Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly answer the question with correct tense and word choice. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., 'work' → 'walk', 'in a on a park' → 'in a park'). Use a topic sentence then a brief supporting detail. Keep it under 3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often, usually after dinner. I go to a nearby park with a friend and we walk for about 30 to 40 minutes to relax and get some exercise.

제안: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence about past habit, then give one or two specific supporting details. Improve cohesion with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. I used to go to the park with my friends and we would walk for about 30 to 40 minutes, which helped me develop a habit of regular walking.

제안: Give a concise, organized answer with clear reasons and specific examples. Use linking words ('for example', 'also', 'because') and correct collocations ('lose weight', 'clear their minds'). Keep sentences short and precise.

예시: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy fresh air and a peaceful environment. For example, many visit parks to exercise and lose weight, while others walk for about 30–40 minutes to clear their minds and reduce stress.

제안: Use the conditional correctly and be specific about the location and activities. Avoid unclear words ('tricks', 'Rakes') and repetition. Provide one clear reason why you would choose that place.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains with my friends because the trails are challenging and the scenery is beautiful. We would enjoy hiking on varied paths and get great views from the top.

제안: Use past simple for a recent action and avoid hesitations and filler words. Be specific about the place and what you talked about to make the answer more engaging. Keep to two sentences maximum.

예시: Lately, I went for a walk to the local park after dinner with a friend. We walked for about half an hour and talked about our plans for the weekend and work.

× Yes, I work a lot especially at night when when I completed my dinner.

✓ Yes, I work a lot, especially at night after I have finished my dinner.

The original sentence uses 'completed my dinner' which is atypical; native speakers use 'finish' and the present perfect ('have finished') is appropriate to show the action is completed before the present habit. Also remove duplicated 'when' and add a comma for clarity.

× I usually go with my friend in a on a park and we walked there for 30 to 40 minutes.

✓ I usually go with my friend to a park and we walk there for 30 to 40 minutes.

Use preposition 'to' with 'go' for locations, not 'in' or 'on'. Remove the extra 'a'. Change 'walked' to 'walk' to match the habitual present. Keep singular 'park' with article 'a'.

× Well, at my childhood, yeah, obviously I go with my with my friend.

✓ Well, in my childhood, I used to go with my friend.

Use 'in my childhood' not 'at my childhood'. For past habitual actions, 'used to' or past tense is appropriate rather than present tense 'go'.

× When I was a child, I go with my friend on a park where we where we walk for 30 to 40 minutes.

✓ When I was a child, I went to a park with my friend where we walked for 30 to 40 minutes.

Use past tense 'went' and 'walked' for past events. Use 'to a park' or 'went to a park' rather than 'on a park'. Remove the repeated 'where'.

× There's the habit which I gained and from from walking.

✓ It is a habit I developed from walking.

Original has awkward structure and repetition ('from from'). Use clear subject 'It' and verb 'developed' to express acquiring a habit. 'Gained' is less natural here.

× Well, people like to walk in parks because whenever they go to park for walk, they usually enjoy the fresh weather and some of the people go to park for work to lose their weight and make their mind fresh when they walk around 30-40 minutes.

✓ Well, people like to walk in parks because when they go for a walk they usually enjoy the fresh air, and some people go to the park to lose weight and refresh their minds by walking for about 30 to 40 minutes.

Use 'go for a walk' not 'go to park for walk'. 'Fresh air' is the correct collocation, not 'fresh weather'. Use 'to the park' for specific park visits. 'Lose their weight' -> 'lose weight'. 'Make their mind fresh' -> 'refresh their minds'. Use 'by walking for about 30 to 40 minutes' for clarity.

× When I get a chance I usually go with my friends on a mountainous area where there are lot of tricks to walk and yeah yeah we will enjoy a lot there to work on such type of Rakes.

✓ If I get the chance, I usually go with my friends to a mountainous area where there are many trails to walk, and we enjoy spending time there.

Use conditional 'If I get the chance' for hypothetical future. Use 'to a mountainous area' not 'on'. 'Lot of tricks' is incorrect — 'many trails' or 'paths' is appropriate. Remove 'yeah yeah' and the unclear phrase 'work on such type of Rakes'; replace with a clear expression 'enjoy spending time there'.

× Well, I usually go to work after dinner with my friend and yeah, we go there and work for half an hour and we discuss, uh, uh, so many things while walking.

✓ Well, I usually go for a walk after dinner with my friend, and we walk for half an hour while discussing many things.

'Go to work' is wrong context; use 'go for a walk'. Use 'walk' not 'work'. Combine clauses for fluency and remove filler sounds. 'Discuss many things' is more concise than 'discuss, uh, uh, so many things'.