then, so we spent more time playing outdoor games instead of watching TV.

제안: Ý tưởng hợp lý nhưng diễn đạt lộn xộn, ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác (“unwind” cần phù hợp với chủ ngữ, “durability” không phù hợp). Cần dùng từ phù hợp (relax, stamina, fitness), cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và liên từ để nối ý. Hạn chế lặp như “just it's just”.

예시: People often walk in parks to relax after a hectic day and to improve their stamina and overall fitness. Also, for many people it becomes a simple daily routine that helps clear their mind.

제안: Trả lời rõ ý nhưng có lặp từ và thiếu gọn. Cần mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, dùng từ chính xác (mountains, a quiet place), tránh lặp như “the like the environment, the the those”. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về lý do để tăng tính thuyết phục.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains because I enjoy the scenery and the peaceful environment, which helps me relax and recharge.

제안: Nhiều lỗi về thì (chia động từ), cấu trúc và từ không phù hợp (“wandering” dùng bị sai thì), câu dài lủng củng. Cần dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc quá khứ gần (“I've been wandering” hoặc “I wandered”), câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể. Tránh slang như “just gonna”.

예시: Lately I've been wandering around my neighborhood. I find it relaxing and I often explore streets or small parks to discover places in my hometown that I haven't seen before.

× I usually take a walk every time when I have the opportunity to do so.

✓ I usually take a walk whenever I have the opportunity.

The repeated wording 'every time when' is awkward and redundant. Use 'whenever' for habitual actions. Keep present simple for routines. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× For example, I always take a walk in the park even though I feel so tired after a very busy day.

✓ For example, I always take a walk in the park even though I feel tired after a very busy day.

Remove the unnecessary intensifier 'so' which is informal and may be redundant. Present simple is correct for habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Use 'for a walk' rather than 'to have a walk' which is unnatural in this context. The question uses past tense 'did' so the rest should use base form; 'go' is correct here. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I often go outside for to have a walk when I was a child because actually when when we was young there was no smartphones at all and we often participate in outdoor games instead of of watching smartphones or TV.

✓ I often went outside for a walk when I was a child because when we were young there were no smartphones at all and we often played outdoor games instead of watching smartphone videos or TV.

Multiple past-tense errors: use 'went' and 'was' -> 'were' for plural subject 'we'; 'there was' -> 'there were' for countable plural 'smartphones'; 'participate in' is awkward — use 'played' for children and past simple; remove duplicated words. Keep consistent past tense. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× So definitely yes.

✓ So definitely, yes.

Add a comma for clarity; sentence is short and acceptable but punctuation improves readability. No major grammar change required. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I think people like to walk in parks mostly because it actually unwind them from a very hectic day or maybe they want to increase their durability.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks mostly because it helps them unwind after a very hectic day, or maybe they want to increase their stamina.

Verb 'unwind' needs third-person singular 'helps' to agree with singular 'it' or change subject to 'it helps them' or 'walking helps them'. 'Durability' is incorrect for fitness; use 'stamina'. Maintain subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Also their strength, like both physical and mental strength and sometimes just it's just their daily routine.

✓ Also their strength, both physical and mental, and sometimes it's just part of their daily routine.

Avoid repeated 'just' and add 'part of' to make the phrase natural. Commas improve clarity. Pronoun usage 'their' is fine; adjust structure for fluency. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yeah, it's an interesting question if you have the chance to do so.

✓ Yeah, that's an interesting question if you have the chance to do so.

Use 'that's' to refer to the current question; 'it's' can be ambiguous. Sentence is otherwise acceptable. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I think I would choose some mountains, like mountain trekking because I do enjoy the scenery, the like the environment, the the those quiet place and it helps me unwind a lot.

✓ I think I would choose the mountains, like mountain trekking, because I enjoy the scenery, the environment, and those quiet places, and it helps me unwind a lot.

Adjust articles ('the mountains'), remove filler 'the like', fix duplicated 'the', change 'place' to plural 'places' to match 'those'. Maintain conditional 'would' with base verbs and present simple for general truths. Ensure parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

Use present perfect 'have gone' with 'lately' to ask about recent activities that relate to the present. 'Did you go' is acceptable in some varieties but present perfect is more natural with 'lately'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Yeah, I just wandering around my neighborhood quite sometimes lately.

✓ Yeah, I've just been wandering around my neighborhood quite often lately.

Change to present perfect continuous 'I've been wandering' to describe recent repeated activity. 'Quite sometimes' is ungrammatical; use 'quite often'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× I do find it's pretty interesting because I think it's actually helps me to relax when whenever I don't have anything to do or just invest, just gonna explore some new things that I haven't seen it before in my hometown.

✓ I find it pretty interesting because I think it actually helps me relax when I don't have anything to do, or I just go out to explore new things in my hometown that I haven't seen before.

Remove unnecessary 'do' auxiliary 'do find' — 'I find' is natural. 'It's helps' should be 'it helps' (subject-verb agreement). Remove extra 'whenever' and 'it' after 'seen'. Replace informal 'just gonna' with 'I just go out to'. Use present simple and present perfect appropriately. Grammar problem type ID:6